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Lyrics by Dave Gill


Rock/Punk/Metal:

"In The Fall"

"Where We've Been"

"Anti-Happy Song"

"Not That Complicated"

"Garbage"

"Already Broken"

"Over-the-Counter Rockstar"

"Vampire"

"Got That Itch"


Country:

"Stuck Here at the Light"

"Warm and Glowing Ember"

"When It's Gone"

"Shelf of Broken Hearts"

"Ain't No One Else (Like Me)"

"Chasing Sunlight"

"Who I Would Be"

"This Here Song"

"No One's Better Than You"


Pop:

"Go Bills!"

"Believe (Eternally Yours)"

"Wanna Stay In Love (With You)"

"Universal Love"

"Sleepy Love"

"I Love Me Some You"

"God and Zombies"

"A Beautiful Day"

Hi David,

I've been coming in and listening to these one by one. You have a good knack for writing in plain language. But this song, particularly, in the first verse has some imagery and twists to it that I would definitely encourage you to explore further in future writes. Lines like these are very well written "Hoping to fly in your skies" is great, "The air's getting colder, I'm chilled to the bone, Waited all night, ended up all alone" is a good way to say that her vibe is dragging you down, "The scent of your body
still haunting my bed" is a great idea but I probably would have gone with something like "The ghost of your love still haunting my bed". Or something along those lines to really bring home the haunting aspect of the next line. Regardless, I like that part of your writing that you tapped with the imagery. Enough emphasis can't be put on saying the same things in a different way. One thing that I have heard a lot in the critiques of my own music is the term "cliche". I struggle with that in some ways because few songs aren't cliche in one form or the other. Particularly in the genre I write for. But I get the idea that it is best to come up with something unique to say the same thing. Whether it be a metaphor or whatever. Which you accomplished in several parts of this. Take care!

So now Dave, the way I understand it is, whenever you have a new lyric/suno music addition, you use this thread to alert us all.
That way we can enjoy your new addition, and, further appreciate its value in conjunction with all the rest of your catalogue.
Bill

"IN THE FALL" My first listen going down your list. Great demo, David. Tell me? How did you link the files from Suno to here?

Hiya Doug!

Thank you very much for the listen and kind words, sir!

To link a song from SUNO, in SUNO click the elipsis icon (3 little vertical dots) at the far-right end of your listed song title, select Share and Copy Link.

You can then either paste the link directly into your new post on JPF or use the Insert Link icon in the Button bar of your new Post window. (that's what I did)

Let me know if I can be of further assistance.

Peace,

Dave

Hey Brian,

Yessir.. I go thru approximately 5-10 renditions typically to find my "base" song. Then I tweak the lyric as needed to keep the flow, snip and extend it a few times, etc. All in all I would say most times I go through about 20 renditions before I'm happy enough to share it. There are other songs that I just do for fun and could care less what Suno does with it and share it immediately just for kicks. I do not have anywhere near the library of songs as you do though, so I haven't run out of credits before it resets each month. I'm not sure if that's a good or bad thing, honestly.

Looking forward to hearing what you've been working on.

Peace,

Dave

"Who I Would Be"

Fantastic Concept! Really like it

However, it occurs to me;
Guys who live in cardboard boxes under the overpass, generally don't hang with friends in bars and have epiphanies about better living... while celebrating Halloween.

I think that verse should be about something more "universally relatable".

The singer character can certainly be down on his luck... just not THAT low

Hey Tony,

I hear ya, sir! I wrote this from my limited perspective. I dunno. Honestly, I would hope this would NOT be "universally relatable", however.

I'd rather NO ONE ever need have to know about this subject or experience it for that matter. Be that as it may, I don't think it too far a stretch for a story of a homeless guy who has a friend he talks to in a bar about Halloween and the regret he lives with. That's the joy of storytelling in song, right?

Thank you very much for the listen, kind words and feedback! I appreciate you!

Peace,

Dave

"it is less about talent and more about effort that keeps most from success"

Yep. Laziness. My 'Achilles heel'.

Thanks for your insight, Brian.


Peace,

Dave

I am curious, how many versions of your songs do you make before you find the one you keep? I usually go through 30-50 versions to get as close to what I want as I can. Now and then it still falls short, but for me, I find A.I. eventually locks into amazingly close to what I heard in my head when I start working on a song. I have the largest membership, but still ran out of tracks last month. I missed 2 weeks of this month (my month starts on the 26th) so I likely won't run out this month.

I rarely get a keeper in the first 10 tries.

Ahhhh yes. I can see the scene and feel the pain.

Thanks Dave

Thanks, Elvis.

Empty pages. Full of promise.

Peace,

Dave

"Who I Would Be"

Lyrics by Dave Gill

The end of October came rushing by
I can't believe how time can fly
It's enough to make a grown man cry
to think what I've been through
A friend of mine and me at the bar
The night of Halloween
He said "Who do you want to be this year?"
And a thought occurred to me

Lots of people go as monsters
just scaring everyone
or dress up like a police officer
with a badge and gun
It seems tonight could use a change
perhaps something brand new
like a stronger, braver me
with lots of work to do

This time of year is a time for reflection
I'd get a head start in a new direction
I wouldn't go and try to shoot for perfection but
I know what I'd need to do
It wouldn't be about the glory or fame
Heck, I doubt anyone would remember my name
But I would give it my best shot just the same
And wouldn't stop 'til I was through

I could be the one who
makes it all right
I could be that guy
a better man for my wife
and a father to my son
someone I should have been
like a stronger, braver me
so I could try again

I stepped outside to the icy wind
as it cut me to the bone
I stumbled down to the overpass
and my shaky cardboard home
I dreamt of my ex-wife and kid
the thought took my breath away
I'd give anything
to be someone else today

I probably wouldn't cure cancer
or ever stop a war
But I know that somewhere deep inside me
there's really so much more
I don't need a cape
to do what's right
or to end a catastrophe
I could be something brand new
A stronger, braver me
Yeah, I'd like to be something brand new
a stronger, braver me

The story is true as far as meeting my (then future) wife, the gift she gave me and our continued love for not only each other, but for Bon Jovi, too. We'll hit our 34th this year.




Thank you so much, Barry, for taking time to listen to these songs and posting some wonderful feedback. I truly appreciate it, sir!!


Peace,

Dave

This was inspired by a recent interview article with Alice Cooper.


Over-the-Counter Rockstar


The 70's and 80's
are basically a blur
How I made it this far
I'm really not sure
The Rocker's life
the one made of dreams
came crashing down
the more I aged
it seems

My hearing's shot
my joints are stiff
sometimes I play the wrong damned riff
I stopped drinking Whiskey, vodka and gin
There's still drugs backstage
but now it's
ibuprofen

Sex and drugs
and rock and roll
Forget the first two
I'm too old
I can still
seduce my fans
but a nap
is certainly
in my plans

I'm almost blind
from all the lights
my pills tell me if it's day or night
I stopped smoking bags of pot
There's still drugs backstage
but now it's
Icy-Hot

Live a life of excess
Live the Rockstar dream
Just make sure you're living
Near a Rite Aid or Walgreens

I've looked life dead in the eye
Laughing through all the tears I've cried
Some days I wonder why I try
then I hit a perfect chord

Brian,

I am the same way. I used up all of my monthly credits in Pro writing 15 songs. I have a sound in my head for each song and I tinker with it until I get one I like. I change the key, tempo, time signature, vibe/feel, and instrumentation. I also tinker with the lyrics adding or reducing vocalizations or rewriting because I don't like the way it plays out in recordings. I have spent hours working on just one song. And that is after I've spent a considerable amount of time writing it. I find myself getting up and walking away from one multiple times before I settle on something. I don't know how that parlays in other people's perceptions of what I'm putting out. But I'm making the music I always envisioned. That makes it all worthwhile for me personally.