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Hi Nadia,

Thank you so much for your time and wonderful comments. So glad you loved it.

Ricki

Good Morning Nadia!

Thank you for your generous comments on our song. I love working with Ricki -- although I think I mentioned before that I don't really consider it work. I'm very lucky she's able to hear the RIGHT music for my lyrics -- and sings them with such passion.

Glad you enjoyed it!

Have a groovy day,
Beth

Morning Alan,

Well aren't you sweet to go looking for flaws and reporting that you came up empty!!

Natch, we're delighted that someone of your esteemed musical caliber should find this so pleasing to your ears. Seriously, your critiques are always very astute and thoughtful, and I know you'll let US know (gently) if something doesn't ring true. So thanks a bundle!

BTW, Al, as you might have surmised from your thread about Helen, you're one popular fella around here . I do hope that we're giving back to you too -- in the form of a diversion at the very least...and perhaps more importantly, providing inspiration to enjoy another day.

So thank you again for your kind comments...and please send my regards to the Mrs.!!

Ciao for now,
Beth

Hi Alan,

Thanks for taking time to listen and letting us know how much you enjoyed our song. Hope all is well with you and yours.

Ricki

This is a REALLY strong tune guys. Best of luck with it.

Ricki - really nice delivery. This is probably the first tune of your I've heard where I didn't have any phrasing issues. Really well composed.

The only thing that struck me, and I think it struck Joice too is the word 'spoon'... it's kind of a lighthearted word in a dark tune. It makes you go 'huh?'. Also, isn't spooning usually associated with a greater intimacy than you want between the un-lovers?

This tune is truly almost ready for prime time IMO... I truly encourage you to fix this one single problem... I think your tune'll be a lot stronger if you do.

Peace,

Ian

Hi guys

I liked the lyrics a lot and the feel and the chord changes especially.

Great phrasing on the verses Ricki
Just a bit more work on the phrasing/melody like on this section

You're right not to pick up the phone
No more one last time
Final price for our crime
Gotta wipe the slate clean here at home

It doesn't quite land in the perfect spot, or maybe the range is a bit much for the vocal. But I do like the ideas' of hitting those high notes.

NIce work you two

Ladies, this is really good. Beth, I wish I had written those lyrics. They are fantastic.

Hi Ian,

Thanks for resurrecting this one from the back pages. Glad you liked it. As for the "spoon", it's Beth's call but I would encourage her to keep it. It may not be a guy thing to say but very much a woman thing. And the point of the story here is that she IS trying getting back into her married relationship, before it goes totally south, so she IS going for intimacy.
"I know the cost
Of what could've been lost
And sense a change in the weather"
Thanks for checking it out.

Ricki

Hi Mike,

Thanks for taking time to listen and letting us know you like this one. I know I came in a little late on that last line. Leave it to you to notice! When/if I ever get to do this in a real studio, I will take more care with that and those @%!#$!# high notes!

Ricki

Hi Tricia,

Thanks for stopping by for a listen. Beth sure has a remarkable way with words, eh? But don't tell her I said that. She already has such a big head she has trouble getting through doorways! Glad you liked it.

Ricki

Ya, know, I didn't read it closely enough... I misinterpreted that the marriage was dissolving... I take back what I said... Really nice tune, and again, REALLY nicely done with your melody and phrasing.

Peace,

Ian

Her Bthness --- and her Rickiness ....



You really paint the picture here. I like that listing melody. The quiet guitar is effective.

Tom

Whoa now, this is some good stuff! I'm not sure where this lady is from, but I'd like to put her somewhere down south....Texas maybe...an' put some good ol' country drawl and drag on these wonderful lyrics.....lean on, and linger on some of the words just like she's leanin' on that window, watching the rain and letting her thoughts linger on her secret lover.

Hi Ian,

Thanks for listening again. We like repeat offenders. I mean listeners!

Ricki

Hi HisTomness!

Thanks for letting us know you liked this one. Always nice to have you drop by.

Ricki

Hi Ellen,

Nice to meet ya'll! Thanks for letting us know you liked this one.
That lady, although some may disagree about the lady part, is me, and I'm from Wisconsin. Nice visuals in your world, but no drawl in mine. Beth, who wrote the lyrics is from the northeast so, no drawl from her either! You'll have to settle for my nasal, midwestern twang! Sorry!

Ricki

I agree; you captured the mood perfectly Ricki. Makes me ashamed of my mammoth productions. All one really needs is a guitar and voice to produce the magic. As you've proved many times.

Love the lyrics Beth. Hope to see more of your serious side. Not that I mind your whacky side.

Best, John

Hi Ricki,
I hope you didn't take my comment on the vocals on Change in the Weather as an insult to your vocals! You have a lovely voice....very clean and pure....pitch-perfect. It's my predisposition, that when I hear a song about sinnin' women and their duplicitous, adulterous ways....well, I go thinkin' that they should be sung "southern-like".....'cause surely you nice, mid-western gals don't do like that....(Ha! and tee-hee).
yerz, ellen

Hi John,

Thanks for stopping in. Never apologize or be ashamed of your gift. If I had the skills and means, I'd put more into my productions, no doubt about it. Glad my "less is more" philosophy (out of nessecity) works for you.

Ricki

Hi Ellen,

No worries! It takes a lot to insult me. Not to generalize, but we can get down and nasty up here as well. Just ask Beth!
Thanks again.

Ricki

GOODNESS!! How did I miss all these? Sorry folks ....

So Hey There Ian,

Thanks for stopping by on this one with such generous feedback! Yeah, it's getting to be pretty "old news" that Ricki rocks ( ), but I can live with it so long as she keeps letting me play along....

Regarding your concern with the word "spoon", I'm happy to see that she also explained our position so clearly. I'd like to believe I'd have responded in much the same manner, but regardless, I'm glad you've since decided it "works" for you. Of course, we realize we're not going to please "all the people all the time"...but it's always nice when we can help a "dissenter" switch sides!!

So thanks again, Ian. Your comments are much appreciated!!

Ciao for now,
Beth

Howdy Mike!

Wow, what a pleasure to have you stop by for a listen on this one. I'm so glad your enjoyed it. Ricki's musication skills are fantabulous in their own right...and she manages to make me, as a lyricist, very comfortable with and happy about her choices.

I see you've had some questions concerning her phrasing...which she has addressed with you. Yeah, getting this one into a real studio would be a blast! I do think (in my not-so-humble opinion) it has a lot going for it -- even an almost maybe happy ending!

So thank you again for your encouraging comments Mike. They mean a lot coming from someone with your talent and work ethic.

Take it easy,
Beth

Hey, Tricia,

Thaks a lot for the great feedback. Your writing doesn't look too bad either!!

Glad you could enjoy our offering,
Beth

Hey again Ian,

We appreciate the return visit and your reconsideration of the term "SPOON"! Both Ricki and I felt pretty strongly about it...so I'm glad you were able to get a better sense of where we were coming from.

Thanks again, and have a good evening....
Beth

Hi His Tomness,

Didn't I just call you that recently somewhere else? Jeepers, I am in dire need of some iced coffee around now... It's hot, and I'm discombobulated (I know, an intriquing combination to be sure )....

Anyhoo, thank you so much for your comments, Tom. I love the idea of painting a picture -- I kick things off with the lyrics in 2-D, then Ricki works her musicating magic and brings them into the realm of the 3rd Dimension.

Now I feel like I should go to a Star Trek convention....

All kidding aside, we appreciate your visit and your kind feedback. Stop by any time....

Have a good evening,
Beth

Well howdy there Miss Ellen (Post #1 )!

You know what, sugar? I been fixin' to have a nice chat with yall, as you most surely have smuggled in a bucket o' sunshine 'round here! I don' know ANYBODY who ain't just a smidge taken by a southern accent, and I declare, yours has charm written all'over it. Your momma must be right proud....

HOWEVUH... I'M from up heyuh in Bawwwston, so, it's like, kinduh hahd to figya out wut yuh sayin' haff de tyme. Oh yuh, it's wickid hahd, I swayuh!

Okay, enough of my feeble attempts at faux accents ! Thank you for chiming in with your very visual and auditory suggestions for "Change in the Weahter". I thoroughly enjoy working with Ricki -- the intimate tone of her voice just slays me (in a good way of course)...yet she still brings something new to the party each time...so I'm glad you noticed!

Anyhoo, glad you stumbled upon our song and our "humble abode" here at JPF. I look forward to hearing a LOT more from you too ...

Take care,
Beth (she of no particular accent, who has been known to drop the occasional "r" under duress !)

Hi JLS,

Again, I apologize for the belated response on your generous feedback. Just a bit nutty around here lately.

Ricki certainly has a magical touch, doesn't she? But by no means should you sell yourself short on your productions -- jeepers, I'd love to be able to do one 100th of that!

Glad too you liked the lyrics. I do try to go "less comical" every now and again.....sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. I'm happy to hear that you think this one fell into the former category.

STILL.....WHACKY is a permanent part of the package!! So hopefully I'll be able to shake this funk and serve up some more of that soon....

Thanks again....we appreciate the visit!!

Have a groovy day,
Beth

Hi Again Ellen,

Glad to see you and Ricki have resolved your phonetic differences ( ) !!

I have to say though, I do enjoy reading your posts....I can "hear" your accent just fine! It has a musical quality all its own....

Anyhoo, thanks for taking the time to clarify your earlier comment. As Ricki said, I don't believe any offense was taken....I just think good manners should be acknowledged whenever possible, and so here I am!

BTW, I see you've got a new song up. I've been out of commission a bit, so hope to take a listen and comment soon. I can tell from the number of responses, though, that your talent is being given the attention it's due.

Take care,
Beth

Beth you've been reading those Danielle Steele novels again. This is another surprise side to your writing and may I say you once again exhibited your gift. I am not fond of cheating but you masterfully captured w/words a cheater's self-imposed dilemma so skillfully. Ricki's voice and singing style are so good for these almost story songs that she has you believing she is the participant (not that our Ricki would get into a sticky situation like that of course), but she pulls it off, again! You two are a force to be reckoned with! Look out world!!

Nite girls,
Lynn

Hi Ricki & Beth

How are you both, going good I see. Gosh Ricki, I get goosebumps listening to you sing, Beth, another good write, I enjoyed every bit of it.

Sorry I haven't been on the boards much lately. I have been working on a Bullying Prevention business plan, hopefully to land myself a good job, and also I have been Networking other Artists, writers, and all I can say, is YIPEE, good things are happening. Tell you all soon, I don't want to jinx myself.

You Go Girls.

Hugs
Aussie fan & friend
Michele