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This is a new lyric. Still a work-in-progress. As always any comments or suggestions are welcome and appreciated

SUMMER DREAMS
Cattails sway in the cool bay breeze
While starlings swirl and dive
As the sun does a slow fade
In the soft twilight sky

Watchin’ pier lights in the distance
Nights of long French kisses
Slow dancin’ to the radio
‘Long the strand in the mist

Chorus:
But love’s a fleeting thing ‘round here
And it’s never what it seems
Hearts get caught up in the heat
And lose themselves in their summer dreams

Bridge:
Those romantic nights on the beach
Tanned young bodies intertwined
With the moon just out of reach
Like the love they hope they’ll find

Now the season’s come to an end
The boardwalk’s shuttin’ down
The last of the tourist traffic
Makes its way out of town

The scent of coconut oil
Starts to fade on the wind
Til the first of June rolls around
When it all starts again

Chorus

It seems too 'poetic' for a Song Lyric but that depends on the Melody and singer's enunciation.
A few 'deletions' to simplify.
Punctuation to signify full-stop (period) or pause (comma), dramatic delivery (exclamation point).

"SUMMER DREAMS" Copyright September 2, 2024 by rpirone

(VERSE)
Cattails sway in the cool bay breeze,
while starlings swirl and dive.
The sun does a slow fade
in the soft twilight sky.

Watchin’ pier lights in the distance,
nights of long French kisses,
slow dancin’ to the radio,
‘long the strand in the mist.

CHORUS:
Love’s a fleeting thing ‘round here!
It’s never what it seems!
Hearts get caught up in the heat!
(They) lose themselves, in their Summer Dreams!

BRIDGE: (The Bridge, a device to break Repetition, risking Monotony, should come after the second giving of the Chorus. Placing it here risks 'Too Much' Change, Verse Melody, Chorus Melody, Bridge Melody, risking the listener being lost without 'Enough' Repetition. A Bridge generally 'enables' a third giving of the Chorus.)
Those romantic nights on the beach,
tanned young bodies intertwine,
with the moon just out of reach,
like the love they hope they’ll find.

Now the season’s come to an end. (Popped into my head: Dreaming season's come to an end)
The boardwalk’s shuttin’ down.
The last of the tourist traffic,
makes its way out of town

The scent of coconut oil,
starts to fade on the wind.
The first of June rolls around,
when it all starts again!

CHORUS:
Love’s a fleeting thing ‘round here!
It’s never what it seems!
Hearts get caught up in the heat!
(They) lose themselves, in their Summer Dreams!
(CODA)
(They) lose themselves, in their Summer Dreams!

Good summer romance lyric. in the moment. "see you in september", type thing. Good one . I like it.

moon out of reach-like-love hoping to find = poetry. doesn't grab me like I wish it would....if that makes any sense...lol.

Be great to hear music!

Bill