That line you ain't getting is simply me saying that even even if I suddenly break into a British accent, or start imitating Cookie Monster, it's all a part of who I am ("still me inside"), though more often than not, there's no acting...real deal.
I liked this one. I've said it before, but I like your voice too. Have you looked into ways to get yourself some backing - something like band in a box?
Only line that stuck in my craw was "Sgt Pepper's boat". I'm sure most wouldn't be bothered by it. To me, it was Lucy's boat - not sure Sgt. Pepper had one. But most probably wouldn't get the reference
Yo Ben, Just like to add my enthusiasm to the lot. Nice goi'n bud , tried to listen to the worktape and Scotty yer breakin' up...it might just be the computer I'm using , but ; heard enouigh to recognize your sangin'. Pete
Here we are wracking our brains today to write lyrics that rhyme and if we succeed, they'll end up in time as tommorrow's cliche's... Pete
Hey there my friend Ben Burton!! How are you!?!?!/ Haven't listened to you sing in quite a while ... comin' along just fine. This is good .. Only thing - It takes two to tango ... seems to be hanging there because the dance reference comes out of nowhere and is not connected to anything ... maybe if the next line tells her to hold on tight ... you will tie in the dancing reference and connet the thought Just my humble opinion Ben!! Joanne
Randy & Scott picked up the 2 Parts that felt nittable as I read.
I'll expand on Randy's crit, to add that "Pipeline" to my mind didn't elicit the Most "Romantic" of Images... It kinda felt like a Reverse Drain..alas!
"Are STILL EXPANDING in my mind" I'd sug...(K-O-S)
Dunno if Chicks enjoyed Singer's Bragadoccio in V1, either..Lordy, that Singer's SURE Cocksure..ain't he? ;-)> "I'll bet you'll love me anyways" (K-O-S) might make him a wee bit more-loveable?
Chorus I DID find Quite Likeable..Very-Reassuring to the Fairer Ones..JMO. Sounds like Quite-a-Guy there, "KUDOS!"
Maybe change "And" to "Since" in Chorus 2's Opening Line. "And" is frankly a Dull, kinda Throwaway-Word as a Lead-In...(JMO, Natch!)
"Touching toast"... Fine Alliteration..but DOES elicit a Snicker from my Dirty Ol' Man's Mind. The "Sgt Pepper" reference DOES kinda "Date" this piece..(It felt "Timeless" up 'til Then.) This Verse ain't yer Strongest, JMO, Maybe take her up the Mississipi on a Paddlewheel Boat..that'd be Romantic..& "Today" enough..to draw in Younger Listeners.
All (K-O-S) Stuff, Amigo! Overall, an Enjoyable, Cocky-Kinda-Ride!
Hey Ben Burton, I haven't been able to play anything so I didn't try to listen. Looks like a good ,'pert near unique slant--hook. I mostly just looked at the nits some others thought were there Since there's only the one reference to the dance, maybe a possibility of something in V 1, such as---
You think I'm crazy, maybe you're right But listen what I got to say Takes two to tango, so try as you might (YOU'll BE MY PARTNER ANYWAY)
As far as the pipeline, nother poss--
Some of it's acting, most of it's real But every bit is me inside All the emotions that you can feel (SEEK AND YOU'LL FIND HERE IN MY MIND)
Overall, I like it. All the good people above have hit my suggestions. I think tying into the tango line, with another dance line, would work very well. I also agree with the pipeline and Sgt Pepper suggestions. There are plenty of ways to fix both. Again, I like this one. Good luck with it.
Have a goodun,
John W. Selleck BMI Songwriter A day without learning is a day lost forever.