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Posted By: JAPOV

Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) Update - 05/09/21 10:45 PM

Just noodling this one... Very rough draft... All feedback appreciated smile

Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone)
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Second rendition smile

https://www.soundclick.com/music/songInfo.cfm?songID=14253600

Another day, same old story, count the ways to pass my time
Today's another page of never ending living loving life
Nothing changes, nothing dies, prophecy is all you have to justify
God's will in a world that will pass you by

There's nothing bigger than life, there's nothing new under the sun
Nothing takes the place of simply knowing right from wrong
Don't take for granted all you've learned and all you know

'Cause life's too short to waste your days looking for something better
Hang on tight to your faith, you can't change the weather
Count your blessings, you're not alone, we're in this together
Friend, as long as sun is shining life goes on
An' you don't wanna' miss me when I'm gone
'Cause I'm going home

Liars lie, believers pray, the meek inherit what God promised all to be
Try to change the world, you'll find you can't change me
Look around, see the play, a million actors playing parts of yesterday
Stakes are higher but the plot is still the same

There's nothing bigger than life...
Posted By: VNORTH2

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/10/21 07:51 PM

JAPOv

You are an excellent wordsmith. This is one fine lyric. .....Nothing takes the place of simply knowing right from wrong .... just an example of what I mean.

Steve
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/11/21 07:04 AM

Thanks Steve! I'm just wondering if "miss me when I'm gone" is getting across lol... wink
Posted By: Travis david

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/11/21 10:24 AM

Philosophically deep JAPOV.
Well thought through, the kind of complexity associated with some Pink Floyd songs.
A good start and certainly worth pursuing until satisfied.
Regards
John
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/11/21 08:16 PM

Oh, if only I could play like David Gilmour... Thanks for dropping in John! smile
Posted By: TC Perkins

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/12/21 02:27 AM

I liked the song but it definitely needs some honing.

I especially liked the subject matter, and the instrumentals are nice and punchy.

What I think it needs is just more honing to get the lyrics/melody to fit perfectly into the music bed. Also, watch your lowend on those tom hits when you do the final production!

Good song now; could be a great song with a little work.

Cheers,
TC
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/12/21 04:15 AM

Ha! I know exactly what you're saying, I couldn't find my vocal rhythm when I recorded this lol... the original version was a bit slower. I really like my floor tom effect lol, perhaps I'll think more about placement... Thanks for dropping in TC! smile
Posted By: ant

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/16/21 01:29 PM

Good foundation and nice groove. Felt to me like there was a mismatch between the punchy staccato groove and the more legato style singing with phrasing drawn out. Some of the lines seem a bit too far behind the beat. I think if the vocal better matched the groove, all would be well.

..ant
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/16/21 09:41 PM

Hmmmmm... YOU'VE got a pretty good voice... smile
Posted By: Sunset Poet

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/17/21 01:55 PM

Enjoyed it Tony.

I agree with the comments about the timing, but the prosody in your vocals always sound like they are misbehaving to me. I assumed that to be part of your swagger. wink
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/17/21 11:37 PM

Naaah', just a complete lack of interest in singing... smile
Posted By: IronKnee

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/19/21 06:10 AM

Awesome lyrics, JAPOV........the music and melody are rough, but very promising. The melodic and lyrical hook is stellar.
Good stuff!!............
-T
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/19/21 10:11 AM

Thanks Tom!

Hey, I wouldn't mind if you gave it a spin smile
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 05/23/21 11:11 PM

Second rendition smile

https://www.soundclick.com/music/songInfo.cfm?songID=14253600
Posted By: E Swartz

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 03:16 AM

Japov,

I missed this song earlier this spring. Just listened to part of the rain song--cool, but I'm tired and if I listened at full length, wouldn't be here listening to this gem. I really "like" your prosody with this--do like 2nd rendition the best). I hope you don't mind me bumping this up--I've been away late Spring with some health issues, so just catching up although I've peeked in a few times on a few songs.

This is a fabulous, great rock song with an interesting beat/rhythm. This song's rhythm has to be "felt" to sing it well--in which you do. Love the drums in your face, no nits--nice work.

steady-eddie.
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 05:38 AM

Thanks Eddie!
Yeah' I enjoy the rhythm of this one, just haven't settled on an arrangement... still "noodling". Wish I knew a real funky piano player!

Hey, JLS! wink
Posted By: E Swartz

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 11:52 AM

Just make sure you save your mixes.......I've noodled away some good ones that I never got back.........
Posted By: Sunset Poet

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 01:35 PM

Originally Posted by JAPOV

Liars lie, believers pray, the meek inherit what God promised all to be
Try to change the world, you'll find you can't change me



I'll be honest with you Tony...

Lines such as these seem a bit condemning, judgmental and egotistical.
For a song that professes to spread the "good word" of the "creator"...this seems very mortal and earthbound and somewhat contrary in spirit to what Christianity professes to profess.

Can't put it on my play list.
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 04:35 PM

Originally Posted by Sunset Poet
Originally Posted by JAPOV

Liars lie, believers pray, the meek inherit what God promised all to be
Try to change the world, you'll find you can't change me



I'll be honest with you Tony...

Lines such as these seem a bit condemning, judgmental and egotistical.
For a song that professes to spread the "good word" of the "creator"...this seems very mortal and earthbound and somewhat contrary in spirit to what Christianity professes to profess.

Can't put it on my play list.




You know Marty... as a man I actually think of myself politically as libertarian with a heavy Christian slant. So, I must respect everyone's God given free will to live their lives however they choose, as long as they don't impose upon the rights of others. However, since we're being honest lol... as a Christian I'm compelled to point out a glaring irony here. I wonder, how much sheer determination and self-edifying will does it take to make a point of denying God on a daily basis? Surely that must be exhausting!

I can't deny my healthy fear of God's judgment Marty, but I will respect your right to your opinion smile
Posted By: Sunset Poet

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 06:08 PM

Originally Posted by JAPOV


You know Marty... as a man I actually think of myself politically as libertarian with a heavy Christian slant. So, I must respect everyone's God given free will to live their lives however they choose, as long as they don't impose upon the rights of others. However, since we're being honest lol... as a Christian I'm compelled to point out a glaring irony here. I wonder, how much sheer determination and self-edifying will does it take to make a point of denying God on a daily basis? Surely that must be exhausting!

I can't deny my healthy fear of God's judgment Marty, but I will respect your right to your opinion smile


You know Tony... wink

I don't deny God. I am agnostic, not atheistic. My position as stated over and over again in your theocratic dissertion threads at JPF wink is that I am happy to accept God for whatever God is or is not. But I havent seen an earthly explanation that I can buy into. So I continue to watch for one.

That does not take sheer determination and self-edifying (gotta look that last one up for meaning).

It's a fairly relaxed posture. God is whatever God is or is not. That reality has no proven connection with what I might want God to be or what you might insist that God is.

John V's joke applies here....
A cardinal walked into the pope's office and said that Jesus was on the phone. The pope was elated. But then the cardinal said that there was bad news too. The pope asked what could possibly be bad about Jesus being on the phone. The Cardinal responded..."He is calling from Salt Lake City." wink

That joke says so much in so few words...and its' funny.
Posted By: Sunset Poet

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 06:13 PM


Definition of edifying
: instructive or informative in a way that improves the mind or character

Ok. Good with that, smile
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 06:54 PM

Lol... Well, keep "watching" Marty smile

BTW... Regarding "theocratic dissertion threads...", all I wanted was to discuss "PROPHECY" with other like minded folks...
Posted By: Sunset Poet

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 08:37 PM

Originally Posted by JAPOV


BTW... Regarding "theocratic dissertion threads...", all I wanted was to discuss "PROPHECY" with other like minded folks...


That would appear more realistic if the name of this forum was JUST PLAIN BIBLE PROPHECY. But it isnt and anyone who wants to can sign up and many who do are not like minded. So whoever wants to register an opinion can. You zealoteous types make us "nons" look at your doctrine. So whenever I see such, I feel an obligation to you as someone that I like... to broaden your spiritual outlook to include various ignored realities and questions.

In the hopes that one day...I will be able to bring you into the true light. wink
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 09:34 PM

Holy guacamole batman! Did you just say that my opinion carries so much weight... unlike weightless Dom... that you can't control yourself? I have the power to make you look? My persuasive talents obligate you to engage with with me? Because you like me! That is soooo sweet smile
Posted By: Sunset Poet

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/28/21 10:21 PM

Originally Posted by JAPOV
Holy guacamole batman! Did you just say that my opinion carries so much weight... unlike weightless Dom... that you can't control yourself? I have the power to make you look? My persuasive talents obligate you to engage with with me? Because you like me! That is soooo sweet smile


I'm not sure what all that means or if any of it is true or if it makes any sense....BUTT...if it makes you happy, we'll go with it. smile
Posted By: JAPOV

Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) - 06/29/21 12:06 AM

Happy, Happy, Joy, Joy... Lol wink
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