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Not Bad
by David Gill - 10/15/24 03:27 PM
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Rt 23
by Bill Draper - 10/15/24 03:23 PM
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The Wait
by Ken Randall - 10/14/24 11:15 PM
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In You
by bennash - 10/13/24 01:16 PM
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Zeek has taken this up a notch with is guitar work...Have a listen We met in the FireDottie Corley & Tommy Saethran © 2011 New version with Zeek! http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?q=hi&songID=11172833Old version http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?q=hi&songID=11163769One more kiss before I go This old road can get so cold Driving around this snowy countryside My best friend to my lover In candle light I discovered How much the right touch can satisfy Pre-chorus In an instant Things changed Things changed Chorus Just one spark led to desire Ecstasy stirred the fire Rolled in heat you and I ignited I never knew you this way I didn't know you till We met in the fire, in the fire See your hand you are trembling No, we can't go back again But one thousand seraphs sang for us last night Now you have my heart in your reach Dozen roses at your feet And tonight we'll storm the gates of paradise Pre-chorus I see a future In your eyes In your eyes Repeat Chorus Musical break Repeat Chorus
Last edited by Dottie; 10/28/11 07:16 PM.
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This is very nice Dottie. Is that a pro demo or your co-writer singing and playing?
No nits from me.
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Hi Dottie and Tommy...
This sounds super! Everything sounds fabuolous...the lyric, the music the performance...everything. As Colin already said...no nits! Very, very nice!!!
Al
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Hi Colin, No it's not a pro demo, Tommy does it all. Thanks for listening and leaving your thoughts.  Dottie
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Hi Al, Thanks for checking this out, another no nits awesome! Dottie
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Very nice!. I had to look up seraphs...obviously my raising wasn't good enough. LOL
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Great song Dottie and Tommy!
Really like those last two verses Dottie!!
Very nice vocal!
Tammy
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Hey Dottie and Tommy...
Really nice work.
Sweet sounding track.
Larry
Can't find the stairway to 'heaven'...but I know where the elevator is.
Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us" - Albert Schweitzer.
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“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard
Co-writing = Compromise!
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Hi Dottie....what a great sound...singer reminds me of Jim Crotche........I really like this song! Very Nice!
Love the Lyric (as I listen )
Great production! -Tom
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Good Job! Real nice production. Good job on the lyrics too Dottie!
Ricky
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Hi Dottie & Tommy
Really great pro sound all round.Good as the best I've heard on the forum
Best of luck
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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this is really nice Dottie and Tommy!The lyrics the music the vocals all make great ingredients for this one.I enjoyed it.
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Great song, enjoyed the listen, my only nit would be the led vocal could be a little more up front in the mix. There are certain places in the song where it is overpowered by the music.
On the my near field monitors, not so bad, but across the room, the vocal gets lost.
Other than that, great work.
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This one's really nice Dottie, I can hear the time that you put into it and the labor of love paid off. ~~~~MFB III
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Fantastic song, performance and production, should be on radio! Really enjoyed listening!
Nadia
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Hi Neil, I probably should have said angels like a few people suggested but I like the way seraphs sounds and I was trying to be different. Dottie
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Hi Calvin, Thanks for listening and for the kind words. Dottie
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Hi Tammy, I'm very happy you like this you know I love your singing! Dottie
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Hi Larry, Thanks for giving it a listen! Dottie
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Hi Shayne, I’m glad you like it! Hi Tom, Thanks for listening I’m happy you like it. I know the lyric is very simple but I think he makes it sound good. Ricky, We appreciate you listening and I’m happy you like it. Hi Travis, Thanks for the wonderful compliment! Michael, I’m glad you like it; Tommy did most of the work! Hi Rob, Thanks for listening and for the heads up. I’m happy you enjoyed it. Hi MFB, I can always count on you to have something nice to say. Thank you! Hi Nadia, That’s an awesome compliment, thank you!! Thank you all for taking the time to listen to our song. I appreciate it!!! Dottie
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Listening now (the break is here) and this is, as everyione says, top notch. Deserves a wide audience!
If writing ever becomes work I think I'm going to have to stop
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Hi John, Thanks for listening. Zeek has added his guitar work now if you care to listen again. I think it sounds great! Dottie
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Man, this was great but now with Zeek it's the greatest ever....now it is WOW...isn't Zeek the greatest......yea Zeek....loving it....
thought I'd already left a comment,but don't see it, but I did....but i'm happy to get to hear the new version with"ZEEKER".........glyn
I'm a Zeeker fan....lol
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YOUALL--
SOUNDS SO GOOD! 5 STARS YOUALL--I LOVE IT! THIS ONE NOW HAS SOUL--
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So how do you REALLY feel about me Glyn?! He did a nice job mixing and it was fun. Glad I could help. Of course I always want the guitars louder Zeek
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Lol, blush, blush, blush......what can I say.....loving it and your music.......alot.....
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Hey this sounds pretty good. The vocal line does get lost in the music a little. I think it is because of the auto-tune and the auto-harmonies. But the the vocal melody and music are fun to listen to. The lyrics are good too and zeek does a bit of wailing!
Great collab guys and gals!
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This sounds great all around….I like the soft expression of emotion, the musical break, and general feel of it all….very nice job! And Dottie, I like "seraphs" too!
Kristi
A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write,
if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself. What a man can be,
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Lovely -- very lovely on all counts!
Lisa
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Outstanding, Dottie - congrats on such a fine write! I love it.
This feels to me like it could have some legs.....
Originally, I thought the chorus vocal should be just a little more aggressive. I'm thinking now though that it might just need to be brought up in the mix a little bit.
This is one to be proud of.
Scott
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Hey Glynda, I hate that you’re in the hospital again!! Yes indeed Zeek took it up a few notches and he is great I agree. Mackie, I’m so glad you like this. Thank you for listening. Hi Kevin, Thanks for taking the time to listen and leave your thoughts. I always appreciate hearing what you have to say. Hi Joice, Thank you!!! Hi Kristi, Looks like you and I, are the only ones that like seraphs lol I still like it though. Thanks for listening I’m happy you like it. Hi Lisa, Thank you, thank you, thank you, lol. Hi Scott, Yeah that seems to be everyone’s thoughts on the vocal. Thanks for chiming in. Thank you all for taking the time to listen and leave your thoughts. Dottie
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This is really nice work you two. I agree with the others above on how good it is. There were a couple spots where I thought the song might possibly be improved upon. I put in bold after the original line a possible idea. The other thing is it's all good, but there's something about the flow of the Chorus in the first two lines where I either wanted a pause since the 2nd line came in too rushed or where you might actually change the Chorus. I only offer these ideas as ideas but I did listen several times and that same part stood out to me as needing something, more breath there or something...thinking here.... I'll come back here later on the Chorus I have to go out now. But here's the one line idea One more kiss before I go This old road can get so cold Driving around this snowy countryside My best friend to my lover In candle light I discovered How much the right touch can satisfy/ Just how much your touch can satisfyPre-chorus In an instant Things changed Things changed Chorus Just one spark led to desire Ecstasy stirred the fire Rolled in heat you and I ignited I never knew you this way I didn't know you till We met in the fire, in the fire See your hand you are trembling No, we can't go back again But one thousand seraphs sang for us last night Now you have my heart in your reach Dozen roses at your feet And tonight we'll storm the gates of paradise Pre-chorus I see a future In your eyes In your eyes Repeat Chorus Musical break Repeat Chorus Be back, Lynn
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Hi Lynn, Thank you for taking the time to leave your thoughts. While I appreciate it VERY much the truth is we've wrapped this one up. Sometimes it's just best to move on. Dottie
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Great song, great vocal and music especially the guitar work from Zeek
Travis
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