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My Gun
by JAPOV - 02/17/25 03:53 PM
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Wrote this with TV or film in mind, animated cartoon or something I Wish I Was An Ant https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14815167I useta think it rediculous the way they carry bread dont get more embarrasing they march on straight ahead That bread looks like a mountain they pull across the earth I watch with great astoundment and question my own worth Ants are more exciting than me looks like they're having fun they live a fuller life than me do I even have one? I useta overlook them Now give a second glance sometimes I wish I was an ant I'm sure it has it's downside like anything else people tryna step on you rainy days be hell but, there's always lots of food to eat all rooms come with a view might look like a dud out stuck in the mud but i've got news for you Ants are more exciting than me looks like they're having fun they live a fuller life than me do I even have one? while I useta overlook them I now give a second glance sometimes I wish I was an ant I want to build an anthill and signal for my friends we'd always stick together the party never'd end Ants are more exciting than me looks like they're having fun they live a fuller life than me do I even have one? while I useta overlook them I now give a second glance sometimes I wish I was an ant
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Fdem,
Well, I'm impressed generally by what AI can do, having heard quite a bit on this board and elsewhere . . . but I'm not sure this hits on all cylinders. The music and mix itself is pretty generic . . . interesting for what it is, but ordinary and not distinctive. The lyric, to me, is uninviting . . . I have no idea as to point of view or message. The thing is, I really liked these two lines: "I watch with great astoundment and question my own worth" . . . although "astoundment" should more likely be "astonishment". But nothing builds off of that. The rest is forced, ordinary and off message.
I'm sorry to be so harsh . . . I'm not usually.
I could just nod and give a kind word . . . and I more often do . . . but I think you have the talent to do better than this.
Hoping to hear a superior version of you.
Deej
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Yeah, I kind of wish you were too. 
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Fdem,
Well, I'm impressed generally by what AI can do, having heard quite a bit on this board and elsewhere . . . but I'm not sure this hits on all cylinders. The music and mix itself is pretty generic . . . interesting for what it is, but ordinary and not distinctive. The lyric, to me, is uninviting . . . I have no idea as to point of view or message. The thing is, I really liked these two lines: "I watch with great astoundment and question my own worth" . . . although "astoundment" should more likely be "astonishment". But nothing builds off of that. The rest is forced, ordinary and off message.
I'm sorry to be so harsh . . . I'm not usually.
I could just nod and give a kind word . . . and I more often do . . . but I think you have the talent to do better than this.
Hoping to hear a superior version of you.
Deej Yes you've heard dozens and dozens from ME , decided to comment now I ve done hundred or so. If some are not to your liking that's fine. And I've had dozens that I didn't find acceptable and had to scratch Even bands who records albums leave tracks off the album cause they don't like how it came out. But you're a classic example of how dead this site was. You disappeared completely, suddenly your back. There's a reason for that. And that's very true you usually tell everybody they are great all the time. But ai is not a magic bullet it still takes alot work, time and effort. But I disagree, I thought this was enjoyable. Not a hit but fun
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