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Whatever - Paul Churchfield

Whatever I did
Whataver I said
Whatever it was that made you wanna stay away

Whatever you feel
I know that it's real
And if you wanna talk to me I'll be right here

From the bottom of my heart I love you
And I never wanna be apart from you
I been trying everything I can to reach you
Cause I miss you in my life

Instrumental Solo

From the bottom of my heart I love you
And I never wanna be apart from you
I been trying everything I can to reach you
Cause I miss you in my life

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One of my go-to Editorial suggestions is to delete 'And' and 'Cause' (and 'But') at the beginning of Lines of Lyric.

I think, in singing this, you do that. I don't actually hear those words. Eliminating them 'unclutters' the Line in the mouth of the singer, a significant nano-second of space to breath instead of having to fit that 'opener', 'explainer' word in there.

'And' is especially egregious, as singers fail to enunciate the 'a', leaving 'nd' to slur into the next word, often obscuring its meaning. Obscure a word and a whole Line may not 'work', communicating the intended phrase to the listener. If that Line fails the whole Stanza may fail, and listener may begin to drift off to their own thoughts instead of continuing to listen for yours.

Lines often 'read' the same without the 'connectors' And/But/'Cause. Writers employ them to connect thoughts from Line to Line, but listeners 'get' the connection without the connector.

Listen and see if you actually pronounce those words or if they're 'whispered' and listeners are not likely to actually hear them.
Sing it without them and see if it 'works' without them.

What a fine listen.............great song.
Love it!
Top shelf stuff, Paul.

Pretty song

Loved the intro Paul,charming is an old fashioned word now but I think it's appropriate here.
Nice song.
John