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Think moderately steady rhythm, maybe a little to the swing side, but not too much. Probably closest to J Buffett. Still in rough draft form. I'll try to record something this weekend and post early next week to help with critiques.

Thanks in advance.

Kelly

VERSE
Babe, the weatherman says
That it's gonna be hot on the coast.
And you've been working your fingers
Down to the bone.

Whatd'ya say, we just pack light
And cruise on down to the Gulf tonight
And wake up to the sun and the waves
And a brand new day? (with just...)

CHORUS
You and me
Hitting the beach.
Shaking off the troubles
We've collected all week.
Reconnecting two hearts
As the day goes on.
You look good
And I feel fine.
Break out the lotion
And a bottle of wine
Easy come,
Easy go,
I'm easy gone.

VERSE
Babe, they're saying
It's gonna be raining
At home for the week.
I'm thinking
We ought to be drinking in style.

Flip flops, tank tops
Some ice cold pop tops
We should be where the fun doesn't stop
For a day, for a week, for while. (with just...)

CHORUS

BRIDGE
Think, if you will, of the golden sunrise
The breeze over the bay
Now just imagine no clouds in that blue sky
As we chill away for a long, slow day.

CHORUS

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Kelly,

one suggestion if you change the lst line of the chorus to "So easy gone" then it includes the both people in the song.

one other one "Losing the troubles" instead of "shaking off the troubles".

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Nicely done Kelly,

I think your JB comparison is an apt one....It's a neat demo, and other than those minor lyric tweaks suggested in the previous pst, I wouldn't change anything. Nicely done. Good luck with your song.

Jeremy


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Looks pretty good Kelly,
I first thought the rhyming was a bit uneven but I can see where the singer could probably make it sound all right "I'm Easy Gone" is a good title. Maybe could even drop "I'm".
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Kelly,

I'm in agreement with Wy and Zanna that the "I'm easy gone" line is a bit of a snag. But the demo pulls it off and that's half the battle won.

Cheers,
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Radio should love this one at 3:34. Real summer season appeal. Easy to hear, singing along by the 2nd chorus, good hook factor.


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Kelly,

Nicely done, I love the song.

Gets me tapping my toes and looking for my lawn chair and a cold beer at the same time.

A very relaxing sound.

Peace,

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Nice job Kelly,

Can't say anything to help. I like the sound of it. Maybe could be just a slight bit more uptempo but other than that it sounds like a good one for Mr. Kenny Chesney. My son knows him, but I don't so don't really have an "in" for you there. It's a nice one though. Felt myself right at the scene.

sincerely,

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sorry got dile up,did not listen to demo,just looking at lyrics,,i like the second half of each verse,,first half of first verse,,is a little vague,,also the first half of second verse,,is still talking about the weather at home,,,
i like the title you and me for the song,with the direction you're going,,anyway i scribbled a chorus down,,
you and me hand in hand
you and me toes in the sand
then you look at me like you did the night
we first made love by the candle light
the whole world melted away
and all we could see was you and me

seem like you and me is the central theme of your song.
just my thoughts,,this one is worth working on.


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