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#1175314 - 03/26/21 04:26 AM The Request  
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https://drive.google.com/file/d/1W-PvazN3MclTrCGGfmr0-vC5mNkTwpZy/view?usp=drivesdk

The Request
V1
Another bar, another town
Another song for the crowd
Heís chasiní a big dream
An hour down, two to go
Soon heíll be back on the road
Rewind and repeat

Pre:
He tunes up his guitar, Digs down in the tip jar
Finds a fifty and a note, Somebody wrote...

CH
ďI donít wanna hear another love song
Donít dedicate the next one to me
Iím so tired of pretending this is working
This ainít the way itís supposed to be
Yeah iím mad but dammit i still love you
And iím so done with being alone
Tonight my only request...
Is come homeĒ

V2
Fumbles through another song
Everything he plays is wrong
He knows sheís in there someplace
And even though the lights are dim
(He) finds her stariní back at him
Yeah, the look on her faceÖ says

CH
ďI donít wanna hear another love song
Donít dedicate the next one to me
Iím so tired of pretending this is working
This ainít the way itís supposed to be
Yeah iím mad but dammit i still love you
And iím so done with being alone
Tonight my only request...
Is come homeĒ

Br:
He tells the boys heís neediín a minute
Asks them to play ďThe ChairĒ
She lets him pull her close on the dancefloor
Whispers into his ear

CH
Dammit I still love you
And Iím so done with being alone
So tonight my only request
Tonight my only request
Is come home
Come home
Thatís my only request
Come home
Baby, letís go home

Copyright 2020 Tracy Richardson, Craig Kuchler, Brent Baxter

#1175333 - 03/26/21 11:39 AM Re: The Request [Re: CTthomas]  
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Sure wish I trusted "Google drive"... I'd love to hear this...

#1175341 - 03/26/21 12:28 PM Re: The Request [Re: CTthomas]  
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That's a fantastic lyric. Got everything, visual, an original angle, the romantic tension of a rom-com movie.

Musically, it's good, but I felt like the chorus doesn't really punch through. I didn't realize it had started; it felt like a pre-chorus. It's not the chorus itself, so much as the transition to it. A drum roll might help, I suppose, or maybe, instead of ascending the scale with the words "I don't want to...," start on a higher note and come down the scale.

Great stuff!

Last edited by Gavin Sinclair; 03/26/21 12:29 PM.
#1175374 - 03/26/21 05:14 PM Re: The Request [Re: CTthomas]  
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Dude, that's a hit! Extremely well crafted in every way. Pitch this baby like you're Nolan Ryan.


Nashville demos etc:

https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=431939

other demos:

https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal

Amazon Kindle books by Robert George you may enjoy:

1) Americana

2) Teenage Graceland

3) The Will to Be

4) Fort Mystery

5) Wheel Sea

6) My One True Love
#1175390 - 03/26/21 10:58 PM Re: The Request [Re: CTthomas]  
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Thanks for the DB link CT! smile

Yep, this is definitely well polished and country radio worthy, BRAVO! One day I'll figure out how to record vocals like that.

Now, just so I can say I gave you a proper listen lol...

What is that I'm hearing on the 4 beat in the beginning? It doesn't sound bad, I just can't tell what it is lol.

I like the way "come home" crescendos at the end, but I think the slight pause in the music could be more pronounced in the previous choruses during "come home" to break things up a bit and add more tension to the last chorus. Does that make any sense lol?

Great Job!

#1176099 - 04/21/21 07:15 PM Re: The Request [Re: JAPOV]  
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Definitely something to think about if we re-demo. Thanks for the input and constructive criticism JAPOV.

#1176499 - 05/11/21 06:44 AM Re: The Request [Re: CTthomas]  
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Very good song, pro work and it shows.
Best of luck with ut
John


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#1176697 - 05/19/21 10:07 AM Re: The Request [Re: Travis david]  
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Hats off to Tracy and Brent my co-writing partners. Thanks Travis.

#1176712 - 05/20/21 08:11 AM Re: The Request [Re: CTthomas]  
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Weil written and well done.

The outro is interesting.

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Have fun !

#1176742 - 05/21/21 02:03 PM Re: The Request [Re: CTthomas]  
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Excellent.............good luck with this if you are pitching this ;-)

#1176753 - 05/22/21 09:27 AM Re: The Request [Re: IronKnee]  
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Thanks for the positive feedback John, Guy and Jim. Always appreciated and makes me better.

#1176789 - 05/23/21 08:41 PM Re: The Request [Re: CTthomas]  
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Outstanding country song with excellent production. It's a solid write and performance.

I have two observations:

1. The lead vocal is too forward in the mix even for country.
2. It sounds like there are some background vocals that sing "come home" at the end of the choruses? If I am hearing right, then I would mix these much higher in the mix. If I am just imagining it, then a call and answer to the "come home" with backing vocals on the tailend of the choruses would be a nice touch.

Overall, a superb job!

Props,
TC


If it has strings I will find a way to play it!

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