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Hi All -- another work in progress and I'm thinking we're not the only ones who are feeling this right now... All thoughts are appreciated !

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Sunny Summer © 2010 Joice Marie & Calvin Stewart

The days pass
and nights grow long
there's a chilly feeling
singing evening songs

Summer's gone
Summer's gone

No green grasses
Or fragrant flowers
the lazy haze lost the
sprinkling showers

Summer's gone
Summer's gone

Sunny Summer
went away
Sunny Summer
I hoped you'd stay
but now I long for
Sunny Summer

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I'll take the the first flight
sneak like the dawn
a migrant traveler
hiding somewhere warm

'cause
Summer's gone
Summer's gone

Sunny Summer
come my way
Sunny Summer
I hoped you'd stay
but now I long for
Sunny Summer

! A LeMoN & McFARTneY ProductioN !

green grasses
fragrant flowers
the lazy haze dispenses--this line may sound a bit too poetic, and hard to sing...perhaps you may want to consider something other than this line...jmho
sprinkling showers

Don't we all long for summer? I know I do. This has a really pleasant sound to it, and good lyrics. Nice job Calvin and Joice. Kim

OOPS Kim

I DID change that line --- in the recording !! -- I'll correct the lyric above. Thanks for pointing that out ! and for listening. ; ) jm

I thought it sounded different than the lyrics in that part, but then thought my ears were playing tricks, as they often do.:) Kim

Yes feeling this, longing for sunny summer, very timely,
summer songs almost always have that feel good factor, this
one has a little of that plus a little sadness of the
wish it was here variety which works very well, like it,

Tony.

Summer summer, I need warm as I slug through waist deep snow from the lake erie snow machine ...

need sun, need sun

Great job you Two

HI Tony

Thanks for listening and I'm glad to hear you can feel it too. : ) ! jm

Hi Dan

I Understand -- you just got hit pretty hard there ! Thank you for listening

Stay warm - jm

Hi Kim,

Nice of ya to stop by.
We appreciate what you'e thinking.

Calvin

!! A LeMoN AnD McFARTneY ProductioN !!


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Hi Tony,

**T H A N K S**

Calvin


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Hi JM & Calvin,

Cool song, I mean, HOT song! Love the bridge.
I'll take the the first flight
sneak like the dawn
a migrant traveler
hiding somewhere warm

I'd like to be hiding somewhere warm right about now. It's 10 degrees this am! The minor key makes it all the more wistful.
Calvin's understated background vocals are a nice, subtle touch.

My only nit is the pause before repeating "Summer's gone" in the chorus. I wasn't expecting that delay. Just a thought.

Ricki

Hi Calvin and Joice:

This is a nicely written lyric and a really, really sweet melody. Has a great wistful feel to it.

No nits - although something I'm curious about. The lines where you repeat

Summer's gone
Summer's gone.

I think you are playing Dm Am for both lines?

I wonder about Dm Am for the first and F E for the second - keeping the exact same melody?

Not necessary of course and you might not even like it. Just puts a little different spin on it.....

Very nice!

Scott

Howdy Joice & Calvin. I Like the percussion, & the melody on this
one guys. Very invigorating, & appropriate.........Gus

Hi Joice/Calvin sounds ok to me. Might want to think about changing the title to summers gone. I relate to summers gone a lot more then sunny summer. Sounds like a name to me (sunny summer) My daughters first name by the way.
(sunny)good luck with the song.

Hey guys, sweet tune and vocal, all the more poignant looking out the window at the 12 inches of fresh snow after the 26 inches last week. I really like the vibe and flow of the song. The only suggestion I have is to possibly tone down the percussion a little, I found it distracted me from the rest of the song. Just me, I'm always trying to turn the drummer down. heh heh

Hi Ricki

I'm hoping that all this chanting might have some effect and bring the warm days back sooner --- I can see why the ancients became sun worshipers.....

Glad you like it -- I'll think some more on the pause there..... I've been doing some of that sort of thing with purpose lately for a variation.

Thanks for your feedback - jm

Hi Scott

Thanks for your very kind response --- flattery Is appreciated.. .We'll take a closer look at your suggestions there..... I'll try it at least ; ) be well !! jm

I'd like to thank eveyone for their nice comments here, thanks !!

Calvin


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Hi Gus

So glad that you can find some enjoyment in this one. Thanks ! jm

Hi Scott

I can understand your preference -- I was on the fence as I posted the lyric about the title. But the inspiration was Sunny Summer -so I kept it there --- I think they are both strong hooks and we decided on the less common choice. Thanks for you thoughts and for listening and sharing your talents. jm

Hi Alador

Thanks for coming bay and commenting -- i can tone the drum track down a bit when I go back in - I appreciate the comment. Maybe I'll get it done with real drums down the road sometime. ; )

cheers
jm

Joice/Calvin,

Very nice tight lyric and I liked Calvin's background vocal coming in there. Joice, I like the choice to use a minor sounding melody on this. It does make it more whistful. I think the percussion does detract from it a bit. I could hear maybe a guitar/vocal paired with Calvin's background part and a wind chime or something to emulate the summer wind, perhaps. Just some ideas.

Hi Wendy,

we thank you for the listen and nice suggestions too.

Calvin


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Hi Wendy

Thanks for you suggestions and coming by --- I can hear them and definitely will give it a try. ; ) I appreciate your thoughts and ears on it. jm