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Hey everybody, here's an uptempo female country song that
I recently finished. In my head I'm hearing someone with "attitude".


Thank you in advance, for looking...and for any comments or suggestions.



Second Place
(c) CG King


There are times in life when second
Is as good or better than first
Like the second day of vacation
Or seconds of dessert

But there's one second I won't stand for
Let me cut right to the chase
When it comes to sharin' your lovin'
Oh -No--- I won't be.... second place

I believe in second chances
I believe in second sight
I believe in second dates
If the first one went alright
There is no shame in being second
If you ran hard in the race
But, when it comes to your lovin'.......
Uh-uh----On no----I won't be second place

I've been known to pass my plate
'Round that table a second time
I do love country cookin'
Grandma's biscuits sure are fine

You're my baby so you know
That you can slide past second base
But, when it comes to your lovin'
Oh--No--I won't be... second place

I believe in second chances
I believe in second sight
I believe in second dates
If the first one went alright
There is no shame in being second
If you ran hard in the race
But when it comes to your lovin'.....
Uh--uh---Oh no--I won't be second place

If I catch 'ya foolin' around
You better pray for the Good Lord's grace
'Cause when it comes to seconds
There's no way I'm gonna be----------

Uh--uh-- not THIS girl

I won't be second place !

Hi Gail,
Very cool lyrics,and just an awesome motto to live by,..........never settle for second place in your love life....wish I'd learned that lesson many years back...I wouldnt feel like such a fool now...Good job on this one gail...do you already have a melody in mind?
Michelle

Hey Michelle,

Thanks for taking a look at this...and I'm glad you like it.
Yes, that is one place you should NEVER take second place.....
your love life!!

Yes, I do have a melody for this one.....and I hope to do a work tape of it soon.

Gail

An Absolutely awesome lyric, Gail....I can totally hear this one. Flows right off the tongue sorta nice-like. I'd love to hear this one when it gets musified. Too darn many great lines there to even mention. But did I mention that I'm lovin' it?

Great piece of country writing...

Jan

I LOVED IT!!!!

Wish I could say something clever and witty and bring about an "a-ha" moment with my insight and intelligence for how to make it better...but as it stands right now, this one was a fun read!

Now take it to the next level...

Hi Gail


This is clean tight writing with attitude. Best wishes for a demo and pitching. jm

Hey there Jan,

Thanks so much for taking a look at this, and thanks too for all the kind comments. I am so glad you like it! I appreciate your input more than you know.

Gail

LOL, nicely done. This will be fun set to music. Only nit I can find is: when a second
Is as good or better than the first. Maybe: when second
Is as good or better than first.

Good luck to you.

Gail,
that is simply very very very well done.

have fun,
john

Hi Gail,

This is a really fun and clever lyric! I had a good time just reading it, no wonder how great this will be when it comes to music.

This is inspired solid writing, great structure, clever, hooky, commercially viable, makes a singer look good. It just has it all!

I wish you the best of luck with this, Gail!

Hi there Terrill!

So very nice to "meet" you!!

Thanks so much for taking a look at my lyric........and thank you too for the compliments. I am so glad that you like it.

Yes, I do plan to get a demo of this one....I wanted to try it out here first and see what everyone thought. So far.....so good!

I do appreciate you taking the time to look and give me your opinion.

Kind wishes,
Gail

Hi there Joice,

Thanks so much for looking at this lyric, and for your comments.
I am so glad you liked it, and I truly appreciate your kind wishes.

Wishing you the best,
Gail

Hi Jean,

Thanks so much for taking a look at this lyric and for your comments. I'm glad you like it.

Yes, you are absolutely right! It does read better by taking out those 2 words...{"a" and "the"}. Thanks Jean for noticing. I do appreciate that. I went over and edited them out.

Kind wishes,
Gail

A very nice write, Gail. Flows really well and has lots of great imagery. A lyric that, I'm sure, any good, sassy country vocalist would like to sing. Above all, the 'character' is sympathetic.

Donna

gail,
enjoyed this...girl with attitude songs are popular, Miranda Lambert comes to mind, Gretchen Wilson could do it, Dolly and Reba are good choices as well...good luck puttin' it all together...moker

Hey there John,

Hope this finds you well. Thank you so much for taking a look at this lyric. Thanks for the compliment. I am glad you like it.

Take care.

Gail

Hi Gail,

This is well-written and a lot of fun! I can definitely see a country gal singing this with attitude. Good, positive vibe to it.

I like the idea of it all….and look forward to hearing the music for it!

Kristi

Hi there Magne,

Thank you for coming by and taking a look at my lyric. I am so glad that you like it. I wanted to post it, to get everyone's opinion....and it seems like everyone likes it...so now it's demo time, and then I'll just keep my fingers crossed {lol}!!

Thanks again Magne.

Kind wishes,
Gail

Hi there Donna,

Thanks so much for taking a look at my lyric. I'm glad that you like it, and I appreciate all of your very nice compliments.

Wishing you all the best in your lovely corner of the world.

Gail

Hey there Moker,

Thanks for taking a look at this lyric. I hadn't thought about Miranda Lambert.....hmmm, that's gives me someone else to consider. Great idea. Some feisty little singer might want to have a go at it!!!

Take care and best of luck to you on all of your songs too.

Gail

Gail good luck with it, my idea of a feisty young gal singer is named Ashton Delilah Shepherd, you go listen to some of her stuff you'll see why

Hi Kristi,

Thanks for taking a look at my lyric,and for your kind comments. I'm really glad you liked it! Now....to find the gal with the right "attitude" to sing it! lol!

Best wishes to you,
Gail

Hey Gail...very nice work here...cut ready IMHO...can totally hear a Jory/Rory kinda thing here

Larry

Thanks so much Gary....for the kind wishes.....and for all of your helpful suggestions. I truly appreciate them.

Yes, I totally agree....Ashton is truly dynamite!!

Gail

Hey there Larry,

Thanks so much for taking a look at my lyric. I'm really glad that you like it. So....you think it's ready to be cut huh?!!
Well....from your lips to the publishers ears!!!! LOL !!

Thanks Larry.

Gail

Gail,
just had to come see this again. So well done. I hope we get to hear it someday.

have fun,
John

Hi Gail

This Aussie girl reckons this song of yours is fantastic, well written, can't wait to hear it. Good luck.

Michele

HiDee Mz Gail, & CONGRATS on a Really FINE Fun SONG here!

Good Hook, GREAT 'Tude, Fine Morality. Makes the Singer look VERY Good...& Sings really Smoothly in my Head as I read-along.

I even found that "Uh-Huh..Oh No" to be pretty Catchy! ;-)>
(Maybe Uh-UH..Oh No" would be even-catchier?)

That's my one-&-only K-O-S-er today. Otherwise, "KUDOS" for a really Well-Penned bitta Early-Warning-Song that's quite Hit-Worthy!

Good Luck with a Good'n', M'LadyChum!
Big Hugs,
Stan

Hi there John,

Thanks for coming over and having a look at my lyric again! I'm really so glad you like it.

Yes, when I get a pro demo done, I'll be sure to post it. I have several to do, so it may be awhile.

Thanks again John.

Gail

Hi there Michele,

How are you? Did you ever get finished with your packing?

Thanks so much for taking a look at my lyric....I am so glad that you like it.

Take care.

Kind wishes,
Gail

Hi there Stan,

I appreciate you taking a look at my lyric, and I am so glad that you like it. Thank you for the compliments. Thanks also for noticing the typo!!! Lol !! That Uh-huh....was suppose to be uh-uh...yep, that little "h" was sorta makin' it send out a mixed message!!! Sorta like..oh yeah..oh NO!! Thanks for catching that one for me! I truly do appreciate it. {I'll go over and correct that!} You have very keen eyes.

Real big hugs to you,
Gail

Hi Gail,

This is a really fine lyric. Just love it.

Well done

Cheers

Alan

Hi Gail,

Just dropping by to say I love this, and it does sing like Dolly over here.

I have nothing in the way of nits. The singer loves her man (You're my baby so you know/That you can slide past second base) but has put her foot down firmly, and doesn't waste a word here. I know she's serious in how well she's focused on making her point--all the various examples, even Grandma's biscuits, help her make her compelling and lyrical argument.

Nice work!

Mike

Hi there Alan!

Well thank you! I am so glad you love this lyric! I do appreciate you looking at it and I appreciate your kind comments.

Gail

Hi there Mike,

Thank you so much for dropping by...and for such very nice comments! I am so glad that you like this lyric.

I must tell you....in the short time that I have been here....I have noticed that you are so good about giving others such in-depth and helpful critiques! Anyone reading your critiques definitely walks away a little more "musically knowledgeable."

You are a very talented guy....and a wonderful and very helpful addition to the JPF family.

Thanks Mike.

Kind wishes,
Gail

I really enjoyed these lyrics, hey read very smooth. I think the topic is also handled well.
Nice job.
Skip

Hi there Skip,

I see that you are new to JPF.....well....."Welcome"! We're glad to have you. I know you are going to love it here! I am a relative newcomer, and I have found this place to be so warm and welcoming. It's unbelievable the wealth of information!

Thanks so much for taking a look at this lyric of mine. I am so glad that you like it....I appreciate your nice comments.

If you have any questions, or if I can help in any way...just let me know.

Kind wishes,
Gail