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Hyber
by Gary E. Andrews - 06/11/25 11:18 PM
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MARBLE
by Gary E. Andrews - 06/11/25 10:54 PM
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CORE
by Gary E. Andrews - 06/11/25 10:43 PM
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My Country Girl
She don't think much about livin' in the city
She said,life in the fast lane,won't keep you pretty
Too much noise and too many strange lookin' faces
She loves that laid back easy country livin'
She said,life on a dirt lane,will keep ya grinnin'
Down at the creek,is one of her favorite places
With a heart as soft as her cotton dress
Eyes as pretty as a spring sunset
My country girl,passes all the tests
With a touch as soothin' as summer rain
And kisses sweet as sugar cane
My country girl,drives this country boy insane
I wouldn't trade her for nothin' in the world
My country girl
She don't like livin' in a New York minute
She said,Rodeo Drive,don't have one horse in it
Too much of a hassle and far too many plastic people
She likes takin' her time slow as molasses
She said,she likes to 4 wheel drive,through muddy batches
She likes to hear night critters and bells ringin' in a steeple
With a heart as soft as her cotton dress
Eyes as pretty as a spring sunset
My country girl,passes all the tests
With a touch as soothin' as summer rain
And kisses sweet as sugar cane
My country girl,drives this country boy insane
I wouldn't trade her for nothin' in the world
My country girl
I wouldn't trade her for nothin' in the world
My country girl
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She don't like livin' in a New York minute
She said,Rodeo Drive,don't have one horse in it
That's GOTTA be your opening line Michael. Fantastic.
IMO these lines are unnecessary:
"She don't think much about the city" and "She loves that laid back country livin'".
The reason is that they're superfluous. IE they're implied in every other line in the song. IE they're unnecessary for your story.
Your chorus is fantastic also IMO. Very lyrical and musical. This has really strong potential IMO.
Peace,
Ian
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I agree w/ Ian on those lines being the opening lines. Those are great lines. I love your chorus too. It flows very well as a lyric and could hear it almost playing its own tune. Very good write. 
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hey Ian,i appreciate your thoughts on this one!Yeah,i like those lines as openers since you mentiioned it but do you think i need to set it up first,i mean i could probably come up with something a bit stronger than i have now?Thanx!mike
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Thanx for droppin' in Marilyn,i appreciate the comments!Mike
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Wow dude.........got me singing this one already.
Great flow, rhythm and hook.
Let that music flow!
Can't wait!
Wonderful write!
Write on, Man,
Michael W. Brown, f.k.a. "bluesriff"
"The best way to find yourself is to lose yourself in the service of others."
Mahatma Gandhi
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She sounds the right sort of girl to settle down with Mike.Good story
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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hey Ian,i appreciate your thoughts on this one!Yeah,i like those lines as openers since you mentiioned it but do you think i need to set it up first, I disagree Michael. The line "Rodeo drive don't have one horse in it" says it all IMO. Sometimes the worst thing you can do is explain your clever lines! Peace, Ian
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thanx for checkin' it out Riff!As soon as i shake this cold,i'm gonna jump on it.Mike
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hey Ian,thanx again!No,i wasn't explaining it,i was asking if maybe i should keep it where it is but just write something stronger in V. 1.I can hear the song starting with the verse you like and keep it going from there,it wouldn't be a problem at all.I'll re-write and take a look!Thanx Ian!Mike
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I didn't see anything I would change. It seems to flow smoothly. And I kinda like the first verse the way it is set up. It portrays a laidback attitude very well. Very conversational lyrics. Thanks for posting.
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Hi Michael,
Ditto what everyone is saying! Really, really nice song, beautiful sentiments, and that Rodeo/horse line is especially great!
Lisa
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hey Chad,i appreciate that!Mike
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well thank ya Lisa!Every time i hear the word "ditto",for some reason it takes me back to smelling fresh run off copies of tests papers at school.I loved that smell!Mike
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man , you're a poet dont you know. a country poet, of course LOL!
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hey Max,you old sly dog,thanx man!Mike
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yeah,i think that'll work Max!Got a real soothin' sound,i like it!Who is singing with you?Mike
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just me & myself in overdubbing. it is quite a jim croce-maury muehleisen duet style
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Works for me as'tis, CycleGuy!
I'll Sug ya trade "batches" for "patches" tho...
(The former makes me think of Cookin'..the latter..of Land.)
KOS
..& Good Luck with a Fine One, Amigo!
Best Wishes, BGH, and a High-Five,
Stan
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hey other-cycle-guy,glad to see ya!I like your idea of "patches" i think i'll change it if i ever sing it!Thanx and send me the bill!Mike
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I think that the fourth line down would make a good start to this lyric.good job keep reaching for the stars.
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Thanx a bunch J!Ya'll are makin' it hard on which line to start with but i'm lovin' it!Mike
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Good write Michael
Cheers
Paul
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Very good lyrics. Although, I will admit I thought "molasses" was a setup for "muddy passes." You gave me a twist there. Fine job!
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She don't think much about livin' in the city
She said,life in the fast lane,won't keep you pretty
Too much noise and too many strange lookin' faces
Some great lines here. There sure are some strange lookin' faces here in Nashville. Any well-written song about a country girl should do well.
Jim
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Thank ya Dave!i like your thought and Stan also had a good one on the same line.Mike
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Much appreciated Jim!Ya gotta love a country girl,huh!Mike
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nice lyric im diggin your chorus. I think Ian was right about those two opening lines that would really start the song off right. best of luck with this one. i'm enjoying it. and you described a hottie in my book ha
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okay,i'm keepin' score on the openin' lines,LOL!I sure thank ya Brandon for your time and comments!Yeah she's hot!Mike
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