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PEACEFUL BLUE WATERS

Catfish ROLLING on A glassy lake
Waterfowl ACTING like they own THE place
Swallows DANCING in the wind
Two Otters GOING for a swim
A few deer BLOCKING my dirt road
NO HURRY NO PLACE TO GO
Ch
I US’TA FLY by billboard signs
HEAR GUNSHOTS in the middle of the night
SIRENS SCREAMING in the fast lane
I was ALL caught up in the rat-race
BUT I FINALLY FOUND OUT WHAT MATTERS
HERE WHERE SOFT GREEN pastures
PUSH UP AGAINST
PEACEFUL BLUE WATERS
v2
This small town is like a Rockwell painting
Rusty ole tractors feral cats playing
Fishing boats PARKED by a bait store
EVERYTHING THE SAME AS A CENTURY before
FAST FOOD AND DRIVE-THRU’S nonexistent
A stray dog stops for a visit
Ch
Bridge
THERE’S a small church up on a hill
CLOSEST SPOT TO HEAVEN far as I can tell
ch
I US’TA FLY by billboard signs
HEAR GUNSHOTS in the middle of the night
SIRENS SCREAMING in the fast lane
I was ALL caught up in the rat-race
BUT I FINALLY FOUND OUT WHAT MATTERS
HERE WHERE SOFT GREEN pastures
PUSH UP AGAINST
PEACEFUL BLUE WATERS
PEACEFUL BLUE WATERS
PEACEFUL BLUE WATERS

Same deal rough work tape , then off to Nashville for a more commercial tak

https://audiomack.com/elvis-nash/song/take-1-brushes-3-2mp4


This sucks. lip stick on a pig , AI will fix it on better melody

I appreciate this method of song creation that you have going here. I like that you post it here in the peaceful envirs of JPF lyric feedback place...lol.
I think I will follow your lead!

This one, I like the verses real well. Chorus good too , but wish for more exposure of the 'hell' bit.

Bill

It's a good lyric, what's with the capital letters it's distracting.

Melodically it needs an overall, there's no joy in that...but the lyric says otherwise.

I guess your demo crew can make it more likeable.

You got an old school sentiment going here, good start

That was co-writer on Capitals on changes
Were copying the AI , I have to talk to session player sunday to get in my Key , It don't follow structures right , But enough to map out chart

https://suno.com/song/51961a92-9721-42dc-9735-a910c4553fbd

I'm changed my mind on AI , its a great tool , All the hoopla on lawsuits does not concern me , That's the big boys on Money


its not far off what I'm doing anyways , Eliminates pre's I had turnaround with D add 9 And C add 9 , lose them. They'll pump it with real players , (They are pretty chords, but not enough punch for this.. C9 ect ) AI is little vague on licks , tinny sounding. mines to sleepy , Ramp it up with AI idea. its a good tool to study phrasing on my songs , On top radio I'm not intuned on what they're doing , Why its not my song

its 4 lines of hell in chorus , then we pay it off , It works pretty good , thats my life

The hell lines DO sound good! looking forward to hearing this with actual musicians.....cool.

I'm tone deaf this morning , the robots in the key of B , But I'm hearing my key in D# , Well will work it out , its still cowboy chords , The robot has great phrasing, So I can follow him
the Nashville guy will call me , work out the structure the robot messed up , its treating the bridge as a pre , map it out , pretty easy. Nashville hates AI , I don't blame them , But I track it out with Nashville players and sing it , so no concern of mine on their war . oh watching a fishing pole all day , I figured out the ducks , They swim by each house , Hey man how about some bread , to lazy to fly south for the winter..


4 lines of hell , pays off , Will see if Nashville fixs a few lines , No big deal./.. another song


Thats Dan , he's slow , but he's busy all the time , i'm in no rush
https://www.danharrisonmusic.com/

If you created a good song with this process, could you be sued by a music person who's song this sounds like? And if you made $10 in royalties....how much would they sue you for, and what would be the lawyers cut?

Its in G on my key , robot B , Its a typical progression in country music ; I don't think its any different then listening to hit songs and borrowing from them. Hit writers and labels analyze what is working on radio all the time , Hey that tune stayed up 8 weeks , lets copy them , AI is just a faster tool. The Nashville guy doing tracks won't sound like the robot, its just ideas to follow . I like what the robot did vocally , but i won't sound like that . I think the robot is a better singer then me . I like the faster chord progression the robot did. My tempo was sleepy.

I doubt Sony cares about ole Elvis Nash. Sued by Sony , that be fun .


https://hearthis.at/elvis-nash-xk/peaceful-bluekolade/TzN/

Use to my advantage , in the final mix , Like shed a little light JT