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This is a Japov take on a my Year of the Monky lyric.

I sent him a rough cell phone video take and this butt kicking driving music is what came out

https://www.dropbox.com/s/ktkqjn54vuw8w5p/Year%20Of%20The%20Monkey.mp3?dl=0


Thank you Japov


year of the monkey
© words 2022 John Voorpostel

it’s the year of the monkey
it’s the season of the moon
but I really can’t believe
they make me do the things I do
there’s power in my purpose
and a purpose in my plan
I tell you now
I do it all because I can


no one’s going to stop me, I’ve emptied everything
with nothing left to lose I’m not afraid of anything
there’s perfect cherry blossoms and they’re shouting at the sky
nothing lasts forever every season has its time
passing on or left behind it all remains the same
autumn winds are blowing clouds are pushing out the rain
even lives fully lived are but a moonlit night
nothing lasts forever every season has its time


it’s the year of the monkey
it’s the season of the moon
but I really can’t believe
they make me do the things I do
there’s power in my purpose
and a purpose in my plan
I tell you now
I do it all because I can


shooting stars and rising suns to me they’re only names
fire, water, wind and earth ’s the only thing at stake
in trying to find an answer all I do is look inside
nothing lasts forever every season has its time
day by day I’m better every hour less is more
there comes a day of reckoning I’ll know what its all for
I’m master of my body and I’m master of my mind
but nothing lasts forever every season has its time


it’s the year of the monkey
it’s the season of the moon
but I really can’t believe
they make me do the things I do
there’s power in my purpose
and a purpose in my plan
I tell you now
I do it all because I can

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Poetically interesting Lyric. Coherent theme, while wandering widely through abstract concepts.

Opens with The Chorus; a somewhat rare practice, which I recommend if a Song can 'work' that way. It breaks the Repetition of the same old Verse/Chorus, Verse/Chorus pattern so many Songs employ.

The Line, "...because I can...", ending the Chorus, seems to be the emphasized concept, the 'summary' Line, occupying the strategic 'Last Line' position left ringing in the listener's ear as the Chorus ends. The '...year of the monkey...' Line, employed as Line 1 of the Chorus is forgotten by that time.
To make "Year Of The Monkey" the title Line, THE Hook, you could repeat it at the end of the Chorus.
That adds to the overall time, pushing toward the typical radio-friendly time of 3:30, but I think it's 3:14 now, so it might not be too long.
Shortening the Introductory Movement by 10 or more seconds could trim some of the overall time. Unless an Intro is doing something special it need only be long 'Enough' to serve the function, to engage listener attention long 'Enough' to get to the Lyrical opening, Verse, or Chorus.

"Year Of The Monkey" ("Because I Can")
© words 2022 John Voorpostel
(Introductory Movement 0:00 - 0:24)

Chorus (0:25 - 0:48)

It’s the year of the monkey!
It’s the season of the moon!
I really can’t believe all
the things they make me do!
There’s power in my purpose
and purpose in my plan!
I tell you now
I do it all...
do it Because I Can!
Just Because I Can!
(Repetition emphasizes the concept. Last Line, strategic position, left ringing in their ears. Two 'hits' on this Line in each giving of the Chorus, six hits, strong in memorability. I'm walking away singing those Lines. Someone 'hearing' the Song, without a Lyric sheet, might come looking for this title, and not find it because the 'chosen' title is "Year Of The Monkey", a Line they forgot by the end of the Chorus.)

Verse I (0:54 - 1:28) (Timing of the 'Change of Dynamics, about 60 seconds in; good. Human attention span. Whether you start with a Verse or a Chorus, about 60 seconds in you have to 'be somewhere' with 'Change' for Structure to keep them 'Hooked', listening.)

No one’s going to stop me! I’ve emptied everything!
With nothing left to lose I’m not afraid of anything!
There’s perfect cherry blossoms and they’re shouting at the sky!
Nothing lasts forever! Every season has its time!
Passing on or left behind, it all remains the same!
Autumn winds are blowing! Clouds are pushing out the rain!
Even lives fully lived are but a moonlit night!
Nothing lasts forever! Every season has its time!

(1:30 - 1:52)
It’s the year of the monkey!
It’s the season of the moon!
I really can’t believe all
the things they make me do!
There’s power in my purpose
and purpose in my plan!
I tell you now
I do it all...
do it because I can!
Just because I can!

Verse II (1:58 - 2:31)

Shooting stars and rising suns! To me they’re only names!
Fire, water, wind and earth’s the only thing at stake!
In trying to find an answer all I do is look inside!
Nothing lasts forever! Every season has its time!
Day by day I’m better! Every hour less is more!
There comes a day of reckoning, I’ll know what it's all for!
I’m master of my body and I’m master of my mind!
But nothing lasts forever! Every season has its time! (This Repetition also begins to have 'title' power via memorability, qualifying as a Chorus Refrain, ending each Verse.)

(2:33 - 2:57)
It’s the year of the monkey!
It’s the season of the moon!
I really can’t believe all
the things they make me do!
There’s power in my purpose
and purpose in my plan!
I tell you now
I do it all...
do it because I can!
Just because I can!

Coda
(3:01 - 3:10)


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Got that awesome JAPOV sound going again. I would never have imagined the lyric with a musical treatment like this, but it works particularly well in the chorus, which I really like. I'm glad you started with it because it means we get to hear it once more than we might otherwise have done. Musically, I'm slightly less of a fan of the verse. After the first four lines, I don't really want to hear the exact same again. How about adding some background vocals there to switch it up a gear. Even just some oohs or ahs, or a choir effect?

Just a thought. It's pretty darned good as it is.

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Thank you JAPOV for your "just another point of view" take on this.

I was hoping it would "drive" like it did.

And thanks for the detailed look Gary, and you too Gavin. Note any melody "shortcoming" is mine...


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Originally Posted by John Voorpostel
Thank you JAPOV for your "just another point of view" take on this.

I was hoping it would "drive" like it did.

And thanks for the detailed look Gary, and you too Gavin. Note any melody "shortcoming" is mine...
I wish you would post your original John. It wasn't so much your arrangement or playing... but, the way you sang the chorus is what inspired me. That energy was easy for me to cue in on smile

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Worked on it some and here's an improvement of the original



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Yep, much better! smile

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It's rough at the start, but you seem to get into the swing of it. I can see/hear how JAPOV was inspired by that kick-ass chorus. Nice!

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Thanks again JAPOV for taking that rough cut and turming it into a high energy song...

And thanks too Gavin for having a listen


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Well done


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