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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Hi, all, So I’m not sure what to make of this one—a little different for me—but here it is for what it’s worth. Nothing elaborate with the lyrics, simple American standard type take, and my usual amateur effort on the production. BUT , my first (not entirely pathetic) effort on adding a guitar solo. Anyway, hope it’s worth the three minutes you spend listening to it. I'm All Right NowI was lost without you— tempest-tossed into an ocean once so bright blue. In the storm I was sure I would drown, but I’m all right now. I was caught in a bad place; so distraught, I never thought you’d come back one day. My every heartbeat was a lonely sound, but I’m all right now; What could I do when every thought of you just broke me up and laid me down low. How could I see that you’d return to me, and now that you’re here, I’m never letting you go. I was lost without you— at what cost, I don’t think I ever quite knew. All in ruins, everything, every how, but I’m all right now. What could I do, I’m so in love with you, It broke me up and laid me down low. I never could see how you’d return to me, but now that you’re here, I’m never letting you go. I was lost without you— at what cost, I don’t think I ever quite knew. But damn that all because you’re here somehow, so I’m all right now. Yeah, I’m all right now. (c)2018 DJ Lekich
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Deej,
This is excellent. A terrific write - solid throughout. You say "Nothing elaborate with the lyrics..." - I would disagree. The timing of the rhymes is exquisite. The story told is interesting and complete. Nice ending...
Nice vocal (powerful). Nice accompaniment.
Hearing this made me go listen to several of your other songs - a "seldom occurrence" for me... I was intrigued. All good stuff... enjoyed it.
fj
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What do we like?
- the lyric (as described by floyd) - the melody - the soulful vocal - the accompaniment - the happy ending
Guess that about covers it!
Well done and a most enjoyable listen(s)
J&B
Check out our new album Janice Merritt "Am I Blue Enough?" on Spotify, Apple Music, Pandora, Amazon and others.
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Nice little tune skirting a similar territory as "Till There Was You" Well done! -Mike
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I think 9ne got it right. I was listening to this (and enjoying it) thinking it was beatlesque and wondering which song it was reminding me of, and there it was in the reply. I could happily listen to songs like this all day.
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Hello Deej, You're a little hard on yourself, this is a BEAUTIFUL song. Thanks for sharing. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Hi again, DJ:
Calvin is always right. Then, when "double-downed" by J&B and Floyd... this is clearly commercial material. Your vocal style is top notch and the song may remind us of other, similar works... but clearly stands on it's own merits. Really nice work. Enjoyed my listen. ----Dave
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Hey Deej,
I think your vocal was really good...powerful. I loved your chord progressions. I don't know if this is what you were going for but it kinda reminds me of a song I would have heard in the 60's (I think it's just the feel of it, can't place my finger on why). It's not a bad thing. I really liked this one.
Germain
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What a wonderful little love song, Deej! It has that innocent, 1950s Broadway musical feel. Don't know what you were going for but that's where it took me. Well done.
Ricki
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Really Nice Dj.
Enjoyed the sync between the timing of the guitar and the vocal melody. Little reminiscent of "Time In A Bottle." Enjoyed the movement in the vocal melody and the earnest sound in your voice. Could be on a sound-track to a movie or something.
Really works.
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I enjoyed that; a nice job well done.
Just a writer of words
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Hi Deej Good good! Unusual vocal which is always a great thing. Definately a winner Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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To all: Thanks so much for given this one a listen and for the supportive feedback. As I said, I wasn’t sure about this one—mainly, I worried the lyric and melody would come off too simple or generic—so its encouraging to see I may have something to work with here. Floyd: You’re a glutton for punishment daring a listen to my other tunes :), but I appreciate it and hope they were worth your time. Janice & Bud: I’m trying to think if you’ve left anything out, but, yeah, I think you’ve covered it. Very kind comments, and glad everything worked for you. 9ne and RainyDay Man: I worry that with a simple melody like this it might be reminiscent of some other tune. That it has a Beatles type sound never struck me, until I read your comments and listened again. I'm hoping this isn’t too familiar, or worse, derivative of someone else's tune, and is sufficiently unique and original. If it isn’t, then I need to rework or, more likely, sink this one. Germain and Ricki: I’d like to say I was shooting for a 60’s sound or a Broadway feel, but that would be attributing to much forethought to this and pretty much everything else I write. That said, I wonder what a Tony Bennet-like jazz version of this song might sound like—don’t know why, I just do. Dave and Martin: Your continued support on this and other tunes I’ve posted is so much appreciated. Calvin: I appreciate the encouragement. I can be my harshest critic (as I’m sure we all are of our own stuff)—I’ll try to cut myself some slack in the future. Alan: Thanks for stopping in and giving this a listen. Glad you enjoyed it. Travis: You’re not the first to describe my vocals as “unusual,” (I'm pretty sure the first was me) and you won’t be the last. Now, whether that’s a good thing, well . . . . The best to you all, Deej
Last edited by Deej56; 03/30/18 12:38 AM.
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I quite enjoyed that. nice work friend.
Just a writer of words
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