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Floyd brought my lyric to life on this sad one.

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Heaven Knows

broken strings and a steady rain,has got me down
can't play a thing can't even sing,can't find the sound
3 o'clock in the morning
the blues come with no warning
and it looks like they're gonna,hang around

empty glass a seedy stash,on the table
out of gas can't leave so fast,where's my Mable
She could lift me up
Fill my empty loving cup
I'd would gladly let her,if i was able

tomorrow is so far away
the past won't let me go
everything's in disarray
Ouija tells me so
Can't catch a break,Heaven knows

empty dark and this lonely heart,go together
lost the spark to light the part,that burns forever
solitude and sorrow
no dream left to steal or borrow
some memories make sad reflectors

[chorus]

Hello Mike/Floyd,


Good writing and that guys sure can sing !


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

That's a fine, fine lyric Mike and Floyd does a fine, fine job on it too.

Vic

Vivid glimpse of nastalgia in a tasty ballad.

Nice vocals and I loved the bass line. Overall, the instrumentals are quite nice. The production is pretty sweet, too. Oh, I liked the line "empty glass, a seedy stash on the table" - unique and poignant.

The only thing that could use improvement is the musical punctuation right before the last line in the chorus "Can't catch a break, Heaven knows" - the timing seems a bit odd; the second change in that set of four chords/notes feels late to me.

Overall, stellar tune and solid performance/production.

Peace,
TC

Thanks Calvin!Glad you checked it out.Mike

Thanks for the kind words Vic,i'm glad ya dropped by.Merry Christmas!Mike

Another successful JPF collab Mike and Floyd.

empty dark and this lonely heart,go together
lost the spark to light the part,that burns forever

That says a lot. Well done!

Ricki

thanks for the visit and thoughts TC!Mike

Thanks for checkin' this out and the kind words Ricki!Merry Christmas to you and yours.Mike

I enjoyed this. When I read the rhymes, table and mabel thought it was a bit corny, but when it was sung, almost didn't even notice it.

Always better to hear it than read it I think.

Well done.

Hi guys,

Very pretty, very sad..

Great to hear Floyd's beautiful pipes.

Careful with that Quija, Michael!

Mike

hey Ben,ya know i stumbled a bit myself on the name Mable but thinking it was never going to see music,i left it.I'm glad i did,a bit of an old name but it works here.Floyd really made a kind of crazy lyric work.I'd expect that from Floyd though.Thanks for your time and comments Ben. Mike

Ricki stole my fav line...LOL

What a reminder of how much I miss your wonderful writing... and the vocal and music on this is right in line. I was drawn in and really enjoyed this!!

Tammy

Very nice fellas. Particularly liked the base line. It was a pleasing melody unto itself.

Merry Christmas, Mike and Floyd:

Not your typical "Blues Number" but so very special. This one takes me to a front row seat in a cozy, intimate little venue
somewhere near Vanderbilt in Nashville... in my vivid imagination.

Well written and well performed, my friends. Loved it!

Floyd, we've sure been missing your presence and that couple of friends you often collab with here. Don't be strangers, you and your collective talent are sorely missed.

----Dave

Thanks for checkin' this out Michael!Me and the Ouija board are buds.I don't ask for punishment,lol.Mike

thanx a bunch Tammy,i'm glad to see that you've taken it for a spin.Mike.

thanks Martin!Yeah i told Vic that bass line he has here is really nice.Mike

Hey Mike/Floyd,

That is just a stunning piece of work. Really subtle in both terms of lyrics and musical arrangement, and really good on the ear.

Fella's, I'd really finish this one, cos' there's not many who can do beauty and subtlety together.

cheers, niteshift

PS - Floyd, love the timing on the transitions. Magic !

Nice nice, very nice you guys. Excellent lyric and musical/compositional treatment. I'm duly impressed.

Stevie

Mike/Floyd,

Enjoyed this on FB, and enjoyed even more this time around--beautiful both musically & lyrically.

steady-eddie.

thanks Dave,it means a lot to hear from you as always.Mike

A beautiful portrait of depression. I've felt this way a few times at 3am, maybe 4am, which I call "the dreaded 4." Mable has to be a generic term for his woman to avoid comments about forced rhymes.

thanks for the kind words Niteshift!Mike

thanks for the spin and comment Lil' Stevie!Mike

Much appreciated Eddie!Mike

Excellently written lyric, Mike. Is the tune yours or did Floyd compose the melody? Both are quite lovely together. You two do well together on your collabs.

Stevie

thanks for your time and thoughts Jim!No forced rhyme here Jim,the song is about mable,no matter what girl name i used,there would have been a rhyme in this scheme.Mike

i appreciate that Lil' Stevie.Just words are mine,Floyd is all the rest.I do enjoy it when Floyd picks a lyric of mine.Mike

Michael and Floyd--

You got me with this Fine Ballad--Merry Chistmas and Happy New Year to ALL!

Mackie

I like songs like this and Floyd does an excellent job as always. Good lyrics, too. Happy new Year to you!

thank you Mackie!Good to see ya again and i hope the holiday's were good to ya.Mike

hey Kevin,thanks for checkin' this out.Mike