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#928911 - 10/19/11 07:43 PM She Sheds A Tear  
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She Sheds A Tear

As I look at her face
A smile comes over me
A woman with so much grace
A friend she'll always be

C:She sheds a tear each day
For the man she'll always love
The memories are haunting her
As he watches her from above

Today she gets up one more time
and musters up a smile
Happy thoughts come once again
If only for awhile
C
I'd love to make her happy
If only for awhile
If I can give her some happiness
It will make my life worthwhile
C
Years from now when we look back
It will be with a smile
The warmth of our frienship
Will carry us for miles
C
Music solo
C
END

(C)John Baker 2009 www.reverbnation.com/ajbaker

Last edited by AJ Baker; 10/22/11 01:36 PM.

Life was once a beautiful thing when we were able to live it.Love is such a beautiful thing when we are able to give it.Time alas has no meaning when there is no time but it takes but a moment for one to be so kind
#928914 - 10/19/11 08:23 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: AJ Baker]  
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Hey, saw this on the lyric boards and loved it, but do you have music/vocals with it now? If so, I don't see a link to listen..but still love the lyric..tks and happy you're back..glyn

#928916 - 10/19/11 08:32 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: glynda]  
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The link is next to the copywrite


Life was once a beautiful thing when we were able to live it.Love is such a beautiful thing when we are able to give it.Time alas has no meaning when there is no time but it takes but a moment for one to be so kind
#928926 - 10/19/11 09:48 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: AJ Baker]  
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I love this, reminds me of my husband that died, he was 38 and I'll always love him, and this song reminds me so much of him, thanks for the memories...loving this and I do miss your music and voice....loving this.....man, this does hit home so much...you coming back and bringing this song...what a come back for me..

glyn

#928949 - 10/20/11 12:10 AM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: glynda]  
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I wrote this song for a friend of mine Diane who lost her husband to cancer.we talked about it and i helped her through it.This song was part of the help.Good that it helped you too.That is part of why God gave me the gift of music and songwriting.God Bless and keep you my friend!AJ


Life was once a beautiful thing when we were able to live it.Love is such a beautiful thing when we are able to give it.Time alas has no meaning when there is no time but it takes but a moment for one to be so kind
#928953 - 10/20/11 12:26 AM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: AJ Baker]  
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Thank you so much AJ and you are a dear, dear friend to me it's something that I'd been thinking of you alot lately, then here you are..was so excited and happy to get your PM saying you were back...was my lucky day when I found you.....and I'll always cherish our friendship....you are truly amazing...

glyn

#928995 - 10/20/11 08:37 AM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: glynda]  
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Thank You Glyn!I am but a servant of God.Here to bring Glory to His Name and to Jesus who commanded us to Love oneanother and help those in their time of need.I am glad to be your friend and pray that the Lord will heal you and make you whole again!AJ


Life was once a beautiful thing when we were able to live it.Love is such a beautiful thing when we are able to give it.Time alas has no meaning when there is no time but it takes but a moment for one to be so kind
#929109 - 10/20/11 09:08 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: AJ Baker]  
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Hey A.J.,

Happy to see you here.

Very pretty song. I think if you sing it again, you might try to abbreviate She will and It will just to even out those lines and make them less wordy for the sing, but a nice song.

I'm going back and forth on having the chorus after every verse, I think it would be interesting to hear this song with a lift in the melody of every other verse and only two chorus in there so that it is more effective emotionally, but it is a very pretty song and just my mind meandering on the possibilities!!

Welcome back.

Tammy


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#929132 - 10/20/11 10:53 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: AJ Baker]  
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Hi AJ,

I don’t know if you’re just sharing or looking for crits, but I’ll say that this comes across as a heartfelt, gentle song. You may want to keep it in 3rd person and switch “you” in the first line to “her” to be consistent. If you look to switch it up, like Tammy mentioned, I can hear the instrumental right before the “I’d love to make her happy” verse. Especially enjoyed this:

Today she gets up one more time
and musters up a smile
Happy thoughts come once again
If only for awhile

Enjoyed the guitar!

Kristi


A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write,
if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself. What a man can be,
he must be. -- Abraham Maslow, American Psychologist
#929169 - 10/21/11 03:07 AM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: Kristi McKeever]  
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I thought I critiqued this, but it's disappeared!


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#929214 - 10/21/11 12:08 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hi Tammy!I agree with the first change but not with the second as for the chorus after every verse it is a legth of the song thing and the way the music was written.Thank you for the input .I wrote this song for a friend who lost her husband to help her deal with it.Thanks again !AJ


Life was once a beautiful thing when we were able to live it.Love is such a beautiful thing when we are able to give it.Time alas has no meaning when there is no time but it takes but a moment for one to be so kind
#929217 - 10/21/11 12:12 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: TamsNumber4]  
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Hi Tammy!I agree with the first change but not the second.Thanks for the input !AJ


Life was once a beautiful thing when we were able to live it.Love is such a beautiful thing when we are able to give it.Time alas has no meaning when there is no time but it takes but a moment for one to be so kind
#929221 - 10/21/11 12:20 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: Kristi McKeever]  
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Hi Kristi! I had already had changed it to her but had recorded it the other way.Nice to hear from you!Thanks for your comment on my guitar playing it was just a song i felt i had to write for a friend.AJ PS When i play it live with a lead guitarist i play an instrumental at the end but i could put one where you are talking about too.If you want to hear By My Side which i have only posted as a lyric so far you can go to the same link as She Sheds A Tear it is right there with it.AJ


Life was once a beautiful thing when we were able to live it.Love is such a beautiful thing when we are able to give it.Time alas has no meaning when there is no time but it takes but a moment for one to be so kind
#929226 - 10/21/11 12:25 PM Re: She Sheds A Tear [Re: R. Shayne Vaughan]  
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I changed it a little and i replied in a message.AJ


Life was once a beautiful thing when we were able to live it.Love is such a beautiful thing when we are able to give it.Time alas has no meaning when there is no time but it takes but a moment for one to be so kind
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