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Recently, I’ve been looking at some of Albert Einstein’s most famous quotes. Some of them have been inspiring me to write songs to go with them. Here's another one. Einstein once said: “You can’t blame gravity for falling in love”. So true. This is what I came up with. I envision music with a country vibe.

Falling in Love

[Verse]
I don't know how it started, it just felt so right
A pull I can't deny, a force I can't fight
Every smile you give lifts me off the ground
Like gravity’s gone, I’m floating all around

[Pre-Chorus]
Some things we can't control, they just happen on their own
When they do you know, you know, you know

[Chorus]
You can't blame gravity for falling in love
It’s a force stronger than the stars above
I can’t explain it, but I feel it in my bones
If you can’t say it simply, then you don’t know the tone
Falling in love, falling in love
You can’t blame gravity for falling in love

[Verse]
I try to find the words, but they slip away so fast
This feeling’s too deep, and it’s built to last
Every look you give pulls me in even more
Like a secret language that only we adore

[Pre-Chorus]
Some things we can’t define, they just feel too real
In your eyes, I see all that I can’t explain but feel

[Chorus]
You can't blame gravity for falling in love
It’s a force stronger than the stars above
I can’t explain it, but I feel it in my bones
If you can’t say it simply, then you don’t know the tone
Falling in love, falling in love
You can’t blame gravity for falling in love

[Bridge]
It’s not about the words, it’s the rhythm, the rhyme
A mystery we find when our hearts align
Love’s not a puzzle, it’s a force untamed
And when it finds you, you’ll never be the same

[Chorus]
You can't blame gravity for falling in love
It’s a force stronger than the stars above
I can’t explain it, but I feel it in my bones
If you can’t say it simply, then you don’t know the tone
Falling in love, falling in love
You can’t blame gravity for falling in love

[Outro]
You can’t blame gravity for falling in love
Falling in love, falling in love, falling in love
Whoa, you can’t blame gravity for falling in love

Last edited by Rob B.; 12/10/24 01:46 PM.
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I think you should definitely simplify the Chorus.
[Chorus]
You can't blame gravity for falling in love
It’s a force stronger than the stars above
I can’t explain it, but I feel it in my bones
If you can’t say it simply, then you don’t know the tone
Falling in love, falling in love
You can’t blame gravity for falling in love

(An option; the bones/tone Lines seem more 'expositional', 'explaining' or 'setting up' the concept, than 'summational', getting to the point, the gist of the Song. Your Coda [Outro] simplifies, similarly.)
[Chorus]
You can't blame gravity for falling in love
It’s stronger than the stars above
Falling in love, falling in love
You can’t blame gravity for falling in love

"Falling In Love" Copyright Dec. 6, 2024 by Rob B
(There will be an Introductory Movement to initiate Hook Factor, Hooking listener interest just long enough to have their attention when Verse I starts. In time it may be a matter of seconds. Or, for this Composition, I can imagine the Singer Character starting the Verse with a pensive, introspective tone, analyzing his own/her own feelings, quiet, increasing in emotional urgency as it gets to the Pre-Chorus)
[Verse I]
I don't know how it started. It just felt so right, (Line 1 creates The Singer Character, the pronoun 'I')
a pull I can't deny, a force I can't fight!
Every smile you give, lifts me off the ground, (Line 3 creates The Love Interest Character, the pronoun 'you')
like gravity’s gone! I’m floating all around!

(A Pre-Chorus is a component of the Verse, generally defined by a variation in the Melody, varying from the Melody of previous Lines, often an increase in pitch, suggesting the more emotional urgency to come immediately next in the Chorus, where the Singer Character gets to the Lyrical point of his Story. I use exclamation points to indicate that.)
[Pre-Chorus]
Some things we can't control! They just happen on their own!
When they do you know! You know! You know (This Repetition can be very effective in serving the function of a Pre-Chorus)

[Chorus] (I'm using my simplified Chorus suggestion)
You can't blame gravity for Falling In Love!
It’s stronger than the stars above!
Falling In Love! Falling In Love!
You can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!

(Verse II might fall back to some of the pensive self-examination suggested for Verse I; not as quiet but some)
[Verse II]
I try to find the words! They slip away so fast! (Deleting 'but' to more closely match the syllable count/Melody of VI Line 1)
This feeling is too deep, and it’s built to last! ('is' instead of contraction, for syll/Mel.)
Every look you give pulls me in even more,
like a secret language that only we adore! (Delete 'that'? Breaks the Line into two phrases)

[Pre-Chorus] (I think Repetition of the Pre-Chorus as first given simplifies, sustains that 'effective' 'You know!')
Some things we can't control! They just happen on their own!
When they do you know, you know, you know

(I wonder if the Singer Character, instead of philosophizing, addressing himself to the 'collective you', might 'own' the Pre-Chorus with the pronoun 'I')
[Pre-Chorus]
Some things I can't control! They just happen on their own!
When they do I know! I know! I know

(Again, collective 'you' versus first-person 'ownership', 'I can't blame...)
[Chorus]
I can't blame gravity for Falling In Love!
It’s stronger than the stars above!
Falling In Love! Falling In Love!
I can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!

(Simplifying the Bridge, keeping it brief, simply serving the function of breaking the pattern of Repetition and Change with a variant Melody, Rhyme Scheme, Rhythm.)
[Bridge]
It’s not about the words! It’s the rhythm! It's the rhyme!
A mystery we find when our hearts align!
Now that it's found me, I’ll never be the same! (Singer Character 'ownership')

[Chorus]
I can't blame gravity for Falling In Love! (Again, collective 'you' versus first-person 'ownership', 'I can't blame...)
It’s stronger than the stars above!
Falling In Love! Falling In Love!
I can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!

(The final Musical Passage of a Composition is the Coda. While abbreviating 'Introductory Movement' to 'Intro' is logical, there is no word 'Outroductory Movement'. Would a switch to 'You' from 'I' be appropriate here? Just a thought.)
[Coda]
You can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!
Falling In Love! Falling In Love! Falling In Love!
Whoa, you can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!


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So my Edit would read/play like this;

"Falling In Love" Copyright Dec. 6, 2024 by Rob B

[Verse I]
I don't know how it started. It just felt so right,
a pull I can't deny, a force I can't fight!
Every smile you give, lifts me off the ground,
like gravity’s gone! I’m floating all around!

[Pre-Chorus]
Some things I can't control! They just happen on their own!
When they I know! I know! I know

[Chorus]
I can't blame gravity for Falling In Love!
It’s stronger than the stars above!
Falling In Love! Falling In Love!
I can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!

[Verse II]
I try to find the words! They slip away so fast!
This feeling is too deep, and it’s built to last!
Every look you give pulls me in even more,
like a secret language only we adore!

[Pre-Chorus]
Some things I can't control! They just happen on their own!
When they I know! I know! I know

[Chorus]
I can't blame gravity for Falling In Love!
It’s stronger than the stars above!
Falling In Love! Falling In Love!
I can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!

[Bridge]
It’s not about the words! It’s the rhythm! It's the rhyme!
A mystery we find when our hearts align!
Now that it's found me, I’ll never be the same!

[Chorus]
I can't blame gravity for Falling In Love!
It’s stronger than the stars above!
Falling In Love! Falling In Love!
I can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!

[Coda]
You can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!
Falling In Love! Falling In Love! Falling In Love!
Whoa, you can’t blame gravity for Falling In Love!


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Originally Posted by Rob B.
Every smile you give lifts me off the ground
Like gravity’s gone, I’m floating all around

Lol... This is the antithesis of Mr Einstein's premise.
Attraction is still a matter of gravity; That's why we "fall" in love...

Just sayin'


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Gary,
Thank you, thank you, thank you! I love what you did with my lyrics. By the time you responded I had already run my lyrics through Suno. I was pretty satisfied with the results. Now I just ran your version though Suno and I love this one as well. The more I hear it, the more I like it. I think yours has a higher commercial value because less is more. It’s easier to remember your lines because there are less lines and you repeated the pre-chorus. The shorter chorus works very well. Here are the two versions. Feel free to comment them.

Robert’s original version:
https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14899715


Gary’s modified version:
https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14900497

Gary, mega-thanks!

All the best - Robert

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The Chorus Line 1 gets emphasis on 'Falling', which is the metaphor of 'Gravity'.
There seems to be substantial difference in the length of the two Compositions. Shorter is more 'radio friendly', short Songs leaving more time for commercial advertising that pays their bills, therefore more likely to get radio play.


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Hi Gary,
I've listened to both versions now several of times and yes, your modifications made a big difference. Your version does have a greater commercial value. I did make some minor changes though. I added a 4th line to the bridge. I think the rhyme scheme works better with a 4th line. I hope you agree. And, in the outro I switched to the "i" instead of the "you". You changed everything to "I" except the outro . I assume that was a mistake, so I changed that section to match the rest of the lyrics. The final version can be found here: https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14900497

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I was talking to a Song Writer today who was telling me about 'editing' Songs years later.
He's also exploring modal tunings and the 432 vibrations instead of 440 technique.
He says it makes the Songs very different from the original version.


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I haven't heard of this before. I think you mean changing the reference frequency for tuning musical instruments from 440 Hz to 432 Hz. That would surely make a song sound different. Right now, I love this song as it is. Maybe in 20 years from now I might want to make it sound different by detuning it.

Thanks for your help on this one. Your modifications made a big difference. Didn't you say philosophical songs don't seem to work for you? Congrats. This one worked very well.

Suno normally doesn't allow you to edit lyrics or add new lyric lines retroactively. I'm happy I was able to make those modifications without creating a new melody.

If anybody here is interested, the co-write version with Gary can be found here: https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14900497

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No need to encumber your ownership to give me co-write credit Rob. I'm simply a ruthless editor. I appreciate you letting me tinker with it. Thanks! Danke!

I hereby agree to be legally bound by my surrender of any rights which Copyright Law might endow me with to you Rob B.

Shortening a Song, simplifying a Lyric, is almost always a good idea.

Changing from an anonymous 'lecturer'
telling 'the collective you' about the philosophical idea,
to a 'first-person I'
had an interesting effect.

That makes it less 'philosophical' and more 'Singer Character' relating first-hand experience, a 'storied conversation' between him and his Love-Interest Character. We get to eavesdrop on it, or even 'assume the persona' of the Singer-Character and 'be in' the Song/Story ourselves.


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Originally Posted by Gary E. Andrews
Shortening a Song, simplifying a Lyric, is almost always a good idea.

Changing from an anonymous 'lecturer'
telling 'the collective you' about the philosophical idea,
to a 'first-person I'
had an interesting effect.

That makes it less 'philosophical' and more 'Singer Character' relating first-hand experience, a 'storied conversation' between him and his Love-Interest Character. We get to eavesdrop on it, or even 'assume the persona' of the Singer-Character and 'be in' the Song/Story ourselves.

Gary clued me in on that back at SW101... Listen to him, Rob.


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Hey Tony,
I did exactly what he suggested. The song is awesome! Gary is one of my songwriting mentors. We worked together years ago when I had no idea what I was doing.

All the best - Robert


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