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Hey there everyone.... It's been almost a year since I have recorded any of my songs. This is the latest write of among some 10 others I've written this year. As always, any and all comments are welcome, while first impressions are most welcome.


“Go On Ahead”
Words & Music By Tom Tognaci

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And if, by chance, you feel that I’d follow you blind
Over the cliff, with me right behind….
Go on ahead and make your case
Try to convince me with a straight face
Don’t mind my laughs
Oh, pretentious sage
I’m laughing at the curtains you peer through on stage

And if, by chance, you feel that by coming on strong
I’ll see the light and where I’ve gone wrong….
Go on ahead and make my day
Try to persuade me to try your way
Don’t mind my jeers
It’s all in good fun
Your odds of changing my mind are zero to none

And if, by chance, you feel that the mask you have on
Cleverly hides the face of your con
Go on ahead, give it your all
Make up and clown suit, juggle that ball
Don’t mind my back
As I walk away
I’m on to much better things. You have a nice day

And if, by chance, you feel that I’d follow you blind
Over the cliff, with me right behind….
You go on ahead

I think you got a ray Montagne vibe here. I like it, I wonder if the structure could be changed to make it better.

" Cause if by chance".... That sounds like your refrain, but your placing it in front of what seems like verses.

I think it might prevent it from being really catchy.


I think that's a good melody, might work better as a verse chorus thing.

Nice to hear something raw here.

Good feel and vocals

Tom,
I've always loved your songs. This one is really good. Good instrumentation and excellent vocals. Good job!

All the best
Robert

Tom,

I think it's pretty brilliant just as is. Excellent listen!

Deej