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A piano ballad I wrote. I wish I had a nice story to tell about it but I don't. I wrote it generally about a dreamer who cannot deal with the real world and their partner who has to deal with them. My songwriting tends to be kind of abstract (or is that just a copout? laugh) What's funny is a relative of mine's son joined the navy recently and she was having a hard time letting him go and she thought I wrote it about them. That's part of what I love about writing and sharing music. People give it their own meaning no matter what you intended. Once it's out there it's not yours anymore. Hope you like it.
https://brucetangmusic.com/track/the-sailors-coming-home

The Sailors Coming Home
Verse 1
Wake me up
Wake me up to dream again
I've been lost in memories that I don't want
This real life can't compare to the rainbow's end
Golden skies and hearts that mend
When broken I don't ever want to heal again
So please just turn the lights off for me

Chorus
Even distant stars can leave a trail that shines
So the sailors coming home
Can still see the lights upon their boats

Verse 2
"I'll be right here"
That's what you said when I disappeared
To God knows where
I'm sorry that I'm always gone
But this real life isn't what I wanted

Chorus
Even distant stars can leave a trail that shines
So the sailors coming home
Can still see the lights upon their boats

Bridge
And as the wind carries me away again
Memories like ripples on the sea
I remember everything
You know you're my everything
You were my North Star

Chorus
Even distant stars can leave a trail that shines
So the sailors coming home
Can still see the lights upon their boats

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why do I hear editors? or even kings of leon? in ballad mode. I'm always hearing other artists, can't help it. This is interesting to say the least, I kept expecting it to really take off, but it stayed subdued (not a bad thing), just an expectation on my end.

The subject matter is familiar to me, we all know the dreamers, myself being one, but some are way out there. "this real life isn't what I wanted" speaks to really wanting to escape big time.


well done, and welcome aboard!!

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Sweet! Nice Vox!

Consider pulling back a bit on the slide guitar during the bridge, it became a little distracting for me... Play between your vox lines.

Great Job!
And welcome to JPF smile

Tony


The journey is definitely more important than the destination...
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Your song has a powerful melancholic vibe that got under my skin in a good way. Great stuff.

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 03/23/23 03:38 PM.

Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Thanks for the feedback, all

Originally Posted by maccharles
why do I hear editors? or even kings of leon? in ballad mode. I'm always hearing other artists, can't help it.
Kings of Leon is a new comparison for me but I can see some similarities in our voices, a bit nasally. I liked their first couple of albums and then I don't know what happened to them.

Originally Posted by JAPOV
Consider pulling back a bit on the slide guitar during the bridge, it became a little distracting for me... Play between your vox lines.
For sure. I had a more stripped down version without that guitar part but ultimately decided I like the texture it brings to the bridge. It could probably be pushed back a bit though. Mixing/mastering is a never ending journey for the DIY musician.

Originally Posted by Michael Zaneski
Your song has a powerful melancholic vibe that got under my skin in a good way. Great stuff.
Thanks! Melancholic is kind of my default songwriting mode. I don't think I've ever written a happy song. You'd think I'm clinically depressed or something with the way I write but I'm generally pretty happy in real life. Just comes out in the music.

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This is the second song I've heard from you. Awesome songwriting....and really dig the vox.
Great stuff!

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Very nice Bruce---felt the outro was not really needed, but it did sculpt the piano melody very nicely...and yeah, welcome aborad


If writing ever becomes work I think I'm going to have to stop

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Great atmosphere in this song, thanks to a really strong vocal performance and production which the simple arrangement allows to shine. Very impressive. Nice dreamy visuals too.


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