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https://soundcloud.com/irwin-abrigo/i-wanna-be-loved-17

My Friends, Above is a the link to a new track I've produce for this song it is all because of your feedback/comments Thanks!

I Wanna Be Loved

(1st verse)
First time I saw you, saw you
First time I saw you, first time , first time
First time I saw you,
saw you passing by
I suddenly got this feeling
I suddenly got this feeling
This feeling, this feeling
This special kind of feeling

(Chorus)
cause I wanna be loved
Yea I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved


(2nd verse)
Though you don't know me, know me
Though you don't, know me, Though you don't,Though you don't
Though you don't know me
I was wondering
If you felt the same way too
If you felt the same way too
this feeling, this feeling
This special kind of feeling

(Chorus)
cause I wanna be loved
Yea I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved

Come over to the house next door
Come over to the house next door
Come over to the house next door
Come over to the house next door
So I called you on the telephone
So I called you on the telephone
You got nothing to loose
You got nothing to loose

(Chorus)
cause I wanna be loved
Yea I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved



(Below is the link to the first Post/track)

This is a new song I have written and would like to hear your feedback/comments

https://soundcloud.com/irwin-abrigo/iwannabelove

I Wanna Be Loved

(1st verse)
First time I saw you, saw you
First time I saw you, first time I, first time I
First time I saw you, saw you passing by
I suddenly got this feeling
I suddenly got this feeling
this feeling, this feeling
This special kind of feeling
this feeling, this feeling
This special kind of feeling

(Chorus)
cause I wanna be loved
Yea I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved


(2nd verse)
Though you don't know me, know me
Though you don't, know me, Though you don't,Though you don't
Though you don't know me I was wondering
If you felt the same way too
If you felt the same way too
this feeling, this feeling
This special kind of feeling
this feeling, this feeling
This special kind of feeling

(Chorus)
cause I wanna be loved
Yea I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved

Come over to the house next door
Come over to the house next door
Come over to the house next door
Come over to the house next door
So I called you on the telephone
So I called you on the telephone
You got nothing to loose
You got nothing to loose

(Chorus)
cause I wanna be loved
Yea I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved
I wanna be loved

Interesting tune. I like some of the elements you got going.

The 'slice and dice' you do is cool and all, but you are halting momentum too much in the tune. I would play some of the slicey dicey stuff off against other stuff that keeps going. This will give you the modern slice and dice but keep the momentum moving forward.

I can clearly hear some of the edits as well. You may wanna try and make these a bit less obvious.

I would also interpose more lyrics in between the repetitive parts such as "I wanna be loved" to make the hook stand out more.

Peace,
TC

I like the lyric a lot!

The production doesn't let the song move as far as my ear would like. I feel like every time it moves a couple of yards, you yank it back to square one, and it's disruptive enough to make me feel like the song doesn't actually ever launch. So by the time it's over, I feel a bit cheated. Like I didn't get to enjoy your song.

I realize this is a style, and I probably just don't "get it", so don't take any of this personally. I'm usually in the minority on stuff like this. I do like the lyric.

John

Hi Pc & John, I very much appreciate your comments and advice you have given on my song and now I recognize the things that needed to make this song better I sure will be looking into them.

Thanks for the reply.

Irwin

You touched on a universal theme here, Irwin, but I think it takes guts for a person to admit he or she wants to be loved.

Jim

Irwin- the lyric kinda reminds me of "knock three times on the ceiling if you want me", which is probably before your time - I'm curious where the singing is from, how you put it together and are you wanting a rhythm track to go under this? Maybe there's someone on the forum that could do that? Pete

You have a point here, Jim. I sure understand what you are saying.

Have you listen to the new track to this song?

Hi Peter, nice to hear from you."knock three times on the ceiling if you want me",is a song I've heard and yes, I like it a lot.

I always wonder if someone would/could help out with the music side, But I am trying to learn about producing music so I can let people hear my song.

Thanks for the reply.

Irwin

PS. This is a link to the new track to that song: https://soundcloud.com/irwin-abrigo/i-wanna-be-loved-17

Hey Irwin, you're doin' good with this.

The posted lyric does not match the song, however. There are no repeats as you originally indicated:

this feeling, this feeling
This special kind of feeling

With that said, I would suggest speeding up the tempo slightly to move the song along. It drags a bit making me anxious.

Also, try to clean up the entrances of the vocal samples to eliminate the sharp punch of each beginning word.

You got a good thing goin' here. Keep at it!

Peace,

Dave

Hi David, Thanks very much for the advice and for listening to my song.

I edited the lyric so if you have a read again you will notice that.

Thanks for the reply.

Irwin