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8Graves
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/20/26 06:05 PM
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Saosin
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/20/26 02:43 PM
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Spiritbox
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/18/26 09:51 PM
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TV Drama
by Bill Draper - 09/18/26 02:22 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 09/17/26 09:40 PM
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Lagoons
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/17/26 01:34 AM
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"I Must Have You"
I like the way you're leaning
And the way you call my name
I'm pretty sure you are perfect
And I may never walk the same
But the wait's come to pass I must have you
Chorus:
Feels like I'm walking on air
When I'm with you
Don't care what anyone says
Cause I must have you
Nobody should try to stop me
From getting my dream shoes
Cause I must have you
I like the way you hold me
And you'll never let me down
I'll take good care of you
And make sure you outlast every one
You were made for me and you know it too
(Chorus)
Bridge:
You made my waiting all worth the while
And everybody's noticing my big ole smile
Cause I'm happy now
(Chorus)
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PIUS-
THIS IS MY TAKE--JMHO ON YOUR FIRST LYRIC--CAPS-USE OR LOSE ANY--HOPE IT HELPS
I Must Have You
I like the way you're MOVing
And the way you SAY my name
YES I'm THINKING you’RE perfect
I may never walk the same
IT’S TIME TO SAY I must have you
Chorus:
YOU HAVE ME walking on air
WHEN I'm CLOSE TO you
I Don't care what THEY say
YES I must have you
IT’LL BE HARD to stop me
From WALKING IN dream shoes
YES I must have you
I like the way you hold me
I FEEL YOU WON’T let me down
I THINK YOU FEEL THE SAME WAY
I KNOW YOU’LL ALWAYS BE ‘ROUND
IT’S TIME I SAY I must have you
(Chorus)
YOU HAVE ME walking on air
WHEN I'm CLOSE TO you
I Don't care what THEY say
YES I must have you
IT’LL BE HARD to stop me
From WALKING IN dream shoes
YES I must have you
OUTRO
My waiting HAS BEEN worth while
ALL FRIENDS SEE my BIG smile
Cause I'm happy now
NOW I HAVE YOU.....NOW I HAVE YOU.....
Mackie
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well, I like your suggestions but that wouldn't fit the story I was telling. for instance, in the first line, the shoes are on display and she's been waiting to get her money so she can buy them. It's not a serious subject though the title suggests so. But I'll check again on your suggetsions
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Pnmuru, Nice start here. Admittedly I initially concluded your were writing about a girl/guy relationship and not a girl/shoe (or guy/shoe?) one.  But because of that it makes for a really cool story. You brought out a love for a pair of shoes like going after a serious relationship. Nicely done. Peace Dave
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thank you, Dave. Yea, You got it. it is about a shoe and its not a guy/girl relationship. Most of my lyrics are like this but people misinterpret them and don't seem to get them.
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Hi Pnmuru
Welcome to the site and the lyric forum. Smooth stuff, did you have a nice R&B melody in mind when you wrote it?
Good to see a good mix of lyrics doing the rounds.
Best wishes
Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Well thank you, Travis. I'm not sure what genre this falls under but I just write whatever ideas come to mind. I was thinking country cause that's what I write mostly ad pop/Rock.
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Pnmuru, I once wrote a song about a train letting you down so I certainly won't question a song about a pair of shoes that lift you up. The subject matter is pretty unique. And there's an innocence to the lyrics that is appealing. Set it to music and let's see how it sounds.
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I do have the chords for this but not sure i have the complete melody for it. if anyone would try it, they can. Thank you all for your comments and more
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