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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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Please feel free to critique our new song called "Daydreamin'" http://www.soundclick.com/pro/?BandID=7363
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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First off, ya can never go wrong co-labing with Gerry! No nits on this one. Nice style for these lyrics.
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Tricia & Gerry, Good effort both of you! Considering the subject matter & depth of lyrics, Gerry did a fine job setting them to music. I noticed that some of the string section chordings sound like they are "crowding" the melody (a bit) being sung in a few places, but this should be easy to fix by rearranging a few of the midi notes on that track. It would also help if the lyrics could be posted here along with title headings such as Verse, Chorus, Bridge, etc. This would help folks pin-point areas for discussion and suggestion, etc. For example, around the song's mid point, it seems like a transposition or lift might help "kick off" the 2nd half of the song. (IMHO) Aside from those few suggestions, this project seems to be well on its way! ![[Linked Image]](http://www.justplainfolks.org/ubb/smile.gif) Best regards, Michael B.
There's nothing remarkable about it. All one has to do is hit the right keys at the right time and the instrument plays itself. -- Johann Sebastian Bach MichaelBorges.comLicenseQuote.com
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Tricia & Gerry-
I really like the song - the lyrics are beautiful and I like the strings. Very nice stuff here. I agree with Borges above - it would be nice to see the lyrics here to get a little more in depth.
I might consider at some point bringing some time of rhythmic drive into the piece. I understand that the "floating" feel lends itself to the daydreaming idea. But I think at some point, more rhythmic accompaniment would really move the piece along. It might be as simple as a steady fingerpicking pattern in the guitar, or I even hear something as far as a light drum kit pattern. There are lots of options.
I think the strings get a little overbearing at points too. They are a little too loud in the mix, sometimes we loose the vocal. Also, you could fix some register issues in the strings to get them out of the singer's range.
Just some detail stuff, it's a great piece!
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Hi, Guys. Thanks for the positive feedback on "Daydreamin'". Here are the lyrics. Sorry about that. I've enjoyed working with Gerry-he's very easy to work with. His tastes in music is so varied-it's interesting.
Daydreamin'
You've never kissed my lips,
You've never caressed me with your fingertips.
Like a wine tasting strong and sweet
With that warm, mellow glow running over me.
Chorus:
I'm daydreamin', just so you understand,
You're walking beside me, you're holding my hand.
More than emotion, you know the feelings are there,
But, daydreamin' just won't get us anywhere.
No, we've never made love,
And that's one thing I can't stop thinking of.
I'd try to resist, then I'd give in to you,
I couldn't hold back even if I wanted to.
Repeat Chorus
Bridge:
We've been together a thousand times in my mind.
Just one sweet kiss from your lips, then you'll know I'm not lyin'
Repeat Chorus
Lyrics by Patricia Baker©2002
Music/Vocals/Production by Gerry CooperÓ2003
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A beautiful song! Thanks for sharing it. It's all good, as they say. Mo' ------------------ http://www.mokauffey.com
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Thanks, Mo Cauffey. Appreciate the kind words. Anytime a person is lucky enough to find a great cowriter.........it's all good.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Tricia & Gerry, I love the lyrics! If I had to be picky, I'd hafta' say the string pad is a little heavy...maybe a little more dynamics? Nice. --doug ------------------ ========================= Doug P. Lamb Trip Daddy Records www.TripDaddyRecords.com=========================
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Thanks, Doug. Mercy! I feel like the fairy princess died and gone to heaven with all the nice things being said. I looooove that warm fuzzy feeling.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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