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Any feedback appreciated! Thank you for listening.

Okay, not bad. Maybe needs a bit of harmony on the chorus. With a "faith" song you're either all in or all out...yes? It's really tough to commit only partially to this kind of song. It was almost like country swing. Good groove. Good work!

i think it's a good song. The swing/shuffle groove is a surprise at first but I could get used to it. I agree that some harmony would give more punch.

Enjoyed it.

J&B

Thank you for the feedback and for taking the time to listen. I thought that maybe with the title I should of explained somehow that it was christian. lol

Thank You so much! I'm a fairly new songwriter. This is one from my first C.D. and I'm currently working on my second so, of course, I want to learn from past mistakes and maybe even re-record those that have promise and good lyrical content. Many Blessings!

I like the song, a lot.....don't care for the production "sound".
This needs a bit more grit, and a lot less polish.
Some decent guitar playing, there.
The vocal is nice....but, needs more soul.
I's say you are on the road to writing some great stuff!
Good luck, and God bless!
-Tom

hey Lisa,seems a bit upbeat for a dark title but it works.I hear a bit of Jesse Colter in your voice and that's a good thing to me.i think it needs to linger on the rougher side music wise even though it's a chrisian song.But i know it's already a in the bag.Good luck with your musical journey!Mike

I couldn't catch all the lyrics -- can you write them out for us in the hard-of-hearing crowd? What I did hear, I liked.

Thank you Tom, this was my first attempt. Learning Much! Thank you for your time and feedback, its greatly appreciated! Many Blessings!

Hi Mike, thank you for the feedback, I've been hearing this "rougher" thing a lot, I'm not sure what that means. Thank you for the feedback, I'm working on my second c.d. so really need this input! Thank you for your time! Many Blessings!

Grim Reaper lyrics
Grim Reaper, Grim Reaper
How'd you think you could keep her?
You know you're mess'n round with royalty.
She's been bought with a price and
all clothed in white
A faithful God who fights with all His might,
Grim Reaper, you can eat this victory.
So Faithful, So faithful
How could my simple heart not thee adore?
Your love is so true, you pull us through
If you could make a donkey talk, well, use me too
Lord Jesus, I do give my life to thee.
Grim Reaper, Grim Reaper
Lord He said he would keep her,
I tell you now it's time for you to flee.
My God has stepped in and He'll do it again.
Your a poor, poor loser and your nobodies friend,
Grim Reaper, You will burn eternally.
So Faithful, So Faithful,
Jesus shows Himself so strong for you and me.
He'll be there to fight, to make everything right.
Chase away the darkness with His glory light,
Then pray us through, right through to victory.

Thank you for taking the time to listen and I've posted the lyrics Bruce. Many Blessings.

I know this is a songwriting forum, but I love the electric guitar in this.... but I think it is several decibles louder than your lead vocal. IMHO bring up the VX some. Good song though!

Mike D.

Lisa,

Hopefully, not repeating too much since I'm here a little later--lot's of good things here.

IMO, I think your lead vocal track is where this song needs tweaked production-wise. You singing is just fine, but as someone else mentioned, a little more "soulful" delivery would enhance your performance. The lead vox needs to sit a little more separate from the mix as well, and don't be afraid to use a little "vibrato" with your longer held end notes which will give your vocals more of a natural inflection--IMO, but just slightly. As other's said, harmonies would be nice.

Great start here, and good job, with a little polish, this will be a great song for you!

steady-eddie.

Thank you Mike D. My guitar player is AMAZING! Truly Anointed! Thank you for listening and the feedback is greatly appreciated. Many blessings!

Steady Eddie, Thank you so much for the feedback. As this was my first c.d. and I had never sang before I was not as confident. I am working on this though and I have started trying to use my voice in different ways. I also was trying to hide behind the music. That is real evident now! Your feed back is GREATLY appreciated. Thank you for your time. Many Blessings!