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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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Highway Ghosts
Highway Straightaway 'til sunset Stretching on coast to coast Take me where my future lies Take me back to where my past resides Will you wait with open arms Knowing I hurt you But never meant you any harm Spending my life chasing highway ghosts
Darkness Descending like a veil Surrounds the ones you love the most They wait for you to come around They wait for that old familiar sound Excuses falling like the rain Promises follow Do you believe me when I say There will be no more highway ghosts
Redemption comes to those who wait If they can find a road that's straight
Highway Leading me on 'til dawn The hours pass I'm getting close Can we reclaim what I have tossed Can we save a soul that has been lost I find the door wide open Voice from the shadows Says you'll give me one last chance To chase away those highway ghosts
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Hello Tom, Nice to meet ya. A little different & I like it, especially this..... Redemption comes to those who wait If they can find a road that's straight Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewartmusic.htm
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Welcome aboard Tom.
Altogether pretty credible work. I like the Pattern in take me...they wait...can we.... that I presume is also an important "musical" highlight
One suggestion... "Knowing I hurt you" is a straight ahead statement that "tells", whereas this line is ripe for a "show us"... what was it that hurt her??
I trust we'll see more.
Ciao
If writing ever becomes work I think I'm going to have to stop
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Thanks Calvin & John.
John, I guess that might be a musical highlight, if it ever gets music! I work the lyric side of things, maybe someone will come along with music.
As far as the tell me/show me aspect, I saw that line as a set-up for the next two lines which better explain the story. Maybe not?
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