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Would you get me a beer Lyrics written by Aaron Authier Copyright 2008 Country - Female
Remember when you'd talk to me And when you'd take long walks with me Were you only leading me on? Now all you say Is dear Would you get me a beer? No I won't 'cause
What If I drank all day And just layed right here If this was as good as I got Would you get me a beer?
No more home cooked dinners Or body heat in the cold winters You can't have what a loving man deserves What I want Is pretty clear And It ain't you saying Would you get me a beer
Cause what If I drank all day And just layed right here If this was as good as I got Would you get me a beer?
Baby If you don't care They why the hell should I So I'll say this one last time
What If I drank all day And just layed right here If this was as good as I got Would you get me a beer?
Here you can have your beer I am out of here
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Sounds good--with two exceptions.
I think it should be "lay" or "laid" not "layed." I think "I'm out of here," would sound better than "I am out of here."
"No man but a blockhead ever wrote except for money." Johnson.
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Hey Airun
I enjoy the idea your putting across. However I think there are plenty of women who do exactly that. While I am all for girl power I am not sure this one connects as well. However that may just be me. I thought also she seemed rather harsh. I am sure he does more than lie around all day. At least I would hope he does lol. At any rate only my opinion keep or sweep. Derek
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Shoot Im sorry guys I wasn't aware anyone posted and I've been on the midnights shift haven't had much time lately Thanks for commenting Lee and Derek, I think It should be laid too and I'm out of here, thanks for the good ideas man Hey Derek I have to agree with you, it needs more emotion and story to it, I also need images rather than telling it I first had the hook "
If this Is as good as you get then get me a beer (get me a beer) Being the hook name, but it evolved into the chorus of this song Which both are still work in progress', I'll post the re write when it is done but I appreciate every critique / comments Even if they are late
Take care guys
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