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Apr 23, 2010, 07:26 PM
Hey Love 215502
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Hey Love 2009 Shirley Elane Matthews & Arthur Holt http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8177887
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Hey love…...... see How
The sun has quiet the rain
Through the Storms of life ...
Our love Still Feels the Same ,

Hey love…...... I Can see the Sunset
In your eyes .....
It took a long time to Find you ..
Let?s keep doing what lovers do ..

Hey love .......this Love don?t have To
Be explained ......A
Real love ......just feeds the flame

Hey love ..I wanna feel love
Again and again, Hey Love…....
I don?t want this night to end

baby, baby
bridge
Baby (G)
This love is gettin deeper
Than Deep
Who knew your love
Would be so sweet

Hey love….... you know I Can?t
Get enough so
Just Say .....
You believe… in us

Hey love,,,,, Tell me you
Wanna Break into
My dream,s,,,,,,,
Show me
How much,
Joy, how much
joy this love
Brings
Hey love
Hey love
Hey love
Hey love ...........................Baby, baby, baby, baby

I think that the 'hey love' phrasing is too long.

I think it would be better if sang more crisply. That, I feel, would make it more catchy.

This seems kind of like a Buddy Holly rockabilly type of song. Some very good writing. I'm not sure about those "baby's" before the bridge and at the end. Like everything else though. Good job.

Rick

Hell;o.. Steve..hmmmmmm. ''Now This is very interesting..
Steve''..pardon me..but Hey Love is short??...
hmmmmmm..Steve can you give me an example
of..what you mean,,you def got my interested..:)
..I really like when you stopped by..Steve..
I hope to hear from you again...
.and thank you for the righteous..
comments..i;m def,,feelin you on
The ''catchy aspect..;o




take care~~
Shirl;o..

Enjoyed my listen Shirley but I agree about the "Baby" parts. Seemed contrived and a little corny in the performance of it. Other than that I liked it.

Steve

Whoa.. Hell;o.. Rick..
it;s def, fancy seeing you

Rick you have an interesting
''Take..;;Whoa..Buddy Holly..
[That will be the day when I die];0
dude It would be hip to know what
instruments ;o Buddy Holly would have
.used for this Piece''Hey LOve''..
A rockabilly..It;s very charming
indeed,,Thanx for the ..comments..
Rick..

Yes:) Someone else had mention the
baby baby..''lines..hmmmmmmm..
I will pass this along to Art..
We really had soooo much fun..
doing this piece...


Rick it means a lot to me
that you stopped by,,
to check out This Piece
Hey LOve...I;m glad youre
able to embrace it..;o



See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Hey GREAT SONG, agree it needs a little smoothing but what a good job ... wow ... this is very good I think for sure

lol.lol.lo.lo..ja ja... Hell;o little Stevie B..
it;s a pleasure to meet you..Yes..lol
I agree Stevie The Baby Baby Could come off
a lil corny..but thanx ..for embracing
This Piece Stevie B..i;m glad you stopped
by to comment..:)..lol..I will pass
your comments on to Art..he really
was a joy to work with..;o



See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Hell;o Dan~~

Whoa.,,Thanx for the awesome comments..
it;s so refreshing to hear you speak
highly of This Piece ''Hey Love''..


**** Thanx for stopping by
Dan.. i;m glad you
enjoyed This Piece..;o


See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Pretty good tune. It does sound Buddy Hollyish Rockabilly. I'd say that's a good thing but it probably wouldn't be commercial in today's Market.
I liked the way Hey Love was used in this context but I agree on the Baby Baby part. It came as a surprise and didn't seem to fit. Almost comical. I'd say still use it but differently.

Fun tune.

Shirley E Matthews,
Hello it is nice to meet you. Looks like you have been around with 300+ posts, I'm surprised I have not commented on your work before.
Anyway this has a great sound, very professional. Obviously a pro demo. I like the arc of the melody and the arrangement.
But . . . I am not crazy about the message. Might just be me but I am always looking for something to connect to and this seems a little predictable.
I am just being honest. I think you have to find a way to surprise the listener with something unexpected or unique.

Just my two cents, great sound though.
Tom

Hell;o Bill
thanx for stopping by:)

..Hmmmmmm ...LOl...you know A lot of people said;;
that baby baby part was comical..and I think That's
what Art wanted to do..was to have that element of
surprise..he knew it wasn't a mainstream''Way to
do A song..he really wanted to get the audience
engaged into ''the lyric..and Yes if it jumped
off a lil corny or funny that's alright...

hmmmmm' I agree with you Bill..I strongly
feel that''with another production ..and
a lil tweaking of the Lyric some tight vocals
..this Piece could be solvent.. hmmmmmm....


***** That's Why WE Are looking For someone
who has a vision for this Piece..to..
Cover This song...hmmmmmm.:)...

.
I;m glad it was a fun Piece..



See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Hell;o Tom ,,,:)

it;s a pleasure To meet you..
Thanx for stopping by Tom
it means a lot to me:)

****** Yes!! I Have Been pretty busy..
and enjoying every minuet of it..
There is so much To absorb and learn
at This Site..I thrive on this type
of Adventure..lol.lo.l..I luv to write
so..I glad youre honest..I respect
that''Tom very much.. youre shooting
from the hip..hmmmmmmmm.I do understand
Where youre coming from with your thoughts..
Tom...

This piece has a whimsical''edge to it
it;s about Having fun..with the one you love..
just a comical way of showing people that
love can be funny as heck...lol.lol..
can you imagine A Dude ''hollering out his truck
Hey love..Baby Baby,,lolol.lol..

I;m hoping that there was an understood''
message ''that you could connect with..'like
have some good old fashion fun with the one
you love :)and that Baby Baby Baby..
lol.lol.lol lol ..,,.was reinforced for that
particular reason..To be funny,,
but entertaining,


Tom it has been a joy talking to you..;o
Stop by again~~



SEE you in a few;o
Shirl;o.


but it;s cool if it didnot do it for
you..Tom..it's all good...

I just feel that those words are too elongated, dragged out beyond the point where they sound catchy any more. They need a punchier delivery, in my opinion.

'' Hell;o.. Steve~~
hmmmmmmm. This is very interesting Steve..
Yes..Steve you prob,,are speaking some
truths.. we need ''some one to cover
this song..and put the needed lines in place
to perhaps get''a more punchier delivery..



******* I think delivery is very important
to a song..that's what make the hook of
a song stand out..the delivery...


Thanx for Stopping by Steve

See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

I realize that this is just a "scratch" vocal, so I won't talk about that (except those "Baby"s were pretty funny). The music is fun, the lyrics are fun -- but it has a very dated feel. If you want to tighten this up for today's market (I am talking country), then you gotta look at the lyrics.

Hey love…...... see How
The sun has quiet the rain
Through the Storms of life ...
Our love Still Feels the Same

I know what you are saying here -- love conquers all, but you gotta say it more powerfully.

"The sun has quiet the rain" -- this sentence makes no sense, grammatically speaking.

"Through the Storms of life" -- this seems to be a variation of "quiet the rain", which means wasted territory.

"Our love Still Feels the Same" -- well, how does it feel? They might hate each other on rainy days and hate each other when the sun is shining.

Got some promise,

Kevin

Shirley,

A fun song. You have already received some good advice above.

By the way, Buddy Holly's music was pretty simple - he would just have played his guitar and had another guitar, bass and drums backing him up. Some of his recordings had some organ sounds on them.

Just because a song does not fit the profile of a hit record does not mean it is not worthy. There will still be people who like it!

Shirley....some good toe tappin music....good lyric....I liked it....Bob

'

Hell;o.. Kevin

You know it;s always a joy to hear from you..;o
so,,hmmmmmm.... Kevin is it safe to say that..
Metaphors''Are not a good way to express''Country
lyrics..that's basically what that line is: The sun
quiet the rain..My Knowledge base''about writing
country is very limted ..lol...of course Kevin
you already know that Hmmmmmm.Art is a Musician/
country Writer,,so he was ''the Co writer for this Piece..


He came to me..[he knew This song Was An R@b song]
..Ah----- :):)and He Said Shirl.
.I wanna tweaked this baby..into
A country lyric..

So I said okay Art ''I'm down for the Challenge..
[experimental purposes]....
I will plug the R @ B version for ''Hey Love''
my version .. At A later time,,;o

**** Thanx Kevin For your input it is soooooo
very helpful to me..it;s a challenge for me
as A Lyricist..to write Country Songs ..I thrive
on challenges...~~~~;o

**** So with country you gotta get to
the heart of the matter''break it down..
As it relates to ''the message youre
trying to convey..hmmmmmmmmm..:)
This is very interesting indeed..Kevin..


*** and Yes I agree with you 100 percent..
Kevin this Piece needs to be..tighten up
for todays Market..An Indie Artist could
be the right move into the right direction


See you in a few
Thanx for your
comments..;;
It shows promise''..

Shirl;o

Hell;o.. Colin



Whoa,, What an interesting take about This Piece..
hmmmmmm.I luv the drums and the organ...and the guitar
Whoa..now that;s a great combo..Buddy Holly ..would have
did it with so much feeling ;;and his Music moves..
You to wanna dance or grab somebody to dance with..:)
he had some explosive Music.. ..And Yes..There is always
a poss..that there is someone out there who likes your music..
and That's where some of my inspiration to write comes from
Colin ..



Thanx ,,for stopping by Colin to check out
this Piece ''Hey Love'..



See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

aw Robert,,That;s full of such sweet imagery..
..i;m soooo glad youre feelin this Piece..
Thanx for stopping by..;o
Robert~~~ youre def. a joy to talk to..~~~~;o

See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Very fun song, I enjoyed it. For what it's worth, I thought the Baby Baby part added some interest to the song. I would keep it. If I had to make a comment I would say add an instrumental/solo section. That would also help add some interest.

Hell;o my Friend Hell;o,,GSL


I share your sentiments,GSl.. This is a fun song,,;o
so you like ''the baby baby..it is kinda a fun lil
lift for the song..I like the suggestion..An Instrumental
solo section,,,..hmmmmmmm.this is very interesting...
yes..tis would def.gives this Piece more Substance..;o

**** Thank you
GSL '''for stopping by
it means a lot to me..;o
i;m glad youre feelin
this Piece''Hey LOve''~~~~`



it;s all good ..


SEE you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Shirley ...

Great triple jive tune...not too many of them these days!

I like this a lot. My kind of song. It's simple melody with a lot of happiness in it!

Good job guys! No nits from me except the ending was a bit abrupt.

Stan

:),, Hell;o STan....:)

dude this is a very happy fun song..I'm sooooo
glad you can embrace it Stan..Art really loved the
baby baby baby..lol.lol....and yes it will jump
out at cha..an element of surprise..) But it;s
All good...It really means a lot to me Stan..that you
stopped by to check out This Piece''Hey Love''...
you have given us some sweet sentiments about this
Piece,,Thanx....



See you in A few;o
Shirl;o