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What are your proudest single lines or couplets?

"I just wanna be there when the sh!t hits the fan
Catch it all in a bucket, and use what I can."


Kinda a gross image, I know. But for a song about being a "tortured artist", I think that it's pretty appropriate. grin

From this song:
"Tortured Artist""

See?
I may have another one or two to post (not as gross, I'm sure), but for now I think that image will hold you over! wink

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I'm not the girl over there;
Glamor clothes and diamonds in her hair.
(The Girl Inside Me - Justice)

If I had wings
I would be an angel.
If you were true
I could imagine.
(Love Is a Lie - Justice)

It feels like we're dancing to the edge of the world;
One damaged man; an unacceptable girl.
(No In Between - Megan Cunningham)

The road to my hell is paved with your kisses.
Sweet whispered words, sound just like screams.
(No In Between - Megan Cunningham)

He breaks hearts like window panes
And counts those hearts like drops of rain.
(Basic Black - Bill Creel)

She lived in LA County.
He came from Carolina.
What they both wanted the most
Was a love from coast to coast.
(Coast To Coast - William Ray)






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Lol - that's a great line, Todd. grin

A few of mine that I'm proud of, though they work better in context:


From "Wanderlust"
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When your home is on your back and your weight is on your feet
May everything you carry, be everything you need



From "Amen"
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I'm weaving down a straight row now,
Thinking of old sacred cows
Trying to stay behind the plow, Amen



From "No Easy Thing"
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There's a promised land in every story
Whether found or left behind
The day they laid my track at Promontory
I knew one of each was mine.



From "Steelworking Sons of a Gun"
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That old picture of Pappy on your wall
He's in his wedding day double breast
Well he wore that suit exactly four times
The fourth when we laid him to rest



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Uh. Well. I really like this line from Master of the Moot Point.

"I'm the...
Master of the moot point
Roll up another joint
Puffing, puffing, passing
You can stick with me, kid
And when you're all crossfaded
You can look my way and
Thank me for the good times
And let me turn out the lights."

Okay. It's more than a line. But I still really like it. smile


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Originally Posted by Meg Engell
Uh. Well. I really like this line from Master of the Moot Point.

"I'm the...
Master of the moot point
Roll up another joint
Puffing, puffing, passing
You can stick with me, kid
And when you're all crossfaded
You can look my way and
Thank me for the good times
And let me turn out the lights."

Okay. It's more than a line. But I still really like it. smile


Reminds me of college.
Although you should find a way to get the word "thighs" in there. That would be cool!
he he heh hehhehhehhehheh

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She bit me in some places you don’t need to know
Like Belsize Park and Walthamstow


Piranha Lover - Most of the lyrics for this song were written by my collaborator Len, but this particular couplet is all mine grin

Todd, on a separate note and relating to one of your other threads this was recorded in a single take, one mic for the vocal and one for the guitar.

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From I've Seen Better Days

As I thumb my way south, some think I'm crazy,
For following you, and searching the maze in,
The cities I've seen,

From Warmed My Soul

You slid away in the dead of night,
Left a hole where love had been,
I keep on walking to fill my empty mind,
Guided by our old routine


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Preachers say "come on now give me your dollars. You'll get to heaven somehow."
Farmers experimenting with all kinds of medecine. We're gonna have supercow.
And the world keeps on changing, cause no one's refraining from change.

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From "Song for Spike":

Life has tested me
Love really messed with me
but I learned - I'm fine on my own

Time kept track of me
When fate turned it's back on me
and taught me how much I'd grown

***************************************
From "Winter Change":

I can feel the winter coming
it's blowing across my mind
it's falling down the mountains
I see through the twisted pines

I can see the white flakes falling
right before my eyes
colorless confusion
in the smoke-like colored skies

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I wrote this one just about 2 hours ago. I suppose there's a song in there somewhere.

I’ve been involved in romantic entanglements
And I’ve seen what they can do
If you want my advice
Put your heart on ice
And keep your connections few


Write from your heart, not what you think others want to hear.

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"Lines you're GLAD that you wrote"

All of mine. Maybe some more than others, but to slowly, over time, discover than one is indeed gifted, is endlessly rewarding. And to build upon one's ability over time is nothing short of a blessing.


Co-Write Friendly.....Look at my blog on My Space.

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I don't want to be the one who only buys you gifts
Can't you see I want to give you more than things

I like that line!

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my favorite is actually a chorus

(from "up front and honest")
"since we're being right up front and honest
There's something its better if you knew
even with all your scars and baggage
I am still in love with you"

for a single line I like
(from "Disappear")
"slip away like a two length lead, in Kentucky air"

for a couplet
(from "Shayla, wont you bring me a beer)
"I don't really need it, what can I say
I just love to watch you walk away"

to be completely honest, what I'm working on is normally my favorite.

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"She was the prima ballerina at the maid of honor ball,
She ended up contaminated by urban blight and sprawl."

I like this line but never play the song, Rust Belt Baby, the rest sucks. Its one of those songs I thought were great when penned, but upon reflection, will never see the light of day.

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"One Banana and 100 Monkeys- We Can Try But Never Please
All Of These People Who Sold Us This Dream-That Turned Into Such Primal Scream"

Into That Montana Sun Copyright Yeager/Waxman

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3 old songs off the top of my head....

"Raising glasses to touchdown passes
All the games we watch today, we used to play
We still have curfews called working man blues
So don't try to hard to act your age, It can wait"

"I made a play without rehearsal
Strong words can be so hurtful
I never seem to get my point across"

"I'm like Brooklyn where the subway screeches
Roof top vocals with a hip hop beat
Everyone say bring back the day
When the Dodgers used to play
Come home from LA smile

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I've penned a fair-share of Gospelly-Ones..(often-comedic, since I think there's NO Religion that's without its Comedic Aspects)& Here's The Chorus to my All-Time Favorite:

I didn't ask to be sent here, Brother
I don't remember what WAS my Crime
But I'm not Askin' for an Early-Release
In Fact, I'm a-HOPIN' for a Little More Time--

(The Organ Music & Hand-Clappin' makes it SOAR...heh-heh!)

&..it's the Finale..on my "Songs Somebody ELSE Coulda Prolly Sung BETTER" CD...at CDBaby.com...prolly the Best of all 7 I've got there.

Thanks for the Opportunity to Plug It a wee-bit...I'm outta Beer Money again!

Best Wishes & Big Hugs,
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Awe...

OK, You WIn (with Stan)

I'm sitting here alone in the house he paid for
Forced to get around in a new Ford Explorer
Half of his 401K gets me thru my day to day

Ummm....Enjoy the Ride

You're kicking at the stone
with one foot in the grave

Ohh...Little Miss Understood

A friend of a friend of your best friend
said all I could talk about was kissing him

and....It's My Turn

I want you to move
slowly
don't you talk
hold me
it's my turn

almost forgot...I have to retype those lyrics so I can print them, file them, back them up and email them to myself...


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"To fan the flame, you threw the fan in the fire
It burned very hot, but soon turned to ash"


Just heard that one last night for the first time in a while. I like that one.

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You can turn away the shadow
Let the sunlight color you
There's a love for every loser, Mr. Blue


I like that one.

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And though I know you might be with someone else
I swear I hear a catch in your voice
As it starts to break
But that might be fake
For my own sweet sake
It’ll be a cold day in hell
Baby
Before I make the same mistake
Again


Someday Mike Dunbar and I will finish this one



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"You're possesive, and obsessive, and sometimes dowright opressive, when you ask me if I've been drinkin', where I've been and what I'm thinkin'. You always tell me, I'm putting you through hell...Ah but now honey, that goes for me as well.

I Need A Lover, Not A Mother.


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I like you alot

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If ya wanna taste my honey
Better hang around the hive

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Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.

Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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I stole a heartbeat from the story of your life
Another chapter
That fate was left to write


Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.

Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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I had to read that twice. I almost thought you wrote:

I stole a heartbeat from the story of your life
Another chapter
The one about your wife


That would be an interesting song....


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Not sure. Maybe Iggy has a better grasp on some of my lyrics. Most are too personal to me to know if I am glad I wrote them, as to how others take them,,,or not. I am specifically a Music/Melody guy.

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Hey Z...

You are a mind reader....Ya saw the rest of the tune...I am impressed.



Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.

Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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Some great lines guys... I sometimes start to go through my 2000+ odd songs but get so caught up with nostalgia I rarely get very far and my mind wanders.

Someday I'll dig something out and post it. It's been nearly 16 years of JPF and I have never posted a song. Perhaps the time has come on of these days. I also have about 400+ additional music only songs and probably that many unused lyrics.

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FROM AT THE CROSSROADS


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At the Crossroads I learned new chords
Nobody’s ever heard them before
I traded with the devil too
Told him everything about you
Now on my guitar of solid gold
I play sounds to haunt your soul.


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She was thriteen
The whole world on a silver platter
Chasin' her dreams
Lookin' for an ever after

And he was sixteen
Arrogance just like an anchor
Chasin' his dreams
Dissapointment but a perfect stranger

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I just wrote one for Jean's challenge, and the song ended up with the singer, a guy who tie-dyes shirts accidentally drinking lye and dying. Then, in heaven, he's sitting at a bar with Jackie Gleason bar-tending, and Gleason has an awful "sh*t happens" tie-dye on, and the singer says "hey, I'll make you one that's more...you..."

and so, the bridge is ONE line:

God loves a poor soul

--I love that, cuz it's recent, I suppose, but also because it was an almost impossible, maze-like route, that led to that line...

Sometimes, you may have to have a bunch of mundane or routine lines/stuff/whatever, just to lead you to that tiny epiphany.

A little Gleason as "the Poor Soul" :

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GcLJFVlzYyw

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Im not real big on patting myself on the back for lines Ive written, here or some lines I wrote that I thought were to poetic to be in a song, but now Im ok with.

More Than Just The Habit:
"The beam of a corner street lamp lights the litter and despair"
"He feels just like a hostage who's ransom wont get paid"

The Lords Final Call:
"Then the devil he burst in and said sinning was okay, dont you know he was trying to lead me astray"

When I make it Home:
"Young Private James Davis sat writing his love,The air all around laced with oders of war".



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Hi, I try to write all my lines to be good to me---others will
decide which are witty, memorable..... I know it does not always work, but I try to a every line as if it were my last.

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Great topic !

Mine are from songs I never completed.

A breeze that whispers secret things
Of legends, tales, and frosted wings



IIt's times like these you learn to love again. Foo Fighters


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