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by Fdemetrio - 04/23/24 12:11 AM
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Joined: May 2007
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Hey - hi all I just discovered this site thanks to my good friend Dan "Third Rate Poet" and Dan Monk (ex of Freedom Exchange) - nice to be back on a forum with those guys for sure Thought I'd get some opinions on this one - it kinda grew on me Thanx for lisnin Robby http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=113551&songID=5054435Around HereTheres a sadness around you today The Black Dog is on your trail We gotta keep him at bay Around Here We all need good memories to keep We dont want bad dreams when we sleep But theres plenty to make you weep Around Here The stars will always guide us Theres no need to be nervous We all got a purpose Around Here High ideals hide dirty work
Ugliness in beauty lurks
There’s a heart of immense darkness
Around Here The darkness at the centre of the empire The politicians are all walkin’ the wire Theres too many liars Around Here Details are still emerging The planets are converging But all the signs are disturbing Around Here I got a ruthless criminal mind
Hidden behind these eyes of mine
I’m a fierce killer with eyes like iceI was talking to Dr Death We were discussing my last breath He said I got a few years yet Around Here He said “we still own your bones You are gonna die all alone You’re too well known Around Here” You got a grim fate in China
A doomed ocean liner
Is out of control heading my way
And Im by the beach in Ty-PhaiHigh moon drives me crazy My timetable delays me Nobody even pays me Around Here So I completed a questionnaire Discovered I should be a millionaire But nobody even cares Around Here So Im on the run and always high
Like a night shadow across the sky
But darkness is clouding my blue eyes
My heart is beating without a sound
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Hi and welcome to JPF! I'm in Seattle. I see you're in the UK. I love it that we can communicate all across the world this way.
I like the guitar work and rhythm here. And the sax coming in, in the middle, is a nice solo too. Nice playing, and it suits the song well.
The lyrics are different in the recording from what you posted here--any reason? It's interesting, anyway. I like the verse about Dr. Death and "a few years yet." Funny.
Nice to meet you.
BTW what are your goals for your music and where are you headed?
Thanks!
Linda
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Hi Robby! I love the sax - it really complements the song. I guess it has a quality which works well as contrast to your voice. Both are very 'human', and very fluid. "So I completed a questionnaire Discovered I should be a millionaire" I like that too!  The 'black dog' is a great metaphor for depression - never heard of that till you told me about it! But this song is full of great metaphor and allusions. I love the way you mix and merge these things and make them your own. It's a real gift - it just paints a picture beyond the literary. Love the way you've mixed the 'mystical' with the reality. Excellent lyric all round. Dan
Last edited by ThirdRatePoet; 05/05/07 06:59 PM.
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Hey Thinman, great song. Is this a live performance? It sounds great, your guitar playing is better than ever and the sax is perfect. It sounds like Bruce and Mark Knopfler got together - I like it. ![[Linked Image]](http://www.jpfolks.com/forum/images/icons/default/thumbs_up.gif) I think this is my favorite song by you now, even ahead of 'Lists of Love'.
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thinman....nice arrangement....the sax was a well needed break....for a long song.....it did keep my interest....a modern folk song...well done....vocal and guitar very nice....Bob
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Hey ThinMan,
Nice to meet you via this board. New poster here. Interesting to hear someone saying "fixin' to" in the UK. Thought that was a Southern thing here.
Loved the lyrics. Some very nice imagery there. And some truth, also. Also like your spare and rythmic use of guitar. I tend to overstrum my way through a song. The mark of a beginner, I guess. I must say, though, for me there was a disconnect between the lyrics and the feel of the song. It almost sounded cheerful. Maybe you were going for a cavalier delivery of all the doom and gloom. Or maybe I didn't get it. Anyway, enjoyed listening to you. Well done.
Feel free to listen to my song Destiny and give me some honest feedback.
Talking about music is like dancing about architechture-Steve Martin
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