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Can you save me from me verse There’s this dark room in the back of my mind where I go when I'm alone. where my conscience holds me as a hostage. stabs daggers into my soul. pre chorus I'm in the middle of a bad dream. There’s a monster under my bed. His hairy hand, has hold of my leg. I’m trying hard but I can't scream. chorus Can you save me, can you save me? Can you save me from me? verse I have this dream where I’m on my deathbed. when an angel says to me. This is your present, this is your future. this is your eternity. pre chorus I’m in the middle of a bad dream. There’s a monster under my bed. His hairy hand has hold of my leg. I’m trying hard but I can’t scream. chorus Can you save me, can you save me? Can you save me from me? bridge I have problems I can’t resolve. Feelings I can’t express. I sometimes think of suicide. But I’m afraid of death. Repeat v1 pc and ch
It may be totally made up but for many it's their reality...really great write here
Couple of lines I really like
I’m trying hard but I can’t scream.
I sometimes think of suicide. But I’m afraid of death.
Maybe change sometimes to often...just a thought
Steve
Last edited by VNORTH2; 03/28/2403:25 PM.
Creators of music have a responsibility to their craft. When they have finished using all the notes and words, they must pass them down to the next generation with a simple request. “Use these to create new music.”...Steven McDonald
I promised myself that I was going to leave this place alone, but this was too good not to compliment.
I read the lyrics and thought that they were nicely written but the content doesnt have appeal for me. Yet, when I played back the SC, I thought it was beautiful and compelling.
My only suggestion... In CH2, start out the same as CH1 and pick a spot to lift the vocal by an octave. Think Amy Lee. It's her kind of song.
Imho, very worthwhile piece of art here.
Adios, Martin
This is awesome.
""I have problems I cant resolve. Feelings I cant express. I sometimes think of suicide. But Im afraid of death.""
My only suggestion... In CH2, start out the same as CH1 and pick a spot to lift the vocal by an octave. Think Amy Lee. It's her kind of song.
I had the exact same thought...I'm waiting for the song to break out and end with more drama...
Just some thoughts Steve
Last edited by VNORTH2; 07/19/2406:25 PM.
Creators of music have a responsibility to their craft. When they have finished using all the notes and words, they must pass them down to the next generation with a simple request. “Use these to create new music.”...Steven McDonald
I gave this one another try. I couldn't get Suno to sing the second chorus an octave higher but I was able to add some backing vocals. I extended the track with another very quiet pre-chorus and the last chorus starts quiet and explodes with the backing vocals. It underlines the confused state of mind the singer is in. You can find it here: https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14818930 . I personally think that this track thrives off the minimal instrumentation. You get a better chance to focus on the lyrics which are absolutely amazing. In my opinion, this is one of the best songs Carroll has ever written.
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