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Two of a Kind

Like a flower in full bloom
She offers her perfume
A fragrance so sweet

Approaching his prime
It was his time
He was feeling the heat

Both were looking for something
Looking for that one thing
That’s so hard to find
She was beautifully shy
And he was a quiet guy
They were two of a kind

She loved his curly hair
He loved being there
They were so young
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Didn’t need to say much
It was all in the touch
As they became one

Two lovers able to find
That they were two of a kind

(C) PVD

Hi Mimmo,

I like the composition Very good write. Emotive vocals.

I wonder how this would work with a really quiet, intimate sound. They are shy, quiet people. I am wondering how a quieter, more intimate arrangement with more of a bedroom voice would sound. Words and music may sound more organically connected that way? There's no science behind this..just feelings, and feelings are subjective..

I enjoyed listening..

Mike

Hi Mike
Thanks for listening...Worth checking in to it...I'll work a bit on it and see if I can make it work that way.
Regards
Mimmo

Hi Mimmo!

I also like your tune and the vibe you have going. My thoughts were sort of in the line with Mike's, and maybe his sug is better. My first thoughts were that your lead vox feels a little too disconnected and dry for the aggressive arrangement--I'd add some compression to your lead vox and a little more room reverb to "glue" the vox better with the mix--your voice always cuts through the mix well. Maybe a couple db less volume on vox with some compression and verb--JMO.

I enjoyed your song, nice write!

steady-eddie

Ed:
Thanks so much for your thoughts on the song...This was a first draft, still working on the vocals(when I have a bit of time).
I'm hoping to get a better balanced mix, until now I had one track for the music, now I have separate tracks, I'm going to see if there is any more room for anything else.
Thanks again for listening and commenting on it
Regards
Mimmo

Love the lyrics and their structure. Unfortunately couldn't play the soundcloud on my phone.

I think the link was broken ...Try the new link in the main post

I agree with Michael... Your Vox sounds tentative, like you're reaching a bit. Tune it down a step and just relax with it

Hi Japov.
The vocals still need to be finalized I'm waiting for one more track . I did this p[articular track in one take late after work one night., I'm still trying to get the best for it...

I don't think I'm trying to reach, really, if I felt that way I would not post it anywhere. I think what Mike was saying (the way I read it...I could be wrong!!!) was to try and sing it in a soft manner , like whispering, I think he mentioned bed room voice, or some like that.
Thanks for listening and commenting on it.
Mimmo

Hi Mimmo ice onereallyenjiyed it
John

Late for the Ball again, Mimmo... Sorry! I've been absent for a month or two attempting to fine tune some fairly serious health issues. I clicked on the link and the song had been taken down... so for now, I can't provide you with feedback. I did read the lyric... and there is a story there. I also know you are capable of delivering it and realize you gave us ample warning that it is a work in progress. Stick with it, my friend. When it's time... a good song will emerge.

All the best, ----Dave

Hi Dave ....Thanks for taking the time...I just completed this last night, I tried looging on here before your post, but was not able too..

Main post also updated.

https://soundcloud.com/domenic-mercurio/two-of-a-kind-oct2

Thanks for the link, Mimmo:

What a beautiful song. Enjoyed my listen. I also enjoyed reading some of our friend's comments and suggestions. It's all about experimentation when exploring new ways to record and perform a song. Do what moves you and you'll seldom go wrong.

Regards, ----Dave

Thanks Dave.
I am happy with the turn out of this song, Thanks for listening.
Mimmo

Mimmo,

Definitely an improvement! Sounding really nice.

steady-eddie

Thanks Eddie