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ICE
by JAPOV - 01/24/26 04:49 PM
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WHEN?
by JAPOV - 01/20/26 03:26 PM
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Plazmatic
by Gary E. Andrews - 01/19/26 01:17 AM
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SXSW
by Gary E. Andrews - 01/18/26 12:08 AM
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New demo: https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14897073Drivin’ home from work
Watchin’ twilight fade to black
The end of one more day
I know I’ll never get back
Gonna meet the boys
Down at Danny’s Iron Grid
Where we’ll bitch ‘bout the job
Just the way my old man did
Chorus:
This country ain‘t no place for a workin’ man
It broke the promise of the Promised Land
We watched our dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise
Storefronts boarded up
Lookin’ close to a ghost town
While the county courthouse
Flies Old Glory upside down
Chorus:
Folks try’n to make it in these times so lean
Prayin’ hard not to lose all their ways and means
Watchin’ their dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise
Bridge:
My collar’s blue
And my blood is red
I raise a shot glass full of hope
To better days ahead
Chorus:
Cos this country ain‘t no place for a workin’ man
It broke the promise of the Promised Land
We watched our dreams sail out of sight
Stranded on the shores of the lost side of Paradise
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Well... The good news is, you can't have one without the other. Those who make "promises" rarely do the work themselves lol 
DON'T WASTE YOUR TIME HERE... CANCEL CULTURE IS ALIVE AND WELL @JPF!
YOU'LL NEVER KNOW WHAT'S ALREADY BEEN DELETED...
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I'm sure the good ole boys can relate , Great hook man
We’re all built from the same dust and dreams,
Different roads, but the same means.
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Thanks, Ben. Appreciate your taking the time to check it out.
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Good song with a message that a lot of folks can relate to. Love that guitar. A couple of suggestions.
I think it would be nice to repeat he last line of the chorus each time, as you do the last time, but the first time finishing on the same note as the previous line. Nothing wrong with it as it is.
There's little bit of a clash between these lines...
Where we’ll bitch ‘bout the job
Just the way my old man did
....suggesting that nothing has changed, and the message that seems to come through in the rest of the song that things have got worse.
Very minor suggestions, probably because I always like to suggest something LOL. It's really good as it is.
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Lyrically has Springsteen all over it.
Musically sounds like AI. If it's not, no I don't apologize cause it doesn't matter.
Pretty good tune, needs a flashier hook cause it's trying to be a pop song, country pop.
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Thanks, Gavin for checking this out Very much appreciated.
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I wrote the lyrics so nothing could make me happier than to have them considered Springsteenesque. The music was written by my co-writer and demo producer Gerry Peters working out of Nashville.
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