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This song is dedicated to the friends and family of Jay Tee, who was tragiacally taken from this world on Sept. 23, 2008. RIP Jesus Tornero(9/29/91 - 9/22/08)....
"In the Blink of An Eye"
VERSE 1 How is it that life can be so unfair? Those two boys that took you didn't even care. You had such a bright future ahead of you; There were so many things you had yet to do. As we stand here and mourn your sudden demise, We just keep hoping that this is a lie.
CHORUS You were still so young Life had barely begun Now you look down from above As we send you our love You never really know When someone will go In the blink of an eye We have to say goodbye
VERSE 2 As we find ouselves wiping away our tears, We now realize one of our biggest fears; That our world is full of too much hate and crime, And not enough criminals are doing time. We're not going to let those boys get away; They will not walk free for another day!
CHORUS You were still so young Life had barely begun Now you look down from above As we send yu our love You never really know When someon will go In the blink of an eye We have to say goodbye
OUTRO Now you're gone, there's nothing we can do But hope that this song reaches up to you. We're going to miss your wonderful smile, The pain of your death will last for a while.
(c) Kassie Rogers 2008 All rights reserved.
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great one...really emotional piece...!!
haven't got much time to write..
i really liked it..!!
~Neo~
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Neo-- Thank you your kind words put a smile on my face...i didn't personally know this guy, but al lot of my coworkers did....and it's just so sad to hear that a good kid's life was ended...and all that over a cell phone and $10...geeez...what is the world coming to? Everyone in my city have been all sad and talking about this all week....and this lyric just came out when I was trying to fall asleep last night...Thank you again Neo, and have a wonderful day ~~Kassie~~
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Hey Kassie, This is a touching story. If you were going to pitch this commercially, you might go through and find repeated words or phrases, in the verses, V1 "wipe tears", V2 "wiping tears"(which was all I saw, btw) Very nicely done...
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Caroline-- Thank you for the kind words...unfortunately this is a true story. It's so sad to see what's happening to our world...I couldn't believe it when I heard about this. I didn't even know the poor kid but it even made me cry a little. How would it sound if I changed the line in verse one to "As we stand here and mourn your sudden demise"?? his story inspired me to write about it though. Thank you again for your kind words Have a wonderful day ~~Kassie~~
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