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Landing
by Gary E. Andrews - 12/06/23 04:48 PM
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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 12/06/23 11:20 AM
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"Dwell"
by bennash - 12/06/23 09:55 AM
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by Guy E. Trepanier - 12/03/23 07:19 PM
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Snuts
by Gary E. Andrews - 12/03/23 05:01 AM
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Here's an ode to wished-for innocence, but not so much. It's the last tune on my MySpace page www.myspace.com/suspendedspidersongs Hope you like it. Ott Give Me A KissWritten by Ott Lukk ottlukk@yahoo.com why don't you, come out tomorrow, and take me along why don't you, come out tomorrow, and sing me a song? we'll laugh and sing--we'll float in the air and I'll be happy, knowing you're there CHORUS why don't you, pull me beside you, give me a kiss? 'cause if you didn't, it's one thing I'd miss I'd really like to, make love to you but that can wait 'til, you're not so new why don't you come back tomorrow, you know it's late I've got some things, babe, that just can't wait I'd really like--having you stay but that can wait, love, just one more day CHORUS why don't you, pull me beside you, give me a kiss 'cause if you didn't, it's one thing I'd miss I'd really like to, make love to you but that can wait 'til, you're not so new why don't we, go out tomorrow, and sing us a song we'll be so happy, as we walk along I'll tell a story, you'd like to hear and I'll be happy, knowing you're near CHORUS why don't you pull me beside you, give me a kiss? 'cause if you didn't, it's one thing I'd miss I'd really like to, make love to you but that can wait 'til, you're not so new REPRISE (Shout & Refrain) Why don't you--pull me beside you, give me a kiss!! 'cause if you didn't, it's one thing I'd miss Pull me beside you, give me a kiss!! Give me a kiss!! give me a kiss!! give me a kiss!! give me a kiss!! give me a kiss!! Give me--a--kiss!!!!!! (c) 2008 Ott Lukk
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Dan:
Thank you! I will never ever again put a period behind a URL address!
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Hey Ott, great vocal and production on this, the theme as
you say is sweetly innocent and the melody matches the
lyric well, like it,
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Ott, very nice - really enjoyed this.
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Ott, You got a nice lyric and melody going on this and a GREAT singer and production. She squeezes every ounce of emotion out of your lyrics. A real nice job.
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I am a big Reba fan, so I always enjoy hearing this demo singer. I would like to see you move towards a "younger" sound, though with a Miranda Lambert or Hillary Scott type of demo singer.
Very pro sounding song and demo. Yea, you're stuck with a slightly older sound -- but you do it well.
The counter vocal at the end didn't work for me.
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You always have a first rate singer, always enjoy your songs and am jealous that your myspace page is so nice...It took me all day just to figure how to change my profile pic...I'm just not a myspace gal I guess...
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Tony, Bob, Dan, Kevin, & Tammy: Thanks for your kind comments, and for taking the time to listen. I appreciate it!
Kevin: You are absolutely correct about the counter-vocal. I tried to express to the demo firm my wish for a "round", like that French tune "Alouette, 'jante alouette." Or however it goes.
It should have been one vocal over the other. Compliment you on your insight,and sharing it. I've kicked myself for a couple of years for accepting it the way it is.
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Great "Ott Luk" song of appeal, that should appeal to many. A kiss is a prelude, but you have managed to make it a symhony...nice work Ott.~~~MFB III
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MFB:
You are poetic even when posting a response. Thank you.
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Ott-
The song wouldn't play but I loved your mood post!
Do you have song posted on another site?
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Hi Ott, really love the lyrics and vocal melody. The chorus is stuck in my head now :-) Cheers, ian PS On myspace, you can now separate out individual songs on their own page by clicking the song title text link in the music player--just found this out recently: GIVE ME A KISS - OTT LUKK http://www.myspace.com/suspendedspidersongs/music/songs/Give-Me-A-Kiss-53046837
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Emmanuel: I'll repost the link Please send me a PM if it doesn't work. www.myspace.com/suspendedspidersongs Ott
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Ian:
Always a compliment when someone says a tune sticks in their head! Thank you! Also thanks for the tip on single pages.
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Hey Ott, first song from you I ever listened, and I must say I'm not sorry for it  The lyrical theme is really a good idea. The singer does exactly what is needed IMO. I don't have nits re the lyrics and the melody. It all flows very well, and the evidence of it did me good. A truly enjoyable listen! I tend to agree with Kevin. I think the song is good enough to open doors. While the traditional sound is very well done, a more contemporary production could give it an edge and make the difference. Well done, anyway. I'll pay attention to what you do from now on  Cheers, Yann
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Thanks, Yann, for listening. I appreciate your comments!
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Really nice production, Ott. Tremendous music and vocals. And I like the story, the notion of not taking things too fast. Donna
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Donna! Thank you! You'd hardly suspect I had a 15 year old daughter.
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The melody sounds the same throughout the entire song. To me, after the first minute, I've already lost interest in hearing any more, and that's giving it a liberal listen. The verse should have its own melody, the chorus should have a different melody. There is no build up and no BANG that keeps me wanting to listen. It was tough for me to listen to it all the way through.
Lyrically, I get that it's about taking a relationship slow as opposed to moving too fast, but there are parts that I find confusing. Polish it up more and you will have a solid piece.
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Hi Ott,
This is very very good! I have discovered a lot of talent on this site and this song is right up there at the top:)
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Another very good demo Ott
good luck with the song - jm
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Greg: Well, at least you listened all the way through, I appreciate it! You're right about the melody. I'm well aware that you're supposed to contast verse/chorus, but after several attempts to do so, I thought the repetition worked here. Could be wrong, suggestions appreciated.
Calvin: Thank you!
Dottie: Sweet comment, thanks!
Joice: And thank you as well!
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Ott-mon...
I waited all the way through the tune to hear the refrain. I was hoping. I lost.
The singer has some pipes. But nothing changed in the whole tune. It is static. No build up. No nothing. I just kept hearing the same "verse" over and over.
Lyrics are OK. Not spectacular but they pass. There was just no dynamic in the delivery.
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Chap: I appreciate your comments. You're correct, there is no "refrain". The style in this song is on purpose. A young lady, infatuated, but not stupid. The lyrics reflect this. It's a tune that doesn't require a "build-up", because nothing is going to happen. They're both just strolling through the flowers together, discovering each other. Yet the lady knows what's going on. It's an out of style approach, I'll concede that. I find it interesting that female listeners find it a lot more interesting than males.
Still, you took the time to listen and respond. I really appreciate it!
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i really like this song...figured i'd bump it back to the top. how do you get that sound?! it's just so clean and edited and mixed perfectly. is it a program you have? i need some demos with this quality to send out.
I have music for all of my songs and they vary from rock to country to folk and everywhere in between. (except rap)
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Coalminer: Thanks for the compliment! I think I've posted the answer to your question before, but I'll repeat it. I write the lyrics. I create the melody, and the prosody of the song. Then, I sing it acappela into my music workstation. I might add a rhytm track to suggest the feel I want. And then I send it off to one of two demo firms. Beaird Music Group in Nashville, where Larry Beaird does the arrangement, and I have 5 musicians performing live. Or, DBW Productions in LA, where David Chamberlin does the arrangements -- with no live musicians, just the singer of my choice. BTW, love your avatar pic. Ott
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