Here is a new song that I've been working on. Well, in truth, it was written way back in 1999 in collaboration with Paula Wright but we never recorded it at the time.
Paula wrote the lyric and I set it to music. We played 'Follow The Rain' in a five-piece band for which she was the singer and I played keyboards. Unfortunately, the group didn't last very long. However, I got in touch with Paula recently to ask if she would be okay about my reviving the song and recording it, and she was happy for me to do that.
At this point, I have uploaded a rough mix of a provisional arrangement with a scratch vocal. There's a bit of clipping on the voice, particularly during the chorus, due to my recording with the levels a little too high. I shall put that right in due course and hope to add some female backing vocals (would anyone like to volunteer for that, by the way?).
Constructive critiques would be very much appreciated. I've described the genre as soul/r&b/funk/alternative/pop. However, some have suggested 'adult contemporary', which is not a term used very much here in the UK. It's definitely not as 'funky' or as 'alternative' as most of my other stuff. So any thoughts on the most appropriate genre tags would be useful.
Just started, so far sounds a bit jazzy. Cool sound, funky and fun. I would say, r&b after it gets going. But, I'm not really anyone to ask, so I hope someone who knows what they are talking about offers some input.
I'm not sure I get where the lyric is going. I'm not the sharpest tool, probably missed something.. 'going our separate ways' would be the theme?
Hmm, I'd have to admit to some ambiguity on that one, given that I didn't write the lyric. I think you're broadly correct in your interpretation, though.
On that point, Paula (the lyricist) has written this in the comments part of the track: "it brings back memories of a very bad relationship - I'm old enough to laugh now!"
I found myself quite surprised by how emotionally affecting it was to sing this, as I got more and more into doing that during the recording session. The strings that I added later in the day, for the final chorus, seemed to make it seem more sad, or maybe 'resigned' is the best word, in that respect. Good old strings - always useful for emotional manipulation. ;-)
This Aussie girl really enjoyed listening, and I agree with the others, R&B, but I feel the lyrics still needs some work.
What stood out for me in the song was "What's yours is yours, what's left is mine" theirs your HOOK! My only suggestion would be to re-work the lyrics, and sorry that I can't offer you much help with that, cause I've still got lots to learn regarding songwriting hey.
Good luck with it, and hopefully others here will jump on board and give you a helping hand.
Another super little tune from you nice melody and your 'scratch' vocal sounds pretty darn nice to me... I like the hook - intro and change up early on.....if I could suggests anything production wise it is to have the conga (or bongo?) reappear in your softer interlude later in the piece.. I liked that bit and wanted it to return --- maybe outro too....
and I particularly like this thought ..... My heart jumps with the record playing
as always Good Stuff from you ! - jm
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