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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Sorry...Vocals done with a cold http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13401894The Great Divide (Neil Cotton) Those with power and blatant greed Oppressing those with daily needs They don’t want to call it warring But sure as hell it ain’t working for us Throughout our recorded time There has always been 2 different lines On this global nation The great divide is getting greater The top few rise higher The rest sink in the mire On this global nation The great divide is getting greater Those in power make the rules Using banks to print the tools Everybody is their prey Paper loans must be repaid The working poor are kept in debt Its full weight sits on their chest On this global nation The great divide is getting greater The top few rise higher The rest sink in the mire On this global nation The great divide is getting greater If heartless battles stay Revolt is the next stage On this global nation The great divide is getting greater The top few rise higher The rest sink in the mire On this global nation The great divide is getting greater
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The EU referendum to leave has a connection to this.
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Hey Neil,
Sorry about your cold first off... But actually what caught me off guard moreso was the upbeat tempo of the music. It seemed more of a gloom and doom type lyric, so I wasn't entirely sure the music "matched"... Maybe something a bit more urgent?
That said, I thought the lyric was very compelling. The hook is great, you have some terrific lines, such as:
The top few rise higher The rest sink in the mire
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The working poor are kept in debt Its full weight sits on their chest
...and I liked your loose rhymes.
Nice work!! Thanks for sharing....
Beth
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Hi Neil. I think the happy bouncy sound is a mismatch to the lyric. I imagine a much slower paced, modern day Dylan arrangement to it.
Vic
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Hey Neil,
Sorry about your cold first off... But actually what caught me off guard moreso was the upbeat tempo of the music. It seemed more of a gloom and doom type lyric, so I wasn't entirely sure the music "matched"... Maybe something a bit more urgent?
That said, I thought the lyric was very compelling. The hook is great, you have some terrific lines, such as:
The top few rise higher The rest sink in the mire
and
The working poor are kept in debt Its full weight sits on their chest
...and I liked your loose rhymes.
Nice work!! Thanks for sharing....
Beth Beth thanks for your kind remarks re the lyrics. I will rethink the music.
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Hi Neil. I think the happy bouncy sound is a mismatch to the lyric. I imagine a much slower paced, modern day Dylan arrangement to it.
Vic Thanks, I will rethink the music.
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I cut the tempo considerably...what do you think???
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