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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Hi folks Just uploaded this new tune 'Coffee House' to ezFolk - Coffee House (Dan Tindall - 2007) Equals sharing smoke and dirty laughing banter A hatchet-faced mother berates her hatchet-faced son Lovers kiss, girls chatter And a guy sits doing nothing As the last of the mohicans Batters his bagel to death And softly goes the coffee Lightly goes the sugar Sweetly goes the morning As I slide beneath my chair Rightly superstitious, all the hippies look for omens But the only sign of life it seems, is the rattle of a car Coppers stare like cobras At old ladies dropping litter Whilst criminals in coupes Pay themselves a bonus And somewhere in a forest A tree has gently fallen On the heads of those who are certain That it never made a sound And tell me if you're happy Tell me if you're lonely But leave me blissfully uncertain If you're hanging on a wire http://ezfolk.com/audio/play.php?mode=song_lofi&band_id=665&song_id=9228http://ezfolk.com/audio/play.php?mode=song_hifi&band_id=665&song_id=9228if you'd like to take a listen, I'd be delighted! Dan
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Hey there, TRP! Great to see you again. I just "bumped into" Dan Monk earlier today. The opening sounds a little like "The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy" theme. Do you know it? Love the "falling tree" allusion. Somehow I expected the thing to turn gentle when you hit the lines about the coffee. Instead, it does it instrumentally. Just wondered what the intention was there. Great to be hearing your 12-string again. - James
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Hey there, TRP! Great to see you again. I just "bumped into" Dan Monk earlier today. The opening sounds a little like "The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy" theme. Do you know it? Love the "falling tree" allusion. Somehow I expected the thing to turn gentle when you hit the lines about the coffee. Instead, it does it instrumentally. Just wondered what the intention was there. Great to be hearing your 12-string again. - James Hi James It's quite the FE reunion! Lovely to hear from again It does have a Hitch-Hiker's twang to it - cool! One of my fave radio shows ever. I think my intention was to create a sort of pause in the internal monologue. The song grew out of a few lines scribbled down whilst sitting drinking a coffee, and just staring about me. Maybe I'm trying to be too clever! Cheers Dan
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Hey Dan: Love the song. Especially the hatchet faced line and the tree part I'm not listening on good speakers but the recording quality didn't seem as high as some of your other recent ones. Vocals didn't seem as crisp. I'll play it again on Friday on a different set of speakers. Might be at my end... See ya, Scott
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Hi Dan..
I think Scott will change his tune if he listened with headphones. Sounds real crisp to me. I'm not sure if the lyrics got off track a bit in the second verse, but cryptic is good sometimes. Love the guitar sound. Sounds like a song that would be sung over the video of a deranged carnival of freaks.
Good job.
Rick
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Dan,
Tiz just wonderful! Love everything about it...especially the lyrics and the great guitar dynamics!
tom
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I love the guitar. Probably my biggest influence is Jimmy Page's acoustic work, and it sounds like you have similar influences. I suspected you actually are going to the same sources as him, rather than just stealing from him as I do. I'd love to hear who you listen to cause I'm always in the market for that sound. The lyrics and the guitar work are great. The later verses are a little less focused on the scene, which still works ok for me. The biggest thing I'd work on is melody and phrasing. You're singing right on top of your guitar part rather than a counter or a contrast, especially in the verse. It's always hard to do a really active guitar part and sing, but even having your vocal do some sixteenths or syncopation over the more straight eighths of the guitar would help. Overall, I'm going to steal your guitar if you come my way. Jay
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Hi Dan:
Ooops...
I played the lo-fi version by mistake - sorry 'bout that....
I had no idea there was so much difference in sound quality...
Hi-fi version sounds as good as your others......which is to say great....
Scott
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Hi Dan:
Ooops...
I played the lo-fi version by mistake - sorry 'bout that....
I had no idea there was so much difference in sound quality...
Hi-fi version sounds as good as your others......which is to say great....
Scott Hi Scott The lo-fi version on ezFolk can be a bit rough sometimes! Thanks for having a listen - glad you enjoyed the lyrics! Dan
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Sounds like a song that would be sung over the video of a deranged carnival of freaks. I think that might be one of the best comments I've ever read...about anything, not just one of my songs! Dan
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Dan,
Tiz just wonderful! Love everything about it...especially the lyrics and the great guitar dynamics!
tom Thanks Tom - glad you liked it - many thanks for taking a listen Dan
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I love the guitar. Probably my biggest influence is Jimmy Page's acoustic work, and it sounds like you have similar influences. I suspected you actually are going to the same sources as him, rather than just stealing from him as I do. I'd love to hear who you listen to cause I'm always in the market for that sound. The lyrics and the guitar work are great. The later verses are a little less focused on the scene, which still works ok for me. The biggest thing I'd work on is melody and phrasing. You're singing right on top of your guitar part rather than a counter or a contrast, especially in the verse. It's always hard to do a really active guitar part and sing, but even having your vocal do some sixteenths or syncopation over the more straight eighths of the guitar would help. Overall, I'm going to steal your guitar if you come my way. Jay Hi Jay I am a fan of Jimmy Page's acoustic stuff - certainly he was one of those players who led me to wonder where that sort of music comes from (I always have time for Keith Richards for the same reason). So blues and folk players (beginning with all the usual suspects really - Robert Johnson, Leadbelly, Blind Willie McTell, Doc Watson - and then just listening to whatever seemed quirky, interesting, or accomplished, and trying to glean something from it, without ever really being good enough to copy any of it!) were what I went looking for, because I liked the sound. At the same time, I've always been a fan of traditional folk music - again because I like the sound, although I'm not much use at playing it. But stuff like the Dubliners, Planxty and the Bothy Band were (and still are) an influence in the sense that I like their style! That sounds like a lot of great influences for my rather basic music! I think you have a point about the active guitar part - I think the way I've done it is probably something I've picked up from Irish or British folk tunes. Something to consider for another time, though - thanks! As for melody - if I was a better singer, I'd sing better! cheers Dan
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As for melody - if I was a better singer, I'd sing better! cheers Dan been that done there. Great stuff Dan, really liked the tree allusion.
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Hi Dan! This is great stuff! Love the guitar work too. I also listened to the lo-fi by accident first--whoops! Hi-fi is much better... ahh. Lyrically... there is a lot of neat stuff going on here. My thoughts: I WANTED to hear the "Softly goes the coffee" stanza as a repeating chorus. (sniffle!) If it was my song (and I know, it's not...) I would drop the last verse/stanza and replace it with the "softly goes the coffee" again to tie it all back together and close out with the coffee house imagery again. There isn't anything *wrong* with the last stanza, either... I just like all the other stuff going on so much better. You're a very, very good lyric writer, IMHO. I look forward to seeing your name on the board! Linda
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As for melody - if I was a better singer, I'd sing better! cheers Dan been that done there. Great stuff Dan, really liked the tree allusion. thanks Dan!
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Hi Dan! This is great stuff! Love the guitar work too. I also listened to the lo-fi by accident first--whoops! Hi-fi is much better... ahh. Lyrically... there is a lot of neat stuff going on here. My thoughts: I WANTED to hear the "Softly goes the coffee" stanza as a repeating chorus. (sniffle!) If it was my song (and I know, it's not...) I would drop the last verse/stanza and replace it with the "softly goes the coffee" again to tie it all back together and close out with the coffee house imagery again. There isn't anything *wrong* with the last stanza, either... I just like all the other stuff going on so much better. You're a very, very good lyric writer, IMHO. I look forward to seeing your name on the board! Linda You're very kind You're quite right, this song could be re-written in a more traditional song format. I guess I tend to write quickly, and then move on to something else. Lack of discipline has always been a failing of mine! Glad you enjoyed it Dan
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Discipline, schmisipline. What's that for? LOL Just don't be afraid to revise revise revise. You can save an original copy if you go too far astray and ruin it. See you around! Linda
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Yo Danny Boy
This one is a winner - judging by the length of the forum
Well - you know I'm gonna like it - I do - but I particularly like the bit before "rightly superstitious............."
You need more gigs in Newcastle
Robby
My heart is beating without a sound
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Discipline, schmisipline. What's that for? Absolutely! Dan
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Yo Danny Boy
This one is a winner - judging by the length of the forum
Well - you know I'm gonna like it - I do - but I particularly like the bit before "rightly superstitious............."
You need more gigs in Newcastle
Robby Hi Robby I guess it is a song of two halves! I think you might be right about Newcastle.... Dan
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