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“MOMMA’S STEPPIN’ OUT TONIGHT” (Female Country)

(C) 2002 by W.L. “Bill” Cooper

Edited version, may be a few meter bumps but real close to being music ready.
Looking for a composer. Thanks for all the feedback

V-1
Jump up every mornin’
get the kids all off to school
Eight hours waitin’ tables
workin’ like a mule.
Cook and do the dishes
then it’s time for PTA.
Another week without a break
I’ll be turnin’ old and gray

(bridge 1)
Wont you be my cowboy .. baby
put your fishin’ gear away.
Stay at home and help your... lady
then we’ll go to town and play.

(Chorus)
MOMMA’S STEPPIN” OUT TONIGHT
to see those neon lights.
Twist and shout.'til the lights go out.
See what fun is all about
Goin’ to be a sight,
might even get a little tight.
May look a fool but thats alright.
MOMMA’S STEPPIN” OUT TONIGHT

V-2
Little Amy’s shoe is missing
I couldn’t find but one
The fridgerator’s dirty and
the dishes ain’t been done.
The sun will rise tomorrow
if you help out with this mess.
Got’a do my hair, run to town
to buy a brand new dress.

(Chorus)
MOMMA’S STEPPIN” OUT TONIGHT
to see those neon lights.
Twist and shout.'til the lights go out.
See what fun is all about
Goin’ to be a sight,
might even get a little tight.
May look a fool but thats alright.
MOMMA’S STEPPIN” OUT TONIGHT

(bridge 2)
I hope your good and ready ..baby
do you want to stay and play.
‘Cause this ain’t no case of.. maybe
I’m goin’ no matter what you say.

(Chorus)
MOMMA’S STEPPIN” OUT TONIGHT
to see those neon lights.
Twist and shout.'til the lights go out.
See what fun is all about
Goin’ to be a sight,
might even get a little tight.
May look a fool but thats alright.
MOMMA’S STEPPIN” OUT TONIGHT

[This message has been edited by Lost (edited 09-23-2002).]


[This message has been edited by Lost (edited 09-23-2002).]

Gotta like this. So true about the "female" role. Family organization is a tough role so yeah, let Momma step out tonight.

A couple of bumpies IMO but its ready for music, at whiuh point you can iron out the wrinkles. Definitely worth the effort.

Oh yes, I was singing this myself a lot when the kids were small. How true how true. This one works for me. Got music? Idamarie

Bill,

Looks pretty good to me too. Yeah, there`s a bump or two, but they are little ones. I`d probably drop the 3rd verse...but it works ok in there. Just a personal preference I guess. Nice job. Dano.

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Hello, Bill!

Well, what woman can pass up a song about her turn!

You could consider moving the bridge to just before V-3. Just seems that the lines about dropping the fishing gear would flow better into "Come on be my cowboy..." A small suggestion.

Appreciate the effort in this. Good luck with it.

Hi, Bill, not sure how you hear the music here, but I might be inclined to just say, "mama's steppin out" and tying that into "twist and shout" on it's own and let the rest of the lines meter differently? If you use a 3rd verse, I think it should be more in line with the first 2, just a thought. Good luck on this, Jeannette

Hi John,

Thanks for the read and kind words

Regards
Bill

Hi Idamarie,

Glad you like

No music yet If interested let me know. Not ready for music as is, may be a few days yet.

Regards
Bill

Hi Dan

Thanks for the read

Yeah I agree V-3 will most likely go.

Not all that satisfied with chorus as is.

Love the story and hook but have some work to do yet.

Regards
Bill

Hey Bill,
You've got it spot on. What are you, Women's Lib? <Big grin>
I really like the way you've got this song across. Not going to show it to MY MOMMA, though...she might get ideas.....:-)
C ya,
Pramod

Hey Bill!
I gotta agree with everybody here: it's a song about real life. And it really flows!
Good job!

Juan

It is a true song. In my brother's case he gets home from work and his wife goes right to work. Later on my brother goes back to the dairy farm. Long story made short family is not in bed till ten at night with all the traveling and the work situation. Forgot to mention they have a boy 3 and a girl one. So it really is a busy time.

okay, Bill, I'm only doing ONE post on this one! <smile> Simply put, I loved it! Way to go!

Hi Sweet song,

Yes I think it can flow better with a little less song and some rearranging.

Will edit as soon as I get time to give it a good look .

Thanks for the feedback

Regards
Bill

Hi Jeannette,

Work to do yet on this but I kinda like the Hook as is.

Thanks for the read and feedback

Regards
Bill

Hi Pramod ,

Thanks for the read and kind words.

Been updated since your read so hope you will still like.

Regards
Bill

Hi Juan,

Thanks for the read and feedback

Really appreciated.

Regards
Bill

Hi thunder_road_2051,

Thanks for the read

Yeah a lot of the couples of today can relate to this.

Where did those good old Ozzie & Harriet days go??

Regards
Bill

Good start on this one, Bill! I can relate to the message -- and no matter what anybody says -- there are plenty of hours in the day -- just too many darn things we have to do / THINK we have to do, or want to do, to try to cram into those 24 hours! Anyway, I noticed meter bumps, but you already said you will be working on them. There are a few adjectives that could be dropped that would smooth some of those bumps ("get the kids ALL off to school" - dropping all won't hurt it; "LITTLE Amy's shoe" - can drop "little" -- just those kinds of things). Anyway, just my thoughts -- good luck with it!

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Mary Lou

Hi Teri,

Thanks for looking in and do all the post you like. The big numbers look good

Glad you like.

Regards
Bill

Hi Mary Lou,

Thanks for the read and feedback

Yeah I’ll try to tighten up and smooth it out a little if I find someone interested in doing music for it.

Never finished until recorded

Regards
Bill