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I thought I would post something really depressing for a change. <G> as if I have anything else.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8523674

Between the Lines
Words and music by Kim Wilson (Alador)

Right beside my rearview mirror, I see the rising moon
Just a lonely world of frozen stone
This road goes on forever, no one knows where it began
But it never seems to lead me to a home

Love is what we leave behind
Truth is what we try to find
Lonely is a road that winds
And heaven lies between these lines

There's a song on the radio, and one I'll sing tonight
In some town that I've never seen
They may hear my words, they may even sing along
But they won't understand just what they mean

Love is just a state of mind
Truth is just a lie that we don't mind
Lonely is a song in three four time
And heaven lies between the lines

I have seen cities but their streets aren't paved with gold
More like paved with broken lives and rain
In your hour of need there's no refuge from the cold
No place to hide and no relief from pain

When love's an aching in your mind
When truth is just a waste of time
Lonely is white powder, well refined
And heaven lies between the lines

Holy Cow KT this is awesome, and what a voice,
Holy cow do I like this, great job

gotta add it to my station

Dan

Outstanding my friend. Love the slide.

Steve

Hi Kim:

This one is a true gem - outstanding!

The hook is superb - and the way you applied it to three different cases is ingenious. And the music and delivery is perfect for setting the mood. Finally, the rest of the lyric is tightly written and filled with great ideas.

When people say, "Do you really hear stuff on the mp3 board that is better than you hear on the radio?", this would be the first example I'd bring to their attention.

If I had to give a nit, it would be the rhyming of "mind" with "mind" in the second chorus. Actually though, I didn't really notice it until after the fact and normally that kind of thing really sticks out to me. So you made it work somehow.

Beautiful!

Scott

I agree with the first three postings. This is awesome, seriously - sounds like Eric Clapton at his best. Wow.

Deeply impressed
Jimmy

Just gave this a listen and it needs to be bumped to page1.



redwing

Wow!!!
This is god dammed good.
One great line after the other.
Some lines makes perfectly sense, though I'm not 100% sure
what they mean.
I had my experiences with white powder, but I'm not sure
if it's the same kind as your powder line?

I'll refere to this gem as a masterpiece.
Thanks for opening my ears here!

Ken

I love this Kim. Flows really well. Kudos on a great write. The only suggestion is minor:

"But it never seems to lead me home"

Are you considering a bridge?

Stan

Kim, this is outstanding, going by this my one suggestion is
keep writing depressing songs,

Tony.

Kim

I sure wish the radio played songs like this again, this is the kind of tune that changes the mood of the listener

The truth is just a lie that we dont mind, is so F**king cool,I think the power of this line is the reason Scott didnt at firt notice that you rhymed it with mind the line before. wish I could listen to this one while I was driving..hint hint.

Paul Gaines AKA Shooter

Wow! I'm overwhelmed by all of your kind words. I worked late this evening and thought I would come home to find this one languishing at the bottom of page 5. So many terrific songs have gone through here in the last few days.

Dan,
I thought you were kidding at first but you did put me on your station. I am honored sir.

Steve,
Thank you for listening and I'm glad you liked the dobro. I'm still trying to play it although I don't know if I'm getting better or worse. LOL

Scott,
Considering the work of yours I've heard, I'm truely honored that you find merit in my song. It' strange, as many times as I've played this song I never noticed the mind rhymed with mind thing and that's the kind of thing that usually eats at me until I fix it. I guess mind and mind are two different words..in my..mind...Oh I'd better quit, I'm confusing myself.

Jimmy,
Thank you for that vote of confidence, I really appreciate it.

Redwing,
Thanks for the bump up, that page one is a slippery place!!

Ken,
You are too, too kind. Thank you so much. You know, the thing you said about the lines making sense but not knowing exactly what they mean, that's pretty much the way I feel about everything I write. <G> The line 'heaven lies between the lines' came from a dream I had. Someone I knew got out of the car we were in and spray painted that line on a foundation wall. It took me two years after that to write the song but the line keeps eating away at me until I did. Absolutely true.

Stan the man,
Thanks for listening. Do you mean a bridge or a bridge, can't keep those straight in my...mind. There I go again. LOL

Tony,
Thanks man, I appreciate you giving this a spin. I don't think there's any danger of me giving up writing depressing songs. I seem to made out of them.

Paul,
I'm so glad you liked this one. It's sort of special to me because of the dream thing I was talking about to Ken. It's actually on my first cd so if you seriously want one just pm me an address..or a secret CIA drop zone and I'll send one your way.

Outstanding Kim! Wow, you really pulled the gold out of the mine with this one! Superb! What more can I say? Best of luck with it but I don't think you'll need the luck. This one comes from the mother lode! Take care.
-Dave

Hi Kim,

I like this one a lot. You're playing is really fine and I really like your voice. One great line after another but this one says a lot,

"heaven lies between the lines"

Very coo.

Ricki

Thanks Dave, I'm blown away by the response to this song.
And to think I nearly talked myself out of posting this one.

Ricki,
I appreciate you giving me a listen. That line is the one that started the process, just couldn't get it out of my head.

YW Kim! It was a pleasure to hear your work!
-Dave

Wow! Wow! I don't know what else to say! Wow!

I know someone who likes you! She's a good friend of mine. I'll pm you iffin she gives me the green light!

Hey Polly,
I thank you for your Wow's and feel free to pm me as I like pm's...and am's for that matter. :-) heh heh (evil little laugh)

Kim


I PM'd you my address let me know what the going price is for your CD, I love to support Home Grown music, F**k the radio


Paul Gaines AKA Shooter

Had to put this back in front to well written to stay so deep in the pile .......


Paul Gaines AKA Shooter

Hi Kim,

This is a super cool song, well done !!


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Kim,, like the others this song is great...you should be proud of this one...WOW is the perfect and only word to describe it..glyn

Not sure how I missed this one the first time around, I am not sure what I like the best: the story, the delivery, the slide break -- hey it's all great. That last verse is a killer, too. Ok, they are all killer stanzas.

Kevin

Love it mate! Sounds very much like a eagles song or maybe kris kristersoffeerson (cant spell it) but yeah him.

Keep it up mate!

Peace
Duane

For those who missed this one...

Cheers
Paul

i really nice song!Mike

Paul,

Thanks for the bump. What an outstanding piece.

Dave

Aw this is good! Love the slide too as was commented on, great song and performance
Travis

Hey folks! Thanks for the nice comments. I can't believe this song is getting listened to in 2015. I posted it early in 2010, that's like a lifetime in music terms. My hands got too painful to play guitar pretty soon after I was last on here so I haven't played for the last 4 years, but I promise to keep coming in to listen. Keep playing everyone.

Hey Kim
I put this up top because I listen to all the time and thought it was time for a fresh crop on writers here to hear it.

Good to see something from you, been a long time!

Sorry to hear about your hands, I have a consult with a hand doc today at 12:30... hopefully he can give me some relief, the prospect of playing pain free is very intriguing.

Cheers
Paul

Hi Kim:

Paul did us a favor by bringing this old post to our attention. Sorry I missed it the first time around, I was here but did not spend much time on the MP3 Forum. This song has so much potential and I hope you "keep it alive" by pitching it every chance you get. For the record, I have a song with the same title.

Enjoyed so much... and best wishes,

Dave

Hey Paul,
It's good to be back among friends, been some dark times of late. I thank you for reviving the old song, I might never have listened to it again if not for finding it playing here. I hope you have better luck with the docs than I did, right now I would settle for tying my shoes pain free.

Dave,
Thanks for the kind words. I don't pitch songs anymore but who knows, maybe????

I also want to thank everyone here for the kindness they showed me when I used to post songs here. I wish all of you the best and I promise to come by to listen from time to time.

bump

Very nice. I had not heard this before. The dobro sound sets it apart, although it's all good.

Well, Gave it a listen. I feel you did not nail the title to the lyrics well enough. Perhaps rework the title or strengthen the lyrics. Overall a good write!

Kim, I'm enjoying this all over again. The title is still perfect, every line still relevant. Thanks for posting it again and maybe share what you've been up to lately.

Ricki

Kim,

Beautiful song. I really like this a lot, great melody and arrangement. I'm not always a fan of different chorus messages, but this one works as the messages are like analogies and the last hook line does reinforce each chorus--which is key. Like your vocal performance, a nice mellow tone which fits the song mood quite well.

Not sure if you're up to any changes lyrically, but the one line I thought might make more sense was the first line of the last verse rather with this statement:

"I've never seen a city, where the streets were paved with gold."

I know the line is an expression only, but using the word, "never" first IMO, connects the beginning and end sentence statement better metaphorically rather than saying it so literally. (No big deal for sure, and JMO, use or lose).

Wonderful write here!

steady-eddie.

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