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#1176459 - 05/09/21 06:45 PM Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) Update  
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Just noodling this one... Very rough draft... All feedback appreciated smile

Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone)
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Second rendition smile

https://www.soundclick.com/music/songInfo.cfm?songID=14253600

Another day, same old story, count the ways to pass my time
Today's another page of never ending living loving life
Nothing changes, nothing dies, prophecy is all you have to justify
God's will in a world that will pass you by

There's nothing bigger than life, there's nothing new under the sun
Nothing takes the place of simply knowing right from wrong
Don't take for granted all you've learned and all you know

'Cause life's too short to waste your days looking for something better
Hang on tight to your faith, you can't change the weather
Count your blessings, you're not alone, we're in this together
Friend, as long as sun is shining life goes on
An' you don't wanna' miss me when I'm gone
'Cause I'm going home

Liars lie, believers pray, the meek inherit what God promised all to be
Try to change the world, you'll find you can't change me
Look around, see the play, a million actors playing parts of yesterday
Stakes are higher but the plot is still the same

There's nothing bigger than life...

Last edited by JAPOV; 05/23/21 10:07 PM.
#1176478 - 05/10/21 03:51 PM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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JAPOv

You are an excellent wordsmith. This is one fine lyric. .....Nothing takes the place of simply knowing right from wrong .... just an example of what I mean.

Steve


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#1176491 - 05/11/21 03:04 AM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Thanks Steve! I'm just wondering if "miss me when I'm gone" is getting across lol... wink

#1176492 - 05/11/21 06:24 AM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Philosophically deep JAPOV.
Well thought through, the kind of complexity associated with some Pink Floyd songs.
A good start and certainly worth pursuing until satisfied.
Regards
John

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#1176519 - 05/11/21 04:16 PM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Oh, if only I could play like David Gilmour... Thanks for dropping in John! smile

#1176531 - 05/11/21 10:27 PM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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I liked the song but it definitely needs some honing.

I especially liked the subject matter, and the instrumentals are nice and punchy.

What I think it needs is just more honing to get the lyrics/melody to fit perfectly into the music bed. Also, watch your lowend on those tom hits when you do the final production!

Good song now; could be a great song with a little work.

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#1176535 - 05/12/21 12:15 AM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Ha! I know exactly what you're saying, I couldn't find my vocal rhythm when I recorded this lol... the original version was a bit slower. I really like my floor tom effect lol, perhaps I'll think more about placement... Thanks for dropping in TC! smile

#1176623 - 05/16/21 09:29 AM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Good foundation and nice groove. Felt to me like there was a mismatch between the punchy staccato groove and the more legato style singing with phrasing drawn out. Some of the lines seem a bit too far behind the beat. I think if the vocal better matched the groove, all would be well.

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#1176635 - 05/16/21 05:41 PM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Hmmmmm... YOU'VE got a pretty good voice... smile

#1176641 - 05/17/21 09:55 AM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Enjoyed it Tony.

I agree with the comments about the timing, but the prosody in your vocals always sound like they are misbehaving to me. I assumed that to be part of your swagger. wink

#1176650 - 05/17/21 07:37 PM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Naaah', just a complete lack of interest in singing... smile

#1176688 - 05/19/21 02:10 AM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Awesome lyrics, JAPOV........the music and melody are rough, but very promising. The melodic and lyrical hook is stellar.
Good stuff!!............
-T

#1176692 - 05/19/21 06:11 AM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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Thanks Tom!

Hey, I wouldn't mind if you gave it a spin smile

#1176787 - 05/23/21 07:11 PM Re: Life Goes On (Miss me when I'm gone) [Re: JAPOV]  
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