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Blown away
[verse]
There’s thunder in the distance;
A storm is on the way.
The wind has begun to blow.
Trees are starting to sway.
I hear a locomotive.
The suns’ taken refuge.
I’m huddled in the cellar,
till the train passes through.
[pre chorus]
The cellar doors tremble.
They fight to survive.
I fear some of my friends.
may not be alive.
[chorus]
All the storm has left behind
is misery and pain.
All that i hold near and dear;
forever blown away.
[verse]
Now there is only silence.
A time to shed our tears.
Our house, our car, our best friends.
They are no longer here.
The barn is in a cornfield.
A dead cows’ in a tree.
The consequence of this storm.
will forever haunt me.
[Pre chorus]
I still have the nightmares;
I hear the freight train.
I see faces of friends.
the storm stole away.
[chorus]
All the storm has left behind
is misery and pain.
All that I held near and dear;
forever blown away.
[bridge]
Beneath the debris
lay memories.
Torn to pieces by the wind.
A home and a life of innocence
that I’ll never see again.
[outro]
Forever, forever
forever blown away.
Forever, forever
forever blown away.

I enjoyed the read and the music fits nicely!

(one nit: dead cow under a toppled tree)

nope in a tree. highlights the power of a tornado

Hey Carroll,

Goodness. I hope this isn't a true story for you or yours.

The lyrics are simple and easy. I like your choice of music style and vocal.

Peace,

Dave

My favorite lines in the lyric are;

"A home and a life of innocence
that I’ll never see again".

Such a cool story of I would put it as a love song for I felt emotions listening. Nice story, Nice song.

Irwin

This is a beautifully crafted song that really hits deep — emotionally powerful and highly evocative. The imagery throughout is vivid and haunting, immediately pulling the listener into the aftermath of a devastating storm. Lines like "The barn is in a cornfield, a dead cow’s in a tree" are so stark and visual that they leave a lasting imprint, which is a hallmark of great songwriting.

Stylistically, there’s a strong resemblance to the storytelling sensibility of the band Heart, especially in the way you blend natural forces with raw human emotion. Much like Heart's iconic ballads ("Dog and Butterfly," "These Dreams"), this lyric paints both an external and internal landscape — the literal destruction outside mirrors the emotional devastation within. Your use of a pre-chorus to heighten the tension before the release of the chorus is especially effective and very much in line with the dynamic rise-and-fall structure Heart often used to maximize emotional impact.

The chorus is a true anchor — simple yet deeply resonant — and the repeated phrase "forever blown away" in the outro leaves the listener with a strong emotional echo. I also appreciate the consistent tone and atmosphere you maintained throughout; it gives the piece a powerful cohesiveness.

Overall, I found it to be heartfelt, and cinematic.