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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/27/23 03:35 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 11/27/23 08:37 AM
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Damn, how did it get to be 4:00 AM... O_o https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14655845What's in my mind driving me crazy Time stands still, reason is hazy Your strong arms holding me tight A torrid sin that feels so right I must posses you and make you my own Only to please you and gladly succumb Heated seduction lures me near The breath of your aching voice in my ear Tell me I'm the reason your body exists Fill my eyes and leave me no time to rest Unzip your leather, I shed my lace Reveal my prize with your carnal embrace Your relentless rhythm is ecstasy Rewarding every lustful inch of me But you impair sense to rationalize Leaving me to wonder 'bout that look in your eyes So what's in my mind that stirs when your near What sort of question should an answer fear A lingering guilt arouses dread Am I a slave to passion, bound to the warmth of your bed Slave charmer...
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Women ? Yup . sounds good , Explains the 7.8 billion people
Well men in your case , After I heard it
Cool melody man
I think were more resalted to a rabbit then a monkey.
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IMO this is a well arranged song from beginning to end. The lyric is exceptional...and you pull it off without a chorus...cool
The one thing I'm not getting from AI right now is timbre in the voice...that may just be me...there's a slight emptiness in the sound, IMO
Really nice JAPOV..this has potential and s/b on the radio
Steve
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Tony,
this is awesome. Your instruments are absolutely sensational. Your vocalist sounds a bit like Stevie Nicks. I see you're having fun with that new piece of software. It ignites creativity. I just wish this song had a sticky hook line/chorus. Well done.
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Tony,
this is awesome. Your instruments are absolutely sensational. Your vocalist sounds a bit like Stevie Nicks. I see you're having fun with that new piece of software. It ignites creativity. I just wish this song had a sticky hook line/chorus. Well done. I agree with you on the chorus comment Rob...I think the way the voice breaks out in verse 3 feels chorus-like to me Steve
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This is your masterpiece, up to this point, in my humble opinion. Absolutely brilliant.
The guitar work is amazing. Really love those volume pedal swells. Dizzyingly atmospheric and cinematic.
Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 09/19/23 11:26 AM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Had to clear my head of "Crazy One" for a minute lol, so I pulled an oldie outta' the drawer... a little inspiration from Mike there  I originally recorded this in the barracks in Groton, Connecticut in '86, with my old 4track, and sang it from a male POV. I had a radioshack mic, a miniature Kmart Casio keyboard, an original Tom Scholz Rockman practice amp, and an Aria electric guitar... Everybody kept telling me to "shut up and play some Beastie Boys!"  Good times My BoomBox ate that old tape many years ago...  Thanks Guys!
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Great soundscape. I agree with Rob about the lack of a sticky hook/chorus. In fact the melody is dull and repetitive. It still sounds great because everything else about it is flippin' amazing.
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Well... The cool thing about Solaria is; -She's very flexible -She never complains -She's bought and paid for -She's always on time -She doesn't have any bad habits -She shuts up when I'm done with her SHE'S PERFECT! "Fooling Around" with Solaria is easy  She may inspire me to redress the melody a bit...
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I may be in a minority, but I wouldn't tamper with the composition's structure in order to add a chorus.
Creating a faux chorus out of what surrounds the sung parts could be something to think about, but I like the idea of
--maybe some slow, faraway chants of "slave charmer" in between verses could fulfill that need in some listeners.
Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 09/19/23 03:56 PM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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I may be in a minority, but I wouldn't tamper with the composition's structure in order to add a chorus.
Creating a faux chorus out of what surrounds the sung parts could be something to think about, but I like the idea of
--maybe some slow, faraway chants of "slave charmer" in between verses could fulfill that need in some listeners. Mind Reader! I was thinking "I'm your slave..." whispers
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Tony sounds like a real chick to me man .
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