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Breathe
by Bill Draper - 01/20/25 05:32 PM
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Inspired by Elvis and Mike... And an old flame not named Lenora lol  https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14659437The peaches are sweetest in Georgia But I'll never forget dear Lenora Sunset memories of yellow and fuchsia I sure miss California Date palms and rock songs Orange blossom honey Salty seabreeze at Laguna Ginger ale and wine Suited us just fine Passing time on Costa Bella I sure miss California Do you recall, or remember me at all We were so young and so alive I still remember nights in December Cherry lip gloss and learning to love Date palms and rock songs Orange blossom honey...
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Real fine song Tony . Laid back and sweet . I'll let Mike get into all the mixing stuff lol. I don't deal with that ...Mason in Nashville does that for me .
I'm lucky to get a decent work tape off. Well I miss the south Tony , but I won't go there , its your song.
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I like it. Your singing is more laid back and suiting the song well.
I feel a push/pull between the drums/lead guitar vs. the acoustic guitar and vocal, making for a unique sound, though they create a tension that might be taking away from any intended whimsy or sweetness. It's like an aged whiskey with some kick back.
I love the lead playing, though, kinda like a Clapton Brit Blues approach, but yeah, it might be making the song less ballad-like and sentimental for sure. Maybe exactly what you were after.
Very nice. Unique mixture of sweet and tougher sounds.
Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 09/26/23 10:52 AM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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I think you went with a red hot chike peppers feel, which is perfect for a song about Cali, maybe some doors too, and same effect.
I think it's a good lyric, and musical feel
Only thing missing is a hook. You have the lyrical hooks, but I think you could sing I sure Miss California in a way that stands out, here it's a passing thought, but it's the main theme if the song
I think you're getting better with lyrics, writing to the title
Sounds great!
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Real fine song Tony . Laid back and sweet . I'll let Mike get into all the mixing stuff lol. I don't deal with that ...Mason in Nashville does that for me .
I'm lucky to get a decent work tape off. Well I miss the south Tony , but I won't go there , its your song. Yeah ', I was thinking this could morph into some kind of rock jam but I got lazy... Besides, "Free Bird" has already been done
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I like it. Your singing is more laid back and suiting the song well.
I feel a push/pull between the drums/lead guitar vs. the acoustic guitar and vocal, making for a unique sound, though they create a tension that might be taking away from any intended whimsy or sweetness. It's like an aged whiskey with some kick back.
I love the lead playing, though, kinda like a Clapton Brit Blues approach, but yeah, it might be making the song less ballad-like and sentimental for sure. Maybe exactly what you we're after.
Very nice. Unique mixture of sweet and tougher sounds. The lead is driving me nuts too lol... I like the single coil tone of the Strat but can't get the sustain I want without a lot of noise. May just have to break out the Gibson. Yep', definitely shooting for "Rock" ballad
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I think you went with a red hot chike peppers feel, which is perfect for a song about Cali, maybe some doors too, and same effect.
I think it's a good lyric, and musical feel
Only thing missing is a hook. You have the lyrical hooks, but I think you could sing I sure Miss California in a way that stands out, here it's a passing thought, but it's the main theme if the song
I think you're getting better with lyrics, writing to the title
Sounds great! Not funky enough for Peppers but I'll take it lol. I've tried spanking my bass, but it just laughs at me 
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But they have a Cali vibe,freaking great band.
They do skiwer stuff too with no funk
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Well aware lol, Flea is my fav bass spanker 
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Right Free bird has been done , We can tell your from the south lol
I guess you could put a ( Adjective ) ahead of Cal
I miss a side of kale with that California.
Probably to funny , its about this girl
I sure miss, sweet sunshine California.
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I really like your vocal style here--great song, great performance!
steady-eddie
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Lol... I found a new use for my BOSS Loop Station pedal. POD Go allows you to record "wet and dry" tracks at the same time. So, I've been recording takes and bouncing them to the looper. That allows me to just listen and focus on external tone/effects (pre-amp stuff) instead of experimenting with multiple takes. This VOX track was actually just a "one-off" for placement... Perhaps I sing better when I don't think too hard about it Thanks Eddie
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