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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 02/05/25 07:43 AM
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https://www.reverbnation.com/barrywilliams/song/34794680-carolina-barry-williamsCarolina © 2024 Barry Williams Lyrics Music and vocals are by AI Looking back, I've always been a traveler, spent most my life out on the road, with the days of my youth unraveled, I came back to my sweet mountain home. To Carolina your Hollars hills hardwoods and pines (Carolina) like an old good friend of mine Carolina, Carolina, Caroline I wake up to the smell of your jasmine. I watch as daybreak dances on your dew. as the hills come alive, I imagine. it's all God's creatures, saying I love you. To Carolina Your Hollars hills and pines (Carolina) Like an old good friend of mine Carolina, Carolina, Caroline The road was long, That brought me home. It's where I'll stay, Till they bury my bones. In Carolina, Carolina, Caroline I went searching, For the end of the rainbow. Just to find my pot of gold, was here at home. In Carolina Carolina, Carolina, The road was long, That brought me home. It's where I'll stay. Carolina, Carolina, Caroline Till they bury my bones. Carolina
Last edited by Barry Williams; 01/12/25 07:02 PM. Reason: Wanted to add music was created using AI
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I like the lyric....the music jumps right out from the lines.AI software likes that...lol. Bill
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Apologies, I see I've posted this in the wrong section.
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Not much traffic, and well marked, so is ok. I heard this one as a bluegrass lyric, as well. Bill
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Bill, I get that feel from it too but liked the slower pace better.
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Hi Barry,
I can move it for you. (Assuming you wanted it in A.I.?). I will check back if/when you confirm that for me. It has a nice production, and if it IS A.I. I like that it is scaled back rather than a huge sound. I agree with Bill that this reads like a Bluegrass screed. That is the fun of A.I. in that you can hear it is any style to see what works best.
There is nothing wrong with the lyric, though I wonder if you could develop it to tell an actual story or impart how Carolina has positively (or negatively) impacted the narrator. There's a lot of creative approaches to praising and giving accolades to a place. But including an element of narrative (say, like using Carolina's virtues to tell the story of your life, your love, your family, your history, your struggles or faults and so on. You could tell a ghost story or find an interesting historical event, or just make one up and then write an interesting story with a point or a conclusion or moral to the story or how a place can change you from this person to that.
In fact, I was thinking, as a fun exercise, that those using A.I. could have a writing challenge thing where each writes and tells a story based on that weeks Challenge and using A.I. to present it in various styles etc. All just for fun of course.
Let me know if that sounds interesting.
Brian
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Hi Brian!
Thank you for taking the time to listen, and comment. I had a few versions of this as a bluegrass tune, but preferred the slower pace since that's where my head was at when I wrote it, and this version was very close to the melody I had in my head while writing it. The slower pace was the thing I liked most about living in the Carolinas, if I do a re-write using your suggestions, the slower paced life would be what I'd most likely emphasize.
I think writing challenges are a lot of fun, whether we would be given a subject, or theme to write about. also, in my mind the thing I find the hardest to do is to write to existing music, I've done it before, and I think I got better because of it. As far as moving this to the AI section, I will leave that up to you, I will be posting in AI next time.
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Hey Barry,
This has that good, ole, down home, "Country Roads" vibe, man. Nicely done, sir!
Peace,
Dave
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David, thanks I like how it turned out too. I appreciate you taking the time to comment.
I like your quote by the way, I always say where there's a Williams there's a way.
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Yeah not sure I hear bluegrass in this seems classic country to me, but the lyrics make it a good song. Well structured, good imagery.
The vocals I think give it away, something "software ish" about ai vocals .
But think you got a nice result.
Personally I dint think we need an ai section, the songs get buried there.
I think three MP3 spots would cover everybody.
But good tune man.
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Fdemetrio, Thanks, I did a couple versions of this one trying bluegrass, but to my ear, and how I heard it as I wrote it was too slow for bluegrass to me.
As a guy who can't play anything AI helps me to get the lyrics into a format that I can share how I hear it, I know some are opposed to AI, but if it's my lyric, and close to my melody, I feel like I can still call it mine.
Nothing against bluegrass, just not this time.
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Hey Barry,
This has that good, ole, down home, "Country Roads" vibe, man. Nicely done, sir!
Peace,
Dave Thanks Dave, I will get around to listening to some of yours too, been working 7 days, should have some time to kill soon though.
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Barry,
Love the melody and the sentiment--feels homespun country/bluegrass to me. Really nice lift!
Lyrically, like Brian suggested with maybe insert some "Carolina qualifying" real thoughts other than "all metaphors"--though I like some metaphors for sure, maybe also a story line of why/what felt negative about your impetuous youth travels for more contrast--example: (Maybe be more specific about, "life out on the road)." I know it can be challenging when verses are short, so perhaps one line tweaked on each contrasting story line would compliment each other lyrically to give the song slightly more story and interest?
AI is interesting, not something I've delved into however.
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Eddie, what do you think of changing the chorus, or adding a line to the chorus to
To Carolina
your Hollars hills and pines
(Carolina)
No more running all the time - or something to that effect?
Carolina, Carolina, Caroline
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My first reaction is yeah, that may help the "abbreviated" feel you have going and you've also inserted some "story" --running........which implies some action. You could then maybe in last chorus contrast or build on that action by saying something to the effect, "I never needing to run?" Give listeners a way to identify with lyrics when being expressionistic. You not writing a detailed song, but think of giving the lyrics some glue. I think it is always a cool challenge to "say very little, yet, say a lot." Simple and clever is a good think IMO with lyrics. Sometimes just tweaking one line in a song can make a strong impact.......
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I like the lyric - naturally enough, as I'm in North Carolina  It reminds me I have a song about Carolina that I need to go back and work on. The great thing about Carolina is that it's one of those four-syllable states that rolls off the tongue - harder to write a song about Washington, Utah or Rhode Island. Nice use of alliteration that makes lines like these easy on the ear.... "Your Hollars hills hardwoods and pines" and "I watch as daybreak dances on your dew." I think AI has done a good job here. It's always going to have a slightly generic feel about it, but it works well.
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