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M!!

Well, just to clarify with you my friend, I co-wrote the lyric, but Danny did most of the writing, he is very talented, I did the chording and melody and yes...I originally played this on the autoharp, but Ian blows that out of the water!!! Sorry if I confused you!! Always happy to have you visit and listen!!

Tammy

Hi Tammy, Danny and Ian

This is very pretty! I don't have time to read all the comments so I may be repeating things, sorry if I am.

Had I just listened I probably wouldn't have noticed the little things that I saw while reading along.

There's never been a moment or another place in time
That could ever match the feeling of you here by my side.


There's never been a breath that I would ever want to hold
(Than) swimming deep into your depths to quench my lonely soul

Than feels out of place here without more in front of it and I'm not sure I get this line. Perhaps I'm swimming deep etc.

(chorus)
With your warm breath upon my skin
I feel your fires that burns within
I look into your eyes and see
There's never been a love like you for me



There has never been a kiss placed so softly on my face
That traced a path to my lips for our mouths to embrace

There's never been a burning need or strong desire
That burns with such abandon to set my soul on fire



(chorus)
With your warm breath upon my skin
I feel your fires that burn within
I look into your eyes and see
There's never been a love like you for me



(Bridge)
There will always be a dawn, you will always turn me on
Thoughts of you are on my mind
Thoughts of you and me that last throughout eternity
And spending it one moment at a time



(chorus)
With your warm breath upon my skin
I feel your fires that burn within
I look into your eyes and see
There's never been a love like you for me
oh, a love like you for me

That's all I have, it's beautiful music with a lovely voice and a well written lyric. One day I'm going to write a love song!

Dottie

Sizzlin' & Special, Tams, Danny, Ian & Ricky!

This is truly a Breathtaking Love Song..& to steal a line, One That "Will Always Turn Me On".

"KUDOS" & "CONGRATS" Y'All...& add a "Well-Done" Too, while we're at it!

Best Wishes & Big Congratulatory Hugs,
Stan

Keep up the good wok !!!!

All the best
Jan

Hey Andy,

Thanks for listening and commenting. I don't get the opportunity to hear the lyrics that I have written or played a part in writing put to music very often and it makes me feel good to hear that talented folks such as yourself enjoy them.

Again thanks for listening and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Danny

Nat,

The idea of using wrong as a rhyme for dawn never crossed my mind seeing as wrong has an inherent negative connotation and I was looking for things that would encompass what lovers would say when together or apart, hence the lonely soul in the last line of the first verse.

I'm not trying to be contrary or dismissive of your input. That is just the way I wrote it and I like it.

Not many offerings by amatures and hobbyists are perfect on the first go 'round and as Tammy has mentioned, we had one shot with and took it.

Thanks for your thoughts and impressions. You do have some good thoughts here. I do hope you enjoyed the song.

Danny

Hey MFB,

Really glad you liked the song. The autoharp version is pretty cool too!

Danny

I'm glad you enjoyed listening to it Kevin. That IS what it's all about after all... enjoying the music that all of us on the board put together.

Danny

Hey Kim,

Total enjoyment is a good thing! Thank you very much. Funny you would say anything about shortening it. I don't recall that ever being mentioned by anyone. I must've missed it.

Thanks again Kim,
Danny

Hey Tammy

You had a lot of nice comments, so I hope this is not redundant. Everything was going good for me and I liked the essence and tenor of the song until I got to this verse:

"There will always be a dawn, you will always turn me on"

For me, it had a cheapening or superficial effect on your otherwise very elegant - almost spiritual love song. I am certain you did not want that to happen and wondered if other options could be explored (eg., instead of "You will always turn me on", maybe, "for me to share in your arms", or something like that.

Doug.

Hi Roger, I'm glad you found it and even more so that you liked what you heard. Tammy is a wonderful singer and makes the lyric come alive with her soulful delivery of the vocal and the melody she came up with for the lyric. I have said this before and will probably say it again; I am very proud to have done my part in the creation of this song.

Thank you very much for generous words.

Danny

Kevin,

So happy you liked this and stopped by to say so!!

Tammy

Kim,

That means a lot to me coming from you girl!!

Thanks for always being there for me!!

Tammy

Ricky,

I am always thrilled to impress you and it is folks like you that inspire me to move forward!!

Tammy

Roger,

Thank you so very much, I am so happy ou were able to hear this and I appreciate your kind thoughts and words!!

Tammy

Robert Dean,

You made my day, I am so happy that you liked this and I am thrilled because I so admire your work as well!!

Tammy

Josie,

I am so happy you gave this a listen and I am such a fan of your duets that I am overwhelmed that you liked the vocal...YEAH!!

I have received many comments on the lyric, so I do understand what you mean and thank you so much for giving this a visit!!

Tammy

Hi Tammy

Well I think your progress is quite stunning : ) -- keep it up ! You have a great team on your side and those relationships will continue to grow also. jm

Roger,

Glad you like our song. I have to agree with you about Tammy's performance and it is one of my favorites too. Thanks for listening in.

Danny

Hi Dottie!


There's never been a breath that I would ever want to hold
(Than) swimming deep into your depths to quench my lonely soul

This is actually one line and if you read it as a sentence it makes perfect sense (to me).

Glad you liked it Dottie and I'd love to hear your love song when you write it!

Thanks for stopping in,

Danny

Stan the man!

So, sizzlin', special and breathtaking must mean you liked it a little bit! No? Thanks for listening and giving us such high marks.

Hugs back at ya Stan,

Danny

Two thumbs up! Thanks Jan.

Danny

Doug,

Thank you for all the kind words. The "you will always turn me on" part was not intended as sexual but sensual and as I mentioned in a previous reply, It builds on the chorus nicely, in my opinion. We will probably not get the chance to redo the song, so I'll take that bit into consideration on the next go around.

Thanks again,

Danny

I found the line "you will always turn me on" was fine in this song. I thought it was sensual and not offensive at all in this. Even if this song is ever re-done, I hope the line remains.

Dottie,

Thanks for your thoughts girl and the listen!! Great to see ya!!

Tammy

Stan,

I'm sure that if we "turned you on", then we certainly have accomplished something!! Glad you liked it!!

Tammy

Jan,

So happy you heard this one and have been missing you!!!

Tammy

Doug,

I have had a few comments on that line and I think that it means something different to each person. Some are shocked and feel it is a bit base. Some feel it isn't intimate. I personally feel that if you are that much in love and passionate with someone and they said this to you and only you, it would be a very sensual thing, which is a great lead in to the chorus. it is just my opinion and I understand yours and have gotten that comment, but I'm on the fence on that one.

I really appreciate you listening and am so happy that you enjoyed the song!

Tammy

Joice,

Thanks so much for stopping in, I have been missing you and always look forward to your comments!

Tammy

Hey Tammy.........this is very nice......something is urging me to speed it up a couple of beats-per-minute....but that's just me. The mood gets a little haunting around 2'36"...I like it!

-Tom

Well the part I like the best is the vocals. But the song doesn't have enough going for it to showcase the vocalist. I want to hear this voice put to the test... I mean really push to the limit, one of the best budding vocalists around these parts. Dang, that would be cool. Nice song, by the way. But I like the vocals best.

Hi Tammy & Danny ...Nice to meet you and if I've said hi 'ways back ..and have forgotten, excuse please...

Very lovely vocals!...really nice! ... Nice Melody...
and lyrics convey lovely emotion....

Maybe...dig a wee bit deeper lyrically y'all..... a few thoughts.
I LOVE the thought the next two lines convey...

There's never been a breath that I would ever want to hold
Than swimming deep into your depths to quench my lonely soul

(But I did read the comments this time..I don't always..)...and see
what's being said about the Than...
It would probably mess the meter up..but...how bout...

There's never been a breath that I would ever want to hold....
Swimming deep into your depths I quench my lonely soul...

I'm not sure the than worked in that spot...

only other thought was....(and this is Nit pickin and personal preference)

mebbe word replacement on one of the burns...or fire
there's ...burn burning fire warmth in the Verse...and then
followed up by warm fire burn in the chorus...

Very nice you two... Enjoyed!!!!

best wishes,
Kaley

Kevin Miller,

I'm very happy that you liked the song and do agree with you that the vocals on it are what makes the song come alive! We thank you for your comments. It would be nice to have a more full production but sometimes you have to take what you can get and that is what we did.

Thanks Kevin,

Danny

Hi Kaley,

First, I would like to thank you for listening and giving your thoughtful feedback.

I had stated in a previous response concerning the use of the word than in "Than swimming deep into your depths...". Maybe the line should not have been capitalized since it is not a separate line but the continuation of a thought process which happens to break at the spot where it appears to be grammatically incorrect to start a line with the word "Than". I never picked up on it since it is actually a one line thought.

The line you used as a suggestion is a good line and would work.

As far as the wording goes, I chose the words to convey the message of heat without being too repetitive, using slight variations as to not be stale.

Thanks again Kaley,

Danny

I don't want to sound obstinant or insolent. The wording was thought out before using it.

Tom,

I'm not sure I could speed up the vocal on this personally it seems to intimate to rush....I mean, when you feel good, you want to swim in it...LOL!! But I am sure there are a thoughsand ways to do this song, mine will always be the over-emotional take!! LOL!!

Thanks for listening!

Tammy

Kevin,

You are sweet and I thank you for your kind words!!! I have other songs that might appeal to the genre that you like best!! I always appreciate your time and thoughts!!

Tammy

Kaley,

I don't think that we have met, but meeting is always a pleasure each time it occurs!!

Thanks for your comments, I think you have some really good points and we have heard about those areas from others, so worth taking a look if we ever re-record this.

I appreciate you taking a listen and hope to see you agian real soon!!

Tammy

Reminds me of some of the songs Carole King did way back when; I think I have an lp around here of "Tapestry" well done.
Take care,
Kyrk

Kyrk,

That is the most beautiful thing to say to me and I thank you...I LOVE Carole King, I do not make any efforts to do anything "like" her, but I just loved the thought...thank you very much!!

Tammy

Pretty song!



You may want to end the first line of your bridge in a different way; IMO, this phrase is cliche'/outdated.

Shayne,

I'm glad you liked the song and Tammy does do a wonderful job singing, which makes it pretty IMO.

I wrote a good deal of the lyric, including the bridge. I appreciate your taking the time to offer your take on things but I can't imagine that telling someone "you will always turn me on" could ever be outdated. It could perhaps be cliche'; however, the context it is used in is far from cliche'(IMO). I find myself trying to defend and explain the line but to no avail.

In no way am I taking offense to the comment since there are a few people who have remarked on the same thing for different reasons. I do stand by the use of the phrase and its meaning, which was intended as intimately sensual.

Thanks for expressing your thoughts and impressions of the song.

Danny

Shayne,

So very glad to see you here sir!!

We do understand about that line, we discuss it often... and are so happy you liked the song!

Tammy

Tammy, Beautiful as always. It is so apparent that you do your emotional "research" when you write. So enjoyed this !!

Hey Tammy & Danny,nice work,very nice!I love the vocals Tammy.The lyrics marry the music beautifully.I'm so glad i checked it out.Mojo

Darrell,

SO GOOD to see you, you have been missed!! I am happy you liked this song and hope to see more of you on the board!! Thanks for stopping by!

Tammy

Michael,

Thank you so very much, I find that comment so wonderful that the lyric and melody marry well...I love to think that is true!!
I am very happy you took a listen and thanks for being so kind!!

Tammy

This is just gorgeous! You two have created a wonderful song and Ian took it up to the top with that woinderful piano.

Loved it! Great collab!!! Don't see a thing I'd change...'cept I wish I'd been one of the authors! Very, very nice!

Al (and Di)

Hi Michael,

Glad you took the time to listen and reply. No doubt, Tammy did great matching the intimacy of the lyric with the emotion of the vocals. I'm pleased that you enjoyed the song. Thanks for giving it a listen.

Danny

Al (and Di),

It is pleasing that so many people have enjoyed the fruits of our labors. The writing that I did was the easy part. Tammy did all of the hard stuff like getting the music, chording, learning, and singing the song. She is the one that really made it happen! Thank you for taking the time to listen and give your thoughts.

Thanks again Al & Di,

Danny

Wow guys this is a wonderful piece of work. The passionate piano play, works perfectly with Tammy's vocals.
It's a beautiful lyric and arrangement.

As for the Elton John comparison I can hear it also. I think it would be more prevalent with some vocal rhythm variation as Mike mentioned.
Tammy you sure didn't disappoint, this is one hell of song and one hell of a team, you have there.

PS. Your vocals and Ian's piano playing work so well together.