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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/12/24 09:36 AM
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Up at 7 am, first four line rolling around, had to get up and write 'em down, then forced myself to keep going. S'ok. a bit weird. Who Really Knows Bill Draper © 2024 Verse1 Down the road Without no clothes Saw a King Who really knows Saw a Queen Who started it all Thought that eyes About to fall Verse 2 Saw a boy there In the ditch Saw a girl who began to hitch Felt my time about to end I went looking for a friend But friends were few And far between Whats this life so ferkin mean? [chorus} Ahhh but its a macro world Run by tophat magicians And for all us whining micro chimps Stuck with all Stuck with all Blasted munitions Bombed beyond Bombed beyond All recognition Verse 3 Down the road Just up ahead I fell behind The colour red But better now Then being blue And losing all I ever knew [Bridge] Then I met you I saw you change You told me too Keep it clean Keep it mean Unto the left The road ran out And off the cliff Tag Down the road Saw a King Dodge a bullet And loose the ring Blew a fire Out over the cliff Hit the rocks Now a stiff And of course ...instant music: https://suno.com/song/a383da33-bce8-48f1-b926-9bca3f78251a
Last edited by Bill Draper; 08/14/24 08:47 PM.
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But what is the song all about. On a journey, go to war, then you die. a depressing turn of events at the end. the chorus is song once and never again.....hmm how to improve? Here is how a second Suno take ended the song....with a big bang at the end....yeah over the cliff: https://suno.com/song/429fb2dc-53dc-49d5-8fa5-53f9edfe0ec5Maybe I will .get a more focused chorus .conjure a happy ending : king and queen in front seat, two teens in the back seat, hit the rocks, lots of shock, then morph into a boat that sets sail for better days.
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You're not afraid to just "BE" lol... I like that! Let's try some free association... No structure, just bounce thoughts off each other  I'll go first; Sitting on a bench Talking to myself Even I don't understand
The journey is definitely more important than the destination...
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Taped a bit
But missed the gist
So took it too
My analyst
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On the couch
The story flows
But
"Who Really Knows"
The journey is definitely more important than the destination...
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Back in the Park
Sitting in the dark
Talking to the breeze
Taking in the icy breeze
Last edited by Bill Draper; 08/16/24 09:38 PM.
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My mind is full
Of peanuts and popcorn
Peck, peck, pecking
The pigeons love me
The journey is definitely more important than the destination...
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Im a frosted flake
Pecked by crows
But
Who really knows
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Cab drivers
And briefcases
Lawsuits and
Pretty faces
The journey is definitely more important than the destination...
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City lights
And hectic races
I motor out
to open places
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Life is simple
Where pines grow
But
Who really knows
The journey is definitely more important than the destination...
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Attention, attention
Back on the bench again
Who knows who knows
Who really knows
I do
There's a party, party, party
In the park tonight
All you got to do
Is got off your seat
and party right
Disco in the dark
Line dance round the trees
Wave your arms and swing your butt
Do da king tut strut
OOOOOeeeeeee!!!!!
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The journey is definitely more important than the destination...
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