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“The Jukebox Keeps Crying “
A lyric looking for a composer.

(C) 2002 by W.L. “Bill” Cooper

Comments appreciated.

V-1
Lonely old figure,
in a back corner booth.
Searching the memories,
back into his youth.
Drowning his sorrows,
in a river of tears.
As long lonesome hours,
blend into lost years.


Chorus)
The juke box keeps crying,
tears falling like rain.
Love, cheating and lying,
in each songs refrain.
Lonely heart’s sighing,
in bittersweet pain.
The juke box keeps crying
down memory lane.


V-2
His love was forever,
it never grew old.
But she found another
to have and to hold.
Now he's left to wonder,
‘bout love and the truth.
Keeps feeding the juke box,
from a back corner booth.

Chorus)
The juke box keeps crying,
tears falling like rain.
Love, cheating and lying,
in each songs refrain.
Lonely heart’s sighing,
in bittersweet pain.
The juke box keeps crying
down memory lane.


(Bridge)
Soft neon rainbows,
sweet melodies.
Lonesome lost lover’s,
set all alone
Sipping their beers, (hiding their tears)?
while singing along.
Song after love song,(heart's lost forever)?
cry out endlessly.


Chorus)
The juke box keeps crying,
tears falling like rain.
Love, cheating and lying,
in each songs refrain.
Lonely heart’s sighing,
in bittersweet pain.
The juke box keeps crying
down memory lane.

Just added an Alt - Bridge hope you will comment. Thanks.

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Hi Bill!
Hope all is well!
Noticed you absence!

I like this! Well done!
If old style music was still in you would have a pretty good one! I love it; the older stuff myself. I've been hearing of late the publisher only want upbeats! Bummer! I love down and depressed! ha!

Ideas:
The "refrain" reference in the chorus sounds as thought it was added just to rhyme? I'm afraid most of your everyday listeners would not know the difference between a refrain and a chorus. Not that it matters a hell of a lot! Lol! I can't see what it adds to the song though?
Also, I wish the bridge was stronger. It seems to repeat what we have already been told?

Just some thoughts my friend. And, I've been accused of thinking way too much! Lol!

Ron

Nice lyric...don't know if you'v melodized it or not...but seemed the meter was off some...but still thought this pretty good. They keep saying they're looking only for "upbeat" stuff...I'm wondering if somebody has misinterpreted the publishers calling for "uptempo" stuff for "upbeat" stuff...whale of a difference. Seems like they still are cranking out the "crying" songs though some are trying to get the beat faster, that's what I'm noticing. Best wishes with this song.

www.mp3.com/sharon_irene_wells

Hi Bill,good to see your back,liked the story
hope all has been well.
Regards Cody

Hi Ron,

Thanks for the read. I’ve been working extra long hours lately. I am in Air Cond.
contracting and the next few months will be long hours and 7 day weeks, so my post will
be few.

This is a “keep it simple” (very simple), cry in your beer song. Maybe I can do something with the bridge but I’m not after a lot of new information. Just an image of an old guy in a back corner booth feeding the jukebox day after day, wasting his life away in morning of lost love.

Always be a market for this type of song. This one may not be good enough to make it
but sad songs will always sell. ( the good ones)

Don’t see “Refrain” as a problem, to be honest all the words in the chorus were chosen because of rhyme.

Regards
Bill

Hi Bill,
I was singing along with the lyrics,that's
how well it flowed I like this SONG alot.
Hope you put music to it.
God bless

ClaireJeanne

Billster, bill o rama...

This is my FAVORITE thing you've posted. GREAT HOOK...and for me, it flowed REALLY well. I REALLY like it...nice, nice job.

WoW!!! Bill,
Such a vividly clear picture here.
Practically sang itself to me.
Just a couple of bumps. The rhythm in the bridge seemed to fight with the words. there are musical ways around it, but at fast read, "sad song" didn't quite match up with "went wrong".
The other thing.... I kinda wanted to see in verse two:

But she found HER another

Just kinda felt right to me.


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Harriet

Hi Sharon,

Thanks for the read and comments.

“Meter” what's that? Always have a head tune as I write. It sings OK but may need a
few changes if ever put to music?

I don’t see this as “upbeat” or “uptempo”, so I may not be a demand for it, but a lot of people enjoy this type of song from time to time.

Regards
Bill

Good one Bill.

Hey, Bill, good to see you back again! Is this a rewrite? Seems like I remember this one from before -- about a guy sitting in a back corner booth lamenting love lost. Could have been a different song - sometimes when I read thru the songs, I get a visual and this kinda seemed like deja vu! Anyway, I stumbled a little with the meter of the bridge also, but don't have a fix right now. Have to get back with you when I've got the time to look at it. Liked the story.

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Mary Lou

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You got some great lines here Bill. I didn't have a problem with any of it. Was looking forward to each line.

As long lonesome hours
Blend into years

I love that. Great lyric

Vince

Hi Blakeh,

Thanks for the read and the comments. Glad you liked it.

Regards
Bill

Hi Harriet,

Thanks for the WOW and the suggestions. If I get lucky and find a composer for this
one I will make any changes he/she may need.

Regards
Bill

Hi Judy,

Thank you for the read and kind words

Regards
Bill

Hi Mary Lou,

Thanks for the read and comments. This is a rewrite, no time for anything new.

Regards
Bill

Mornin' Bill,

Nice n' tight lil lyric. No nits from me. Enjoyed the read.

dawg

Hi Vince,

Thanks for the read and kind words.

Regards
Bill

Bill, this is GREAT! Love it, really solid story throughout.

Good job

Amelia

Hi Amelia,

Thanks for looking in and the nice comments. glade you enjoyed it.

Regards
Bill

Very nice. Sometimes the country jukebox songs sound a lot alike, but this one stands apart. It reads really smoothly, so I bet the music would be an easy fit. One line nitpick: in v.2 I'd change line 5 to say "Now he's left to wonder". The bridge is the weakest part to me. It doesn't flow back into the chorus very well, and it has an odd approach. The perspective is confusing. Anyhow, besides a little reworking of the bridge, I think you're about done with this one. Good work.

Corey

Hi Dawg,

Just now realized I skipped over you in my replies. Not my intent. Always appreciate a
look and comment from you. Thanks for the kind words.

Regards
Bill

Hi Cory,

Thanks for the read and comments. Made the change you suggested.

Agree the bridge could be stronger.

No ideas now but I will keep looking.

Regards
Bill