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Got some good news this week for this song, Dave and I signed a publishing contract for a one song deal. It's with a UK publisher. Also Dave has a new album out on Spotify, Rising From the Dead https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13845224Songs from the Parlour (David Lekich and John Vaughan) (V) The wind is howling at my door trying hard but it won't get in. The hallway clock struck midnight and I cant sleep at all again. (C) Because these songs from the parlour that keep filling up my mind, carrying me off to the nights of summer back to happier times. Yes, its songs from the parlour, the ones shes left behind Songs from the parlour, songs for old times. (V) This room is my refuge from the cold and lonely nights. If I could shake her memory I just might get some sleep tonight. (B) So I pour a glass of whiskey and smoke another cigarette I keep her picture by the fire, but its her voice I cant forget. (C) But these songs from the parlour keep filling up my mind, carrying me off to the nights of summer back to happier times. Yes, its songs from the parlour, Sent from my Huawei phone
Last edited by Travis david; 03/19/21 04:21 AM.
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Songs from the Parlour (David Lekich and John Vaughan)
(V) The wind is howling at my door (When sung, a very brief 'rest' between 'wind' and 'is' could make this Line more clear.)
trying hard but it won't get in. (Lines 1 and 2, present tense, 'is'. Line 3, 'struck', past tense. 'strikes'? Happening now.)
The hallway clock struck midnight
and I cant sleep at all again. (Delete 'and'?)
(C) Because these songs from the parlour (I'd delete 'Because'. The Line will read/sing the same without it.)
that keep filling up my mind, (I'd delete 'that'. It seems to set up for something else to be said.)
carrying me off to the nights of summer
back to happier times.
Yes, its songs from the parlour,
the ones shes left behind (I wonder if singing directly to 'her' would be stronger. "the ones YOU left behind".)
Songs from the parlour,
songs for old times. (Each word in this Line has to be enunciated clearly, each given its space to communicate its meaning. If slurred together they lose their effect.)
(V) This room is my refuge
from the cold and lonely nights.
If I could shake her memory ('YOUR' memory)(He doesn't enunciate the 'i' in 'If'.)
I just might get some sleep tonight.
(B) So I pour a glass of whiskey
and smoke another cigarette
I keep her picture by the fire, (YOUR picture)
but its her voice I cant forget. (YOUR voice)
(C) But these songs from the parlour (Delete 'But'?)
keep filling up my mind, (You've deleted 'that' in this second giving of the Chorus. See the difference it makes?)
carrying me off to the nights of summer
back to happier times.
Yes, its songs from the parlour,
Sent from my Huawei phone (I thought this was a Line in the Song, a 'Product Placement' perhaps, to clear with Huawei and possibly get paid for an endorsement.)
Songs from the Parlour (David Lekich and John Vaughan)
(V) The wind, is howling, at my door
trying hard but it won't get in.
The hallway clock strikes midnight
I cant sleep at all again.
(C) These Songs From The Parlour
keep filling up my mind,
carry me off to the nights of summer
back to happier times.
Yes, its Songs From The Parlour,
the ones you left behind
Songs From The Parlour,
songs for old times.
(V) This room is my refuge
from the cold and lonely nights.
If I could shake your memory
I just might get some sleep tonight.
(B) So I pour a glass of whiskey
and smoke another cigarette
I keep your picture by the fire,
but its your voice I cant forget.
(C) These songs from the parlour
keep filling up my mind,
carry me off to the nights of summer
back to happier times.
Yes, its songs from the parlour,
etc.
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Congratulations! Deej has done a great job with this, both the vocals and the arrangement. The lyric ain't bad either  I'm not surprised a UK publisher was interested. This feels like the kind of thing a British folk band might perform. The ending sounds a bit weird, like there's a bum note. I think "Sent from my Huawei phone" should be the title LOL
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Cheers Gary those odd unnecessary words do make a difference I know
I'm waiting for Deej to respond on your suggestions
Most appreciated
John
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Thanks Gavin a foot in the door after a disappointing contract with a publisher a couple of years back.
Glad you liked it
John
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Really nice song Has a great feel to it. Would love to have you throw some harmonies on the chorus. Well put together.
Steve
Creators of music have a responsibility to their craft. When they have finished using all the notes and words, they must pass them down to the next generation with a simple request. “Use these to create new music.”...Steven McDonald
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Cheers Steve
Glad to know you liked it and a good suggestion too.
I'm sure Dave will comment as well
Regards
John
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That voice makes everything sound good!
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Yes I agree JAPOV!
Thanks for the listen
John
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Nice work. I agree DJ's voice carries the song, but it is a nice melodic hook, lyrical and sonic. The voice makes it seem the song is happening, and the attention is on the vocal. Very good chorus.
If only there was a way to get the music up to snuff with the vocal. It's just below it, inmho, guitars in BIAB never get by my ear. Im hoping to have better success with different acoustic software.
DJ also appears to be a nice guy, generous with his time and willing to work with lyricists who dont have those capabilities.
Ever hear of a guy named Luke Kelly? a favorite of my dads, the voice reminds me of him.
Good luck with the publishing and the album, im mulling one myself. But i figure I need to record at least one song...
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Fde, Luke Kelly? Your dad has great taste!
Sadly he's no longer around but there's plenty of his stuff on YouTube as a solo singer and with the Dubliners.
Dave has a unique voice and talent and yes it's a privilege to work with someone of his caliber who is willing to give guys like me a chance, when lyric writers are a dime a dozen.
Thanks for the listen and comnents
John
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Good to hear of your success. It's a wonderful thing when someone takes interest in our fun / work.
It is a great recording. A very fine tune.
Hope the best for you guys!!
-Tom
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Thanks Tom
Appreciate your comments
John
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Like this a while lot. Sounds from across the pond. Good work, love it.
Kevin
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Good luck with this one John and Deej.
Here's hoping it gets somewhere.
Vic
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It is hard to get much prettier than that.
Guitar is lovely and very tonal. Vox match up real well.
DJ,
It sounds like you have tamed your inflections a little in this song. Sounds good.
They still sound expressive and exuberant, but the taming down lays into this song real well...imho.
Pretty song. Professional quality to my ear.
If you go back into the song...one suggestion is to eq the guitar and cut some low mids and try to back out that low hum. It might make the overall sound of the song a little crisper and slightly more present.
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Hi Kevin
That's good to know, that's for your nessage
Jihn
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Hi Vic
I trust it'll be better than Aardvark Publishing!
Cheers
John
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Thanks SP.
Great feedback. This take is the version the publisher got to hear. Apparently they have their own stable of performers and the song will be used as a demo for artists to hear.
Last week my contact said he was confident of a pairing- we'll see!
Thanks for your comments and suggestion.
John
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Beautiful song guys!
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Late to the party but on board from the beginning to the end
I caught the UK flavour too but to me it was Chris de Burgh...well technically he's Irish
And I was talking to someone the other day about setting up ending tension by going to relative minor before settling back on the root in a song ending
Great example of this in this song
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Thanks Ed and John. Much appreciated your comments and listen.
John
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