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Hey guys, This is a little one about my sister. Really not sure if I like it, so would definitely appreciate some feedback The End of Any Road lyrics: You that I can picture in my mind Who has come so far with me Through it all You that share with me my own eyes You wear them better than I do With your smile And I know this world can be crazy at times Some will come, and some will go But believe you me I'll be at the end of any road Any road, you choose to go You who can cast shadows with your own light But who will still Choose the dark You whose paint reflects your own mind You who lives inside Your art And I know this world can be crazy at times Some will come, and some will go But believe you me I'll be at the end of any road Any road, you choose to go
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i like this a lot Nicholas,it makes want to know your sister more.Mike
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Thanks Mike , appreciate the listen !
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i mean in,what's her story,not in a creepy way,lol.Mike
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hahaha, don't worry, I understand!
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Hi Nicholas, Another beautiful song, from start to finish, both words and music. What's not to like? The music is every bit as warm as "I'll be at the end of any road/Any road, you choose to go" and the two (music & lyrics) fit perfectly. Once again, I find your music very moving. I'm a fan, for sure. Mike
Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 03/19/16 04:33 AM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Pleasant melody and sentiment.
Could be said that it requires an explanation to fully understand.
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Hi Nick:
Forgive me if I "take liberties" with your name... but I'm with Martin on this one. I read the lyric first and immediately wanted to hear it.
After hearing it... let me say you have an interesting vocal style but if I had not read the words... I would have been as lost as Mary's Little Lamb. It is also a short song (time-wise) and that's not a bad thing in today's market. Short songs are today's "little black dress."
The volume builds as the song progresses but I would advise a re-take with more backing. Loved the story and this one is too good to leave "as-is!"
I hope you understand my comments are intended to provide feedback and not a negative, self-serving critique.
Best of luck with it. ----Dave
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Thank you Mike, always appreciate the listen
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Thank you Martin appreciate the listen !
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Thank you Dave, I appreciate the feedback! Will definitely take into consideration when I come back to this one.
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Hi Nicholas, NICE SONG with a pleasant feel to it. I wanted to hear your vocals LOUDER..... Thanks for sharing what you do. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Thank you Calvin, I'm recording the vocals separately on the next one so should be able able to raise them significantly.
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Sweet, Nicholas. You have a great style, your melodies are ethereal and your lyrics beautifully poetic. That said, I was hoping for something different musically in the chorus instead of a repeat of the verse music, especially when I know you can do it. Just a thought.
Ricki
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Thanks for the listen and thoughts Ricki!
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